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Belle, a young and vulnerable woman¹ gave her heart to so many people. She sadly, never got any love in return.² This was never a surprise to her as she had become used to it,³ not that it hurt any less, but it became second nature to her. ⁴ Most people would say that she was a cynic in love, but she was never cynical.⁵ It was more that she knew exactly what was bound to happen and therefore braced herself for the ensuing heartbreak.

She had many fond and comforting memories of her childhood. Obsession has always been in her nature, even during childhood but it never seemed to affect her like it does now. When the heartbreak ensues, the whole world stops and tomorrow becomes unreachable. Her tears could flood a town and her fury could burn the world to ashes.