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1
Original
Owing to environmental protection, lead and halogen
substances are gradually banned for 3C products in
Europe, Japan and USA before 2007.
Revised
Environmental concerns led to the eventual banning of
lead and halogen substances in 3C products across
Europe, Japan and the United States before 2007.
2
Original
To meet the higher assembly temperature, it will be a
serious costs impact of electrical components without
using halogen flame retardants, or even no alternative
materials for this request.
Revised
Withstanding a higher assembly temperature
significantly increases costs of electrical components
when not using halogen flame retardants, especially with
no alternative materials currently available.
3
Original
The customer feedback the quality and on time delivery
problem to our company from last Friday, and ask us for
improvement plan by this Friday.
Revised
Feedback received last Friday from a customer on
problems involving product quality and on time delivery
led to a request for our company to submit a modified
strategy within a week.
4
Original
Since the lack of an effective proposal for demand from
consumer will lead to no in time responses.
Revised
The lack of an effective proposal to respond effectively to
consumer demand will decrease productivity.
5
Original
Owing to the credit card is popularized in Taiwan, the
banking institutions have the completed customers data,
and how to analyze the customers data to optimize the
marketing management will be critical for banking
survival in the future.
Revised
The increasing popularity of credit card use in Taiwan
has enabled banking institutions not only to acquire
extensive customer data, but also to analyze such data
to optimize marketing management practices, which is
essential for corporate survival.
6
Original
A digital receiver adopting the method proposed
here or apparatuses on carrier recovery has a better
tracking performance and is competitive to other
products in the same field.
Revised
A digital receiver adopting the proposed method
during carrier recovery can perform better in terms
of tracking than conventional models, thus making
products more competitive.
7
Original
Automatic Optical Inspection systems (AOI) are the methods for
inspecting layers of printed circuit boards during manufacturing
production. By scanning PCB panels into the system, AOI can
perform a detection of defects and even mark thee defects directly
on the panel. However, existing automatic optical inspection (AOI)
systems have been proved unreliable due to inevitable human errors
as their efficiencies in detecting patterns defects of printed circuit
boards, especially when circuit becomes finer and pattern inspection
by humans take a great deal of time.
Revised
Automatic optical inspection systems (AOIs) inspect layers of printed
circuit boards during manufacturing. By scanning PCB panels into
the system, AOI can detect defects and mark them directly on the
panel. However, current AOIs lack the ability to detect pattern
defects of printed circuit boards efficiently, especially with the
increasing shrinking size of circuits and errors caused in pattern
inspection manually owing to the considerable amount of time
involved.
8
Original
Via the comparison results of the peak value of von Mises stress on
the BGA tin balls, we found that the optimal design of the PCB with
BGA tin balls is using the under-fill glue material. This solution is
really effective to strengthen the entire structure of PCB with BGA tin
balls. But the side effect is that it will raise the material cost and
maintenance cost for a special machine.
Revised
Comparing the results of the peak value of von Mises stress on the
BGA tin balls reveals that the optimal design of the PCB with BGA
tin balls uses the under-fill glue material. Despite strengthening the
entire structure of PCB with BGA tin balls effectively, this solution
raises material costs and maintenance costs for a customized
machine.
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