Homework: Revision Practice

Did you revise your paragraph?

YES:
Put up your hand for some feedback!
Share your work with a partner and
give each other feedback!
NO:
Work on it now!

Agenda
1. Review: Writing Fundamentals
. Paragraph Structure
. Steps in the Writing Process
. 4 ESOL Tools for Improved Writing
1. Essay Structure
2. Introduction to Summary Writing

What does a paragraph look

like?

The Writing Process

(re)Wri
te

Read

Outline

Analyz
e

4 ESOL Tools for Improved

Writing
Revision Key
The Checklist (4 bases)
The Outline
Chart of Connectors (Coherence)

Paragraph Makeover: Before

Paragraph Makeover: After

Generally, everyone has his/her own way of doing
assignments and projects, but I prefer working in a team for
many reasons. To begin, it is very good to know that people
are there who can help and support you. For example, if I
work in a group of smart people I feel more comfortable
because I can ask my team for help. Also, it is good to know
opinions of others since we always can learn something
from the people around us.Moreover, I think that working in
a group is more interesting and allows us to work harder as
when I am alone I can get tired faster, but when I am
working with classmates I feel like they give me energy. On
the other hand, sometimes I prefer to work alone because it
is good to know my own abilities and aptitudes.In the end,
the advantages of group work outweigh the disadvantages,
so the next time you have the opportunity to work with a
classmate, you should take it!

Building Coherence: TRANS/CON

Generally, everyone has his/her own way of doing
assignments and projects, but I prefer working in a team for
many reasons. To begin, it is very good to know that people
are there who can help and support you. For example, if I
work in a group of smart people I feel more comfortable
because I can ask my team for help. Also, it is good to know
opinions of others since we always can learn something
from the people around us.Moreover, I think that working in
a group is more interesting and allows us to work harder as
when I am alone I can get tired faster, but when I am
working with classmates I feel like they give me energy. On
the other hand, sometimes I prefer to work alone because it
is good to know my own abilities and aptitudes.In the end,
the advantages of group work outweigh the disadvantages,
so the next time you have the opportunity to work with a
classmate, you should take it!

From Paragraph to Essay

Answer these questions in a small

group:
What is an essay?
What kinds of essays are there
(genres)?
How is an essay structured?

Definition: a collection of related

paragraphs that present facts,
opinions, and ideas about a topic
Genres: classification (expository),
narrative, process, comparison and
contrast, cause and effect , argument
(persuasive), critical analysis, etc.
Structure: introduction, body,
conclusion

Components of the Essay: Fill in the blanks!

evidence
body
background information
introduction
claims
hook
counter argument & refutation
conclusion
thesis
Note: Terms may be used more than once!

Essay Structure

Analyze This!
Examine the School Uniform Question.
Try to identify all of the components:
Hook
Thesis
Major Claims (Topic Sentences)
Evidence
Counter Argument/Refutation
Conclusion

Summary Skills
Test in Week 4-5!

What is a summary?
With a partner: practice an ORAL summary of:
The School Uniform Question

Skills and Benefits of Summary Writing

1. Critical Reading and Analysis Skills
Identifying thesis, main claims, patterns of organization

2. Language development
Building range in vocabulary, grammar and sentence
structure

3. Research Skills
Paraphrasing, evidence

4. Academic Skills
ECE & humanities (scholarly article), Business (case
studies), etc.

5. Employment Skills
Job search (cover letter, interviews), reports, etc.

Is this a good summary? Why or why not?

School uniforms are the better choice. First,
wearing uniforms make students lives simpler. For
example, saving time. Also, uniforms give students
the message that school is a place for learning and
teaches them to act responsibly. Finally school
uniforms give students school spirit and a feeling of
pride. On the other hand, uniforms can limit students
ability to express themselves. In conclusion, public
schools should require uniforms.

 Introduce the source (APA): TS = author, title, year

Include only key points: Thesis, main claims and
details, conclusion
Be brief: Approximately 25% of the original
Use appropriate language:
Paraphrase
Use 3rd person
Use present tense

 DONT copy (plagiarism!)

DONT quote from the text
DONT include your opinion

Paraphrasing
Writing in Your Own Words!

Write this sentence 3 different

ways:
School uniforms are the better choice for
three reasons (The School Uniform Question,
para 1).

3 Tests for Good Paraphrasing

Check:
Is the meaning the same as the
original?
Is the language different enough?
Are the grammar/SS/Mech accurate?

Paraphrasing Tips
1. Maximum 3 words in a row from the original
text!
2. Keep:
. technical language
. proper nouns
3. Change:
. Reword = synonyms (WC)
. Rephrase = WF + WO
. Resentence = CON/TRANS + CLAUSE order

Extra Practice
School uniforms would help students
feel equal (The School Uniform
Question, para 4).