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effective college
essay
Jill Carrio
Strong and
Effective
Introductions
The Purpose of an
Introduction:
Think of your essay as a movie preview. What is the first thing that engages
the audience? The movie title, so make sure your title is engaging.
The next thing that engages the audience is the preview of the movie.
Producers usually put in the summary of the movie and the most exciting
parts to engage the viewer and to draw them in, same thing as your hook and
background information. Think of your essay as a hot new movie release.
You have heard about this movie through hearsay, but you want to find out
more about the rave and excitement people are saying. What do you do?
You look for a preview of the movie? Correct! This new movie release is the
same as your essay. Therefore, you need to give your audience a preview of
what they should expect in your essay. Think of your introduction as a short
dynamic representation (sneak peak) of what is to come in the body of your
essay.
Title: your title should indicate the topic of your paper. Make your title
interesting, the same way producers make the title to a movie engaging.
Hook: To begin your essay, you will need a hook to your essay. Think of a
hook like the cover to a book. Thus, we tend to read books based on the
cover of a book; therefore your hook should catch the readers attention.
You need to first engage your readers with an attention grabber. Same as a
movie preview, they usually show you something intriguing, funny, or add
dramatic effects, in order for you to watch that movie. Think about it, when
you watch a preview for a movie, how do you decide whether you will watch
it or not? I know, I decide on movies based on whether it seems interesting or
caught my ATTENTION. Movie goers want to convince you to watch that
movie; well you want to convince your readers that your paper is worth
reading. Think of the reasons why you stopped watching a particular movie,
mainly because it was boring, correct? Thus, you do the same in writing.
ATTENTION GRABBING
TECHNIQUES: AKA THE HOOK
Startling
Statement
Quote from
Literature
Utopia theme
Start with a
question?
Shocking Statistic
Anecdote/Scenario
Analogy
When you pick up a DVD or Google information for a movie, what is the
first thing you do? You read a summary of what the movie will be about,
to determine if you are interested or not. Same as background
information, you want to provide a summary for your readers, in order for
them to understand essential information that is in your essay and to
define any key terms they otherwise would not understand.
Hint: always assume that your readers have no idea what you are
talking about; you need to always explain in details.
For your background knowledge, try to answer the journalistic questions
of who, what, where, when, why, and how. Additionally, define key terms
the reader may not be familiar with
THESIS
STATEMENTS:
Lecture: Topic
Sentences
Write your
paragraphs
like
this
Integrating Quotes
into Your Essay
Often times students place quotes into their essays just because
they are required to have a certain amount of sources. In this
activity, you will be able to choose an important quote from your
article, analyze and explain your quote.
The quote must relate to what you are saying and it must support
your point
A quotation shows the reader that you are engaged in a conversation
with the text
Quotations support your claims and lend authority(ethos) to your
essay
Avoid using This quote proves that or This quote shows that
Remember that your paper should be 80% yours and only 1020% quotations, refrain from using more than four sentences
for your quotes.
Do not start your paragraph with a quotation or end with a
quotation
Sandwich Paragraph
Quote Sandwich
Example
Paragraph:
Place quotations longer than four typed lines in a free-standing block of typewritten
lines, and omit quotation marks. Start the quotation on a new line, indented one inch
from the left margin, and maintain double-spacing. Your parenthetical citation should
come after the closing punctuation mark.
Examples:
Ralph and the other boys finally realize the horror of their actions: (end of your
sentence)
The tears began to flow and sobs shook him. He gave himself up to them now for the
first time on the island; great shuddering spasms of grief that seemed to wrench his
whole body. His voice rose under the black smoke before the burning wreckage of the
island; and infected by that emotion, the other little boys began to shake and sob
too. (Golding 186)
Yes, the period on a block quotation the period is at the end of the
sentence, just to confuse people
Signal Phrase:
Name the author, their credentials, and organization they are associated with
Use a verb to describe what they are doing (argued, stated, claimed, asserted,
illustrated, explained, etc.) Stay in past tense.
Example:
Jane Cruz, a psychologist from the University of New York stated, The only person to
suffer from (1).
Notice that I mentioned the author in the beginning of the sentence, so I only had to
mention the page number at the end (in text citation).
If I do not mention the author at the beginning, I have to mention the author at the
end.
Example: Author and known psychologist from the University of New York stated, The
only..(Cruz, 16).
If you state the quote with a that instead of a verb, you do not capitalize the first
word and no comma after the word that.
Example: Author and known psychologist from the University of New York responded to
the audience that the only..(Cruz).
The quote will start
with a lower case
letter if you start in
mid-sentence
Reuben finds it
striking that on his
face is nothing at all
but the knowledge
that the goose is
his (Enger 16).
If you quote and the quote
does not grammatically fit
your essay, use brackets [
] to indicate you made a
change.
If you delete any words
from your quote, use an
ellipsis this indicated to
the reader that you did not
use the whole quote, but
just sections of the quote.
Example: Anthony
Jackson stated in his
article, Why and
How how to use
specific words to
enhance [ones]
essay (5).
Conclusions and
Grammar
Conclusion
1. Start by restating (not repeating) your thesis statement.
2. Summarize each body paragraph next in three separate
sentences.
3. Transition to your clincher.
4. End with a clincher. This is your chance to give your final plea.
Maybe predict what could happen if your position is ignored or laws
are not changed. Perhaps call for action by telling your reader what
to do next, who to call, etc. Turnaround could also be effective by
referring to the title of your essay. Whichever of these you choose,
make sure to end on a strong note so that your reader will say, I
agree with this essay, or I may not have changed my mind about
this issue based on this essay, but it was still very persuasive.
CONCLUSION: A
clincher gives closure
to your
reader.
Here are some types for an essay about the dangers of
smoking:
1. An anecdote: End by telling a story that pertains
to your main idea. Better yet, tell the ending of the
anecdote you used as your attention getter.
Example: Unfortunately my grandfather never
overcame his addiction. He got lung cancer from
smoking for so many years and died at the age of 57. I
was only three years old when he passed away. All in
all, I wish he had never smoked so that he would have
lived a longer and healthier life.
A prediction: Make an educated guess about
the future based on what you know about your
topic.
Example: In the years to come, people will be
more wise about the dangers of smoking and will
choose to not begin smoking in the first place.
A quotation: Like in an attention getter, choose a
passage from literature and list the author. Do not
use a quote to begin AND end your essay. Thats
repetitive.
A question: Ask something at the end of your essay
that will cause your reader to reflect on the ideas
you have presented.
Mini Lesson on
Grammar
You must have one semicolon use in your essay: ( ; ) a
semicolon is a basically a comma that added more emphasis. It
clarifies meaning, so
Avoid this, that, and it.for instance, what is it in the above
sentence. It is a semicolon, so you would write, a semicolon
clarifies meaning.
You will have a semicolon: Use a semicolon with two
independent clauses when the first independent clause is as
equal importance to the second independent clause.
For instance: I have finished my research; now I have to write an
essay.
Use a semicolon when a transition is located in the middle of a
sentence. For instance: I love to teach writing; however, I love to
write as well.
Use quotation marks for quoted material. Use quotation
marks for Magazine article titles, Song titles, story titles, poem
titles. According to Mike James in The Story of Another
Hyphens: ( - ) combines of divides words. To form compound
words: one-third. Add a hyphen to compound modifiers
(adjectives) short-term, well-liked.
Parenthesis: ( ) use parenthesis when you use non-essential
information or explain. MCC (Middlesex Community College) is
a community college located in Lowell, MA. After the first use
you can just abbreviate other than that
Avoid abbreviations: Gov. is government org. is organization.
When you abbreviate you make your writing seem informal.
Avoid slang: That is bull-shit.
Avoid Clichs: To make ends meet (explain what you
mean).
Avoid gender bias: The policemen were ready to raid
the house on Elm Street. By saying policemen, you are
assuming all police are men. You would change policemen
to police officer. For instance, he/she, add the she.
Although to me, this is still bias because he comes before
she .
Spell out numbers you can say in less than two words.
One hundred not 100. Write out numbers you cannot say
in less than two words, and write out percentages.
Do not start a paragraphs with a quote nor
end with one, remember your essay should be
80% your work and 20 quoted material.
* * *And you should have 1 paraphrase
and 1 quote and 1 summary from your
article
well.
Associations: What associations does your word bring to mind? What
association does your word have culturally? Traditions?
Synonyms: What synonyms are associated with your word?
Etymology: Origin of your word, what is the root word and its history? Go to
Google, type in etymology dictionary by Douglas Harper and find your word. In
text citation should look similar to this: According to Douglas Harper her stated
the origins of the word ? come from (your paraphrase here)(1). Refrain from
copying and pasting the whole text, this will make you seem lazy and your
paper unprofessional.
Personal reflection: Cut and copy your text from the first assignment.
Connotation: Example: Mother =love, the underlining meaning of your word
You will have one paraphrase, one quote, and one summary in your essay
(from your previous assignment)
Next class we will have a peer-edit
workshop.
If you are not present in class or do not have
your printed rough draft, you will not
receive peer-edit points. There are four peeredits this semester, each peer-edit is worth 25
points. It total to equal one essay grade and
it adds up at the end!
Homework: Work on your Essays!