Kristine  Balderston  
 
nd  
400  East  2 Street  
Elwell  Hall  
Box  2109  
  Mr.  Roongo  Husky   Bloomsburg  University  
Bloomsburg,  PA  17815  
1234  Bloom  Street    
Bloomsburg,  PA  17815   Phone:  555-­‐261-­‐3528  
Phone:  555-­‐268-­‐2345  
 

Mr.  Roongo  Husky,  

I  am  a  student  at  Bloomsburg  University  majoring  in  Early  Childhood  and  Elementary  Education.  My  experiences  
and  learning  at  Bloomsburg  allow  me  to  continually  grow  into  a  responsible  adult.  

I  have  created  a  balance  between  academics  and  social  life  here  at  Bloomsburg  University.  I  focus  on  my  academic  
work  in  order  to  succeed.  I  benefited  from  studying  and  earning  good  grades  by  learning  new  information  and  
skills  valuable  to  a  future  career.  In  addition  to  academics,  I  participate  in  social  events.  Events  include  program  
events  on  campus  and  fundraisers.  I  have  created  many  relationships  and  friendships  at  Bloomsburg.  
Extracurricular  activities  and  volunteering  have  allowed  me  to  meet  many  people  and  learn  responsibility.  
Responsibilities  I  have  enhanced  include  becoming  more  punctual,  organized,  and  dependable.  

Responsibility  is  significant  in  life  and  building  a  career.  I  have  learned  responsibility  at  Bloomsburg  by  balancing  
academics  and  social  life,  working  in  groups,  and  multitasking.  I  have  made  responsible  decisions  and  practiced  
being  respectful  and  reliable  to  my  classmates  and  professors.  

My  education  at  Bloomsburg  University  has  contributed  greatly  toward  a  future  career.  I  would  make  a  
professional  and  responsible  employee.  Thank  you  for  your  time.   Comment [1]: Kristine, I like the subtle design of
the heading with arrow , and I can see that you’ve
rearranged the paragraphs and sentences (and even
  the structure of some sentences) to emphasize
responsibility and balance as a relevant point for this
AUDIENCE and PURPOSE. 

Thank  you,   What concrete examples of academic skills and

extra-curricular activities could you use to SHOW
your reader what you mean?

Kristine Balderston

Kristine  Balderston  
10/20/2010