Ielts Writing

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Welcome to the discussion class
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Hello, good evening
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Good evening
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In the next 10 mins, we shall start our discussion
Remember, it is a discussion; everyone is expected to participate
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Imakuh Christy
Hi
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Class starts by 8:40
Good evening once again
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Evening
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I know many of us are familiar with the essay type questions
One of them is the discussion essay
Although there are many approaches to handle this, We are adopting the four-
paragragh approach.
Introduction
BP 1
BP 2
Conclusion
Who can tell us the number of sentences we are to write in the introduction?
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3 sentences
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3 sentences
Very good
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3
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What is the first sentence called?
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General statement
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General statement
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General statement
Or?
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Background statement
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:+1:
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Good.
In short, shall refer to it as:
GS or BS
There are many ways to write the GS
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Tutor FidelisNov 23, 2019 11:42:40 AM
Let's look at 5 various types of GS you could generate.
1. The commonly used:
Many people have varying views about... (the topic)

or
It is generally believed that...(the topic)
Many people would agree/disagree...(the topic)
e.g
Many people have varying views about what constitutes real success in life.
It is generally believed that everyone wants to be successful in life.
Tutor's opinion
As a beginner, this may seem an easy way out. However, take note that many people
are more likely to use this method as well. Remember that you first statement needs
to catch the attention of the examiner and to do this, your sentence need to be
unique. If you are unable to come up with a unique BS on your test day, don't
hesitate to use this method. If appropriate you may try something like this:
There are different ways people believe (think,) ....

e.g,
There are different ways people believe road accidents can be minimised.
There are various ways people define success.
2. The seemingly dramatic BS.
Nowadays, ...(topic)...is highly debatable among people
e.g., Nowadays, the best way to reduce road accidents is highly debatable by many
people.
Tutor's opinion
Be careful using words such as controversial, debatable, hotly debated, etc. Some
topics are not as extreme as you might be painting them using those dramatic terms.
Make it as 'mild or soft' as possible. There may be need for such description but
they are often rare. If you are talking about climate change, same-sex marriage,
and other religio-political issues, they might be appropriate as in this case
below:
Same-sex marriage is a hotly debated topic in many African countries.

3. The vested interests type:
Psychologists and sociologists are interested in /worried or concerned about/

searching for etc...
e.g.,
Psychologists and sociologists are interested in what truly makes people happy.
World leaders are concerned about the effects of global warming nowadays.
Teachers and parents are interested in school subjects that will benefit school
children in particular and the society in general.
Criminologists and security personnel are worried about the rate of crimes these
days.
Tutors opinion:
Meaning of vested interests:

A group of people or organizations with strong interest in protecting or promoting
something to their advantage.
To use this method, figure out the topic of an IELTS essay question. Afterwards,
identify people, group of people or organizations that could be interested in that
topic. These people, in this context, are called vested interests. You may use them
to add additional information to the topic of the question. They could be parents,
politicians, the police, teachers, students, medical personnel, researchers,
educationists, contractors, banks, economists, pedestrians etc.
This method could be use alongside any other methods to generate GS.
4. The statistics type.
All over the world, there are over 100 million people serving prison sentence of
various terms
Just last year, hundreds of thousands of road accidents occurred in the world.
In the US alone, there were over 10 thousand suicides committed last year.
According to ..., on average, one in every three marriage ends in divorce.
According to the World Health Organization (WHO), over 10 million people go to bed
hungry every day
Tutor's opinion
If done appropriately, this type seems to be one of the most attractive BS.
5. Using a question:
What, How, Which, When, Where, To whom, Whose etc.

What does success actually mean to people in the 21st century?
How can government reduce the increasing rate of road accidents in the city?
Who should actually keep the environment clean?
Tutor's comment:
This method is also unique when done properly. The only challenge is that many
students may find it difficult to frame a a suitable question.
How to do it?
When generating the question, do it in such a way that the VPP answers the
question.
Let's use this as a case in point.
Some people think that success lies in achieving professional and economic targets,
while others say that success lies in spending quality time with family and
friends.
Discuss both these both views and give your opinion
Generating a BS using a question that is answered by the VPP:
What does success really mean to people in the 21th century?
Answer using VPP: Some people think that success lies in achieving professional
and economic targets, while others say that success lies in spending quality time
with family and friends.
Is the question fitting to the VPP? Yes.
Take note that, if the VPP is not the answer to the question, the question might
not be suitable
Tutor Fidelisadmin
The best one to use depends on the question asked.
The simpler the better.
Look at my style:
While thinking about the GS using the topic of the question, I keep at the back of
my mind framing it in such a way that it will flow with the next sentence.
Can someone help us get a question on discussion essay?
Anyone?
Pearly Joyadmin
Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinions
as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with
them.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
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Pearly Joy
as them. Other people believe it’s good to hav
The topic of this question is on what?
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How to choose friends
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How to choose friends
Good
I may decide to write my BS using a question
What kind of individuals should one select as friends?
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Hmm
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Another one:
People use different criteria in selecting people as friends.

Remember this: as I am framing my BS, I am also thinking about the next sentence
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Ok
Tutor Fidelisadmin
At first, this may hard for you, but when you master all that is required for an
introduction, you will think in 3D.
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Can you replace friends wkth acquaintancea
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Another one:
It is not also easy to get the best kind friends in today's world.
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Acquaintances
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Acquaintances
Yes
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Ok
Tutor Fidelisadmin
But on test day, I wouldn't risk it because it is difficult to spell. Use what you
are 100% sure of
The general one:
People have varying views on the criteria to select individuals as friends.

Or
Many people would agree that one should be careful in one's choice of friends.
As you are thinking about the BS, keep in mind the next sentence which is the VPP
Reference to or paraphrasing 'the both these views' is what you need to do in
sentence two.
Instead of using two simple sentences to paraphrase them, use any of these
conjunctions (although, while, whereas) in this structure below
Although/while/whereas certain individuals opine that [view 1], others belong to

the school of thought that [view 2]
The above structure guarantees that, at least, 1 complex sentence is in your

introduction.
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In recent times, young adults are careful when making choices of acquaintances.
While some group believe that friends should have similar views, others think that
friends should have opposing views.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Pearly Joy
What kind of individuals should one select as friends? While certain individuals
feel that people should choose those that share similar perspectives with them,
other belong to the school of thought that it is preferable to pick those who
occasionally oppose their views.
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While some group believe that friends should hav
Remember the rules in the use of, In recent times
While some group believe that friends should have similar views, others think that
friends should have opposing views.
Examiner will see this as low range of vocabulary

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Correction taken
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Correction taken
It is a good effort.
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Thanks
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Don't be scared to use others belong to the school of thought.
Not many of you will be using it on your test day and it will school you high on
vocabulary. Take advantage of any opportunity to show off
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Ok. Noted.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
If I am to write IELTS 100 times, my introduction will follow similar pattern. Why
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Why
Tutor Fidelisadmin
It helps me do less thinking on test day on my introduction. In less than 5 mins, I
should be through with the introduction. I will spend my energy on the BPs.
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Ok
Tutor Fidelisadmin
The last sentence of your introduction is called SP.
Referring to the Specific Question

This is very simple. No need to think too much
This essay will discuss these viewpoints in order to...
This essay will discuss these perspectives and conclude with a balanced opinion
See details here
Any question so far
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Not really
What time does the class end
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Will give you an assignment to do we will continue tommorow
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Ok
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Olufemi
Thanks so much tutor. I really appreciate this. You really want us to succeed. God
bless you sir.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
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Write the introduction on this.
Imakuh Christy
Ok
Olufemi
Okay
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Kindly review the course before attempting it.
Write 5 BS (use the five methods taught)

Write 3 VPP (use the three styles
Write 1 SP
Submit using this formats
1. BS
2. BS
3. BS
4. BS
5. BS
1 BS + VPP
2. BS+ VPP
3. BS + VPP
1 BS + VPP + SP
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:ok:
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Class starts 8 PM tomorrow but submit your assignment ahead of time for review
before the class
Olufemi
Thanks so much tutor. I really appreciate this. You really want us to succeed. God
bless you sir.
Welcome
Before the class commences tomorrow, study how to write BP 1 and 2.
Pearly Joyadmin
Tutor Fidelis
Before the class commences tomorrow, study how to write BP 1 and 2.
Okay sir
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Ok
Olufemi
How can the incidence of road accidents be minimised? While certain individuals
believe that driving offences should attract penalty so as to reduce traffic crash,
others belong to the school of thought that there are better ways to enhance road
security. This essay will discuss both viewpoints in order to determine the more
effective approach.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Olufemi
How can the incidence of road accidents be minimised? While certain individuals
believe that driving offences should attract pen
Read the instruction on how to write the assigment
Olufemi
Tutor Fidelis
Read the instruction on how to write the assigment
Ok
Joshua
I came late to class
But i enjoyed what i read
A perfect revision
Thank you Tutor, and to all those that participated
Tutor Fidelis
While some group believe that friends should hav
What type of friends is beneficial to personal development? Whereas some category
of individuals opine that it is preferable to have those with a similar opinion on
issues, others belong to the school of thought that those with diverging ideas
about viewpoints deserve to be kept as companions. This essay will discuss both
views in others to determine the type of friends that should be chosen.
Hydee
Tutor Fidelis
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BS1: Many people have varying views on the best way to improve the safety of road
users.
BS2: Nowadays, the appropriate strategy to minimize road accidents is highly

controversial.
BS3: Pedestrians and Traffic officers are concerned about effective ways to reduce
road accidents.
BS4: Journalist all over the world have reported an increase of over one thousand
road accidents each year.
BS5: What is the best approach to reducing road accidents?
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BS1: Many people have varying views on the best way to improve the safety of road
for users.
BS2: Nowadays, the appropriate strategy to minimize road accidents is highly
controversial.
BS3: Pedestrians and traffic officers are concerned about effective ways to reduce
road accidents.
BS4: Journalists all over the world have reported an increase of over one thousand
road accidents each year.
BS5: What is the best approach to reducing road accident?
@Hydee001 , pick the best three from the above to write your VPP
Tutor Fidelisadmin
First of all, which do you consider the best three?
Hydee
BS1, BS3 &BS5
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Hydee
BS1, BS3 &BS5
Good. Use them to write your VPP
Hydee
BS+VPP1
Many people have varying views on the best way to improve the safety of road users.
While certain individuals opine that severe discipline is given to road traffic
offenders, others belong to the school of thought that other methods are
appropriate for improving the safety of road users.
BS+VPP2
Pedestrian and traffic officers are concerned about effective ways to reduce road
accidents. While pedestrians believe that severe disciplinary action is appropriate
to reduce road accidents, traffic officers argue that other punitive measures are
the best.
BS+ VPP3
What is the best approach to reducing road accidents? Some people think that stern
punishment is the most effective way to reduce traffic accidents, while others say
that there are more effective ways of improving road safety.
BS+VPP+SP
that there are more effective ways of improving road safety. This essay will
discuss both viewpoints in other to reach a balanced opinion.
Olufemi
Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the key to
reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be
more effective in improving road safety.
BS1 – Many people have varying views about means of ensuring safety on the road.
BS2 - Nowadays, the best approach to reduce road accidents is debatable by many
people.
BS3 – Road users are interested in the most effective way to minimize road
accidents.
BS4 - Every year, a lot of road accidents occur worldwide.
BS5 – What is the best approach to reduce accidents on the road?
1. BS + VPP
Nowadays, the best approach to reduce road accidents is debatable by many people.
While certain individuals believe that penalties should be attached to reckless
driving, others are of the opinion that, there are better ways of enhancing safety
on the road.
2. BS + VPP
Every year, a lot of road accidents occur worldwide. Although certain categories
of people are of the opinion that there should be penalties attached to road
offences, others belong to the school of thought that there are better approaches
to minimising road accidents.
3. BS + VPP
What is the best approach to reduce accidents on the road? It is believed by
certain individuals that those who commit offences while driving should be strictly
punished, while others are opined that there are better ways of enhancing safety on
the road.
1 BS + VPP + SP
the road. This essay will discuss these view points in order to determine most
effective approach.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Hydee
BS+VPP1 Many people have varying views on the best way to improve the safety of
road users. While certain individuals opine tha
BS+VPP1
Many people have varying views on the best way to improve the safety of road users.
While certain individuals opine that severe discipline should be given to road
traffic offenders, others belong to the school of thought that other methods are
appropriate for improving the safety of road users.
BS+VPP2
Pedestrian and traffic officers are concerned about the effective ways to reduce
road accidents. While pedestrians believe that severe disciplinary action should be
appropriate to offenders to reduce road accidents, traffic officers argue that
other punitive measures are the best.
The first view is about severe punitive measures, the latter is about other
measures, apparently less severe measures
BS+ VPP3
that there are more effective ways of improving road safety.
reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other measures would be
more effective in improving road safety.
BS1 – Many people have varying views about the best means of ensuring safety on the
road.
BS2 - Nowadays, the best approach to reduce road accidents is debatable by many
people.
BS3 – Road users are interested in the most effective way to minimize road
accidents.
BS4 - Every year, a lot of road accidents occur worldwide.
A lot is informal and should not be used in formal essay
BS5 – What is the best approach to reduce accidents on the road?
1. BS + VPP
Nowadays, the best approach to reduce road accidents is debatable by many people.
While certain individuals believe that severe penalties should be attached to
reckless driving, others are of the opinion that there are better ways of enhancing
safety on the road.
The BS you chose is not in the best top 3 you wrote. Remember that this method
ranked lowest among all BS. Except on some few debatable topical issues, this
approach is not encouraged.
No need for comma
2. BS + VPP
Every year, a lot of road accidents occur worldwide. Although certain categories
of people are of the opinion that there should be severe penalties attached to road
offences, others belong to the school of thought that there are better approaches
to minimising road accidents.
3. BS + VPP
certain individuals that Certain individuals believe that those who commit
offences while driving should be strictly punished, while others are opined that
there are better ways of enhancing safety on the road.
1 BS + VPP + SP
the road. This essay will discuss these view points in order to determine most
effective approach.
The VVP you chose is the least effective among the three above
Olufemi Olanrewaju
Tutor Fidelis
reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, beli
OK, thanks
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Udodirim Nwuke Vip January AC Theodora VIP IELTS Jan 2019 , I am still expecting
your assignment
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Good evening
Joshua
Good day Sir
Mirian
I will submit mine.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Because of low response today, we will continue our clas tomorrow
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Kindly do editorial work on your assignments. Avoidable errors reduce the quality
of your work
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BS: Nowadays, road users are concerned about measures to curb traffic accidents and
improving road safety.
BS2: The rise of road accidents has left the government officials deliberating on
sanctions for traffic offenders.
BS3: In recent times, citizens have requested for alternative methods to reduce
road accidents.
BS4: According to The Daily Times report on traffic accidents,60% of traffic

accidents are caused by road users.
BS5: How can the government reduce the increasing rate of accidents in the city?
BS +VPP : Nowadays, road users are concerned about measures to curb traffic
accidents and improving road safety. Some group of road users believe in the use of
strict penalties on road users guilty of driving offences, others are of the
opinion that alternative methods would be more effective.
BS3+VPP In recent times, citizens have requested for alternative methods to reduce
road accidents. Although some think it is best to instil strict sanctions on
drivers found guilty of traffic offences, some, however suggest the use of highly
effective methods to improve safety on the roads
BS4: According to The Daily Times report on traffic accidents, 60% of traffic
accidents are caused by road users. While some group of road users suggested the
use of strict punishment for offending drivers, others opine that more effective
measures would ideally improve the road safety concerns.
BS3+VPP +SP : In recent times, citizens have requested for alternative methods to
reduce road accidents. Although some think it is best to instil strict sanctions on
drivers found guilty of traffic offences, some, however suggest the use of highly
effective methods to improve safety. This essay would discuss both viewpoints to
arrive at a more effective measure.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Hello
Good evening all
Olufemi
Good evening tutor
Joshua
Many people have different views on how to reduce road accidents. While some
category of individuals opines that punishing offenders will mitigate this, others
belong to the school of thought that there are other equally better measures that
could improve safety on the roads. This essay will discuss both viewpoints in other
to determine the best approach.
Nowadays, the reduction of road crashes is debated by many people. Although some
category of individuals believe that punishing offenders will mitigate this, others
belong to the school of thought that there are other equally better measures that
could improve safety on the roads. This essay will discuss both viewpoints in other
to determine the best approach.
Traffic officers and road users are concern about the incidence of road accidents.
While some category of individuals opines that punishing offenders will mitigate
this, others belong to the school of thought that there are other equally better
measures that could improve safety on the roads. This essay will discuss both
viewpoints in other to determine the best approach.
This year alone, hundreds of road accident has been recorded in Nigeria. While some
category of individuals opines that punishing offenders will reduce the occurrence
of this, others belong to the school of thought that there are other equally better
measures that could improve safety on the roads. This essay will discuss both
viewpoints in other to determine the best approach.
How can reduction in road accidents be achieved? Whereas some category of

individuals opines that punishing offenders will mitigate this, others belong to
the school of thought that there are other equally better measures that could
improve safety on the roads. This essay will discuss both viewpoints in other to
determine the best approach.
Tutor Fidelis
Good evening all
Good evening Sir
Tutor Fidelisadmin
How many people are here for the class
Joshua
Sir, am here oh....fully ready for the class
Mirian
I'm here
Tutor Fidelisadmin
We need at least participants
Joshua
Ayah...we are two now
Mirian
BS1. It is generally believed that safe driving should be prioritized and
encouraged.
BS2. Nowadays, there are rising controversies with regards to the best way to
reduce road accidents.
BS3. The government and road safety officials are concerned about the best way to
curb road mishaps.
BS4. According to emergency response team, 2 in every 4 emergency call is as a

result of road accident.
BS5. What can be done to sensitize road users on the need for safety?
BS + VPP
1. It is generally believed that safe driving should be prioritized and encouraged.
While certain individuals opine that stringent rules should be put in place to curb
this problem, others belong to the school of thought that there are effective ways
of achieving road safety.
BS + VPP
2. Nowadays, there are rising controversies with regards to the best way to reduce
road accidents. Although certain group of people believe that punishing traffic
offenders will mitigate accidents, others opine that there are other ways of
enhancing the use of road.
BS+VPP
3. The government and road safety officials are concerned about the best way to
curb road mishaps. Whereas some group believe that harsh corrective measures should
be issued to road offenders, others are of the school of thought that there
approaches to yield a better result.
BS+ VPP+SQ
The government and road safety officials are concerned about the best way to curb
road mishaps. Whereas some group believe that harsh corrective measures should be
issued to road offenders, others are of the school of thought that there approaches
to yield a better result. This essay will discuss this viewpoints in order to give
a balanced opinion.
Joshua
People should enter the class oh
Mirian
Pla let's go on. My exam is next month
Joshua
Pls Sir...mine is in 13 days oh
Fidelia Coker
I'm here
Tutor Fidelisadmin
We have touch how to do your introduction
Joshua
Yes Sir
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Let's look into how we can handle the BPs
Joshua
Okay Sir
Fidelia Coker
Oksir
Tutor Fidelisadmin
In a discussion essay, simply start your sentence in BP 1 with
On the one hand,

If you struggle developing your BP, start with this easy sentence.
On the one hand, there is a major reason some people think that (view 1).
Joshua
Hmmm
Tutor Fidelisadmin
It helps you to start well
Mirian
Ok
Joshua
Okay Sir
Tutor Fidelisadmin
In your second sentence, state your reason thus: The reason is that ...
Fidelia Coker
Ok
Tutor Fidelisadmin
In your 3rd sentence, explain the reason. You may start like this.
This is because... or
In other words,...
etc
Mirian
Following. Very simplified
Joshua
Thanks Sir
Tutor Fidelisadmin
In your 4th sentence, give an example. We are going to dedicate a class for this
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Wow. I havè been waiting
N missed the class
Tutor Fidelisadmin
In your 5th sentence, conclude your paragraph
Let's put this into practice
Joshua
Okay Sir
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Some people say that sports plays an important role in our society, others believe
that it is just for leisure.
Discuss both views and give your opinion

BP
Sentence 1.
On the one hand, there is a major reason certain individuals feel sports are vital
in the society.
Mirian
This is because it.......
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Mirian
This is because it.......
Not yet
Sentence 2
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On the one hand, there is a major reason some people think that sport plays a vital
role in our community.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
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On the one hand, there is a major reason some people think that sport plays a vital
role in our community.
Nice
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The reason is that, through sport, people of all works of life can gather to
bond,network and be eased of stress.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
This reason is that, when sporting events are organised, they tend to unit people.
Joshua
Tutor Fidelis
On the one hand, there is a major reason certain individuals feel sports are vital
in the society.
This reason is that it foster unity among people of different background.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
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The reason is that, through sport, people of all works of life can gather to
The reason is that, through sport, people of all works walks of life can gather to
Joshua
It fosters...
different backgrounds
Joshua
Tutor Fidelis
It fosters... different backgrounds
Noted Sir, thanks
Fidelia Coker
It also brings about team bonding
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Fidelia Coker
It also brings about team bonding
You have to write it the way others are doing it
Fidelia Coker
Okay
Tutor Fidelisadmin
The 3rd sentence is to explain the 2nd sentence
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Tutor Fidelis
The reason is that, through sport, people of all works walks of life can gather to
Thanks Tutor
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Before you write your 3rd sentence, note this statement
Hydee
The reason is that sporting activities bring people of different backgrounds
together regardless of their tribe.
Fidelia Coker
This is because it also brings about team bounding in our community
Tutor Fidelisadmin
The above recommendation is a not a hard and fast rule. It is just a guide
You may decide to use an example to explain your point
There is nothing wrong about that
Fidelia Coker
Okay sir
U.N
This is because, sport creates an avenue for individuals with common interests to
meet at a particular destination to participate in activities of similar interests
and also presents a topic for discussion that is familiar, exciting and engaging
for all participants.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
If a good example comes to your mind, don't hesitate to use it. It is not mandatory
your write 5 sentences. It can be 4,5, 6
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This is because, sport creates an avenue for individuals with common interests to
meet at a particular destination to participat
Keep it simple. This rather too long and complicated.
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Noted
With thanks
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Hydee
The reason is that sporting activities bring people of different backgrounds
together regardless of their tribe.
Avoid the word tribe. Use more refined words like, ethnic groups, races,
nationalities etc
Fidelia Coker
This is because it also brings about team bounding in our community
The word also is not needed in this context. Also means in addition. In addition to
what???
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This is because with sports, people of similar interests have an avenue to discuss
while being excited.
Fidelia Coker
Thnk u noted
Hydee
Tutor Fidelis
Avoid the word tribe. Use more refined words like, ethnic groups, races,
nationalities etc
Ok
Tutor Fidelisadmin
U.N
This is because with sports, people of similar interests have an avenue to discuss
This is because with sports people of similar interests have an avenue to discuss
No agreement between sports and an avenue
I am just afraid how you are going to explain that without running into any
problem.
Tutor Fidelis
while being excited. No agreement between spo
When you want to state your reason, take note of the following
Use a generic and summarising words that require further explanation for clarity
Joshua
Joshua
For instrace, In Nigeria with high rate of ethnic segregation, Nigerians still
support the national football team irrespective of the player's ethnic
affiliations.
Joshua
For instrace, In Nigeria with high rate of ethnic segregation, Nigerians still
support the national football team irrespective
For instance, In Nigeria with high rate of ethnic segregation, Nigerians still
support the national football team irrespective of the player's ethnic
affiliations.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
This need for further explanation open up which will give more to write one
Take for example.
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Tutor Fidelis
while being excited. No agreement between spo
I am sinking myself
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Using the word unity or that sports unite people, the statement is still open
The question that follows is, What do you mean, or how?
This will give you an opportunity to tell us things like this or that
Joshua
Hmmmmm
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The reason is that through sports, people of all walks of life in the community can
unite to network. This is because, sports creates an environment for community
members to participate in activities of similar interests and sports provide a
common topic for discussion.
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Another example:
Joshua
In other words, deeply divided communities in religion or enthicity could work
together toward the success of sporting activities.
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Please pay attention first
Joshua
Okay Sir
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On the one hand, there is a major reason many people think that it is preferable to
cook one's food.
The reason is that cooking at home is cost-effective.
You could see that I used a summarising word 'cost-effective'
This will give me an opportunity to write on how so.
By doing this, you will be able to logically develop your essay clearly with ease
Before move on, I want us to practise this with the question below:
Some people believe that the residents should ensure that the areas they live are
clean and tidy, while others think it is the responsibility to the government.
Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Take note, even if you are to use a long sentence as your reason, always create
suspense.
Include an introduction pls
Class resumes tommorow
Olufemi
Thanks tutor
Olufemi
Good day tutor, happy sunday. I have a question about the last sentence of the
introduction. Usually there are two opposing views, if we say this essay will
discuss both view points in order to determine the *best* approach, won't that be
wrong? I am thinking if *better* approach will be more suitable since we are
comparing two views.
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Olufemi
Good day tutor, happy sunday. I have a question about the last sentence of the
introduction. Usually there are two opposing view
Nice observation. There are two views. Since you are going for a balance approach,
that will be more like a 'third view'. So best will be the okay in that situation.
However, if you want to support one side, better would be the correct one
Olufemi
Tutor Fidelis
Nice observation. There are two views. Since you are going for a balance approach,
that will be more like a 'third view'. So bes
Okay. Thanks
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Look at this conclusion:
To sum up, while some individual feel that problems with the environment should
treated as a worldwide issue because they are global in nature, others argue that a
national approach would be better because of the peculiarity of environmental
pollutions to certain regions. In my opinion, both local and collaborative efforts
should be adopted so as to get a sustainable result.
Notice that neither of the sides was supported. Rather, I 'married' both sides as
the best approach
Olufemi
Yes, I get. Thanks sir
Olufemi
Whose duty is it to clean the environment? While certain individuals are of the
opinion that people who live in an area should be responsible for making their
environment tidy, others belong to the school of thought that it should be done by
the government. This essay will discuss both viewpoints in order to determine the
best approach.
On the one hand, there is a major reason certain individuals feel residents should
be responsible for cleaning their areas. This reason is that, this approach forces
the residents to actively look out for whoever wants to make their areas untidy.
For example, there is an estate in my town where those who reside there clean their
environments, and by so doing, they supervise and ensure no one comes to make their
areas dirty because they are the ones expending energy and time to do the cleaning.
Mirian
Who is answerable for environmental cleanliness? Although certain individuals opine
that environmental sanitation should be vested on residing individuals, others
belong to the school of thought that the government should take charge of the
environment. This essay will examine both views in order to ascertain a better
approach.
On the one hand, there is a major reason some people think that dwellers should
cater for their surroundings. The reason is for the benefit of personal health. In
other words, living in a dirty environment is harmful to the person who has direct
contact with a polluted area. In developed countries such as Germany, the need to
be in an odour-free environment is essential hence, the invention of diffusers to
neutralize stench from waste that has reportedly caused the inhalation of waste
sulphur, which is dangerous to health. Really, it is a personal obligation towards
hygiene to maintain a better living.
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opinion that people who live in an area should be responsible for making their
environment tidy, others belong to the school of thought that it should be done by
the government. This essay will discuss both viewpoints in order to determine the
best approach.
On the one hand, there is a major reason certain individuals feel residents should
be responsible for cleaning their areas. This reason is that this approach forces
compel the residents to actively look watch out for whoever wants to make their
areas untidy. For example, there is an estate in my town where those who reside
there clean their environments, and by so doing, they supervise and ensure no one
comes to make their areas dirty because they are the ones expending energy and time
to do the cleaning.
Not bad, keep it up

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Behavioural scientists in recent times have linked the outcome of illnesses to the
state of ones surroundings. Some group belong to the school of thoughts that think
that it is the responsibility of the residents to keep their environs clean, others
opine that it is the duty of the government to ensure the environment is kempt.
This essay will discuss both viewpoints to arrive at a balanced point of view.
On the one hand, there is a major reason behavioiral scientists think that it is
the responsibility of the residents to keep their living area sanitory and kempt.
The reason is because healthy living is primarily a responsibility of an
individual. This is because an individual living in an unsanitary area is exposed
to contacting diseases very quickly. For instance, the spread of diseases such as
malaria is propagated by the breeding of mosquitoes in stangnant water found in
dirty tin cans.
Olufemi Olanrewaju
Tutor Fidelis
opinion that people who live in an area should
Thanks sir
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Mirian
Who is answerable for environmental cleanliness? Although certain individuals opine
that environmental sanitation should be vest
Who is answerable responsible for environmental cleanliness? Although certain
individuals opine that environmental sanitation should be vested on residing
individuals, others belong to the school of thought that the government should take
charge of the environment. This essay will examine both views in order to ascertain
a better approach.
[The underlined phrases are poorly constructed. ]
On the one hand, there is a major reason some people think that dwellers should
cater for their surroundings. The reason is for the benefit of personal health. In
other words, living in a dirty environment is harmful to the person who has direct
contact with a polluted area. In developed countries such as Germany, the need to
be in an odour-free environment is essential hence, the invention of diffusers to
neutralize stench from waste that has reportedly caused the inhalation of waste
sulphur, which is dangerous to health. Really, it is a personal obligation towards
hygiene to maintain a better living.
Those are not relevant to your topic sentence

Good evening all
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state of ones surroundings. Some group belong
state of ones surroundings. [Behavioural scientists are not concerned about that].
Some group belong to the school of thoughts that think that it is the
responsibility of the residents to keep their environs clean, others opine that it
is the duty of the government to ensure the environment is kempt [Follow what was
taught faithfully. This repeated carelessness not acceptable]. This essay will
discuss both viewpoints to arrive at a balanced point of view.
On the one hand, there is a major reason behavioural scientists think that it is
the responsibility of the residents to keep their living area sanitory sanitary and
kempt. The reason is because healthy living is primarily a responsibility of an
individual. This is because an individual living in an unsanitary area is exposed
to contacting diseases very quickly. For instance, the spread of diseases such as
malaria is propagated by the breeding of mosquitoes in stangnant water found in
dirty tin cans.
Thanks for your assignments
One critical area in doing well in Task Achievement (TA) is understanding the
question.
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If the question is unwittingly misinterpreted, the outcome will be poor
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In the question above
Try to understand the reason the question was asked
Hydee
Who has the task of keeping the surroundings clean? While certain individuals opine
that the onus is on the citizens to ensure that their immediate surrounding is
neat, others belong to the school of thought that it is the duty of the government.
This essay will discuss both viewpoints in order to give a balanced opinion.
On the one hand, there is a major reason certain individuals believe that the
resident should be responsible for keeping their environment healthy. The reason is
that these people are the ones who generate the dirt in the first place and it is
only appropriate for then to keep it clean. Also living healthy guards against
illnesses. This is because living in an untidy environment breeds all kinds of
infections and it is those that live in that environment that is prone to this
sickness. For instance, there have been reports by the media of the increasing
number of people with typhoid in the famous Mile12 area of Lagos because of the
very dirty environment. Therefore, this category of people believes that the
resident should be in charge of the cleanliness of their surroundings.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
The question is not about the importance of cleaning the environment as some
explained in their BP
The operating words in the question are residents and government
You should limit BP 1 to why people think that residents not government should
clean the environment.
Both views know the importance of cleaning the environment, but who should take
charge?
Deviation comes when you spend time explaining the importance of cleanliness to
humans.
Tutor Fidelis
Deviation comes when you spend time explaining the importance of cleanliness to
humans.
This is only good if you are able to relate it to why individuals should take
charge not government
Look at this:
On the one hand, there is a key reason people feel that it is the primary duty of
residents to make their surroundings clean.
The reason is that they are the mainly responsible for waste generation. (reason
1)
The reason is that it guarantees the sustainability of maintaining hygienic
environment (reason 2)
The reason is that it ensures discipline is waste generation (reason 3)
This reason is that it is more likely to encourage individuals to engage in
recycling. (reason 4)
residents to make their surroundings clean. The reason is that they are mainly
responsible for waste generation. In other words, while domestic wastes are daily
generated by local residents, industrial refuse are the byproducts of industries
located in an environment. Take Lagos State, for example, where hundreds of
millions tons of waste are generated weekly by individuals and companies. People
reason that it is a common sense for those generating garbages that pollute an area
to be held responsible for their management.
residents to make their surroundings clean. The reason is that it guarantees the
sustainability of maintaining hygienic environment. In other words, when people
generating wastes are involved in maintaining clean surroundings, such efforts are
more likely to last long because they can experience first hand the benefits of
proper waste disposal. A case in point is the sustainable effort by residents and
businesses in Ikeja in maintaining a clean environment for the past 10 years. This
effort has even lead to people designing creative methods in waste management.
residents to make their surroundings clean. The reason is that it ensures
discipline is waste generation. Since the heavy burden or cost of waste management
falls on residents, they are more likely to device innovating ways such a
recycling, in order to reduce garbage in their surroundings...
If you looked at the above samples, you would notice that they focused on the
effectiveness of having residents clean their surroundings instead of the
government doing so for them
So, understand the question properly so as not to deviate
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Ok
Notes taken
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Hello
Good evening
Joshua
God day Sir
Mirian
Good evening
Olufemi Olanrewaju
Good evening
Haddie Ayo
Goodevening
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Lets summarise what we done so far
How many are ready?
Joshua
We are here sir
Mirian
Tutor Fidelis
How many are ready?
Me
Imakuh Christy
Hello
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The turnout is not encouraging
Joshua
Hmmmmm
Honest truth
Hydee
Here
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Summary.
After your introduction, your BP 1 should discuss why people hold view 1 with
evidence and example.
You may start with: On the one hand, there is a major reason people feel that (view
1).
If you start with the above, it means you should discuss only one reason. If you
have more than a reason to discuss, you may start as follows:
On the one hand, there are two major reasons people believe (view 1). One of the
reason is (reason 1). (Explain reason one with evidence or an example). In addition
(Moreover, Furthermore, the second reason, Also,) [state the second reason].
(Explain the 2nd reason with evidence or an example]. Conclusion.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Good evening all
Hydee
Good evening tutor
Tutor Fidelisadmin
In handling PB 2, kindly repeat similar pattern.
However, you should start with On the other hand,...
You may add little flexibility in your BP2
In the course, there are several way you could start BP 2
See here on how you may add some flexibility
Ensure you explain the topic sentence with evidence and example.
Ensure you read up the references in the course
Let's touch on the conclusion
There are several ways to start your conclusion
Start with:
To sum up....
As an alternative to the recommended structure in the course, you may try this if
it simplier
To sum up, this essay have discussed why some think..., and the reason others
feel...
Your next sentence is to add your opinion.
You may start thus:
I think...
I feel...
I believe...
I am of the opinion that...
In my opinion,...
See the caveat here
See here on how to give a balanced opinion
as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagree with
them.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion

Tutor Fidelis
In my opinion, people should have variety of friends because these friends might be
useful in difference situations.
I think that inasmuch as cooking at home is beneficial, there may be unavoidable
moments one needs to use the restaurants.
Tomorrow, we will discuss how to give an effective example
Hydee
Ok, thank you Sir
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Hello
Good evening all
Mirian
Good evening.
Everyone
Hydee
Good evening
Tutor Fidelisadmin
How to give an example
Click here
YouTube
IELTS Writing Tips: How to Put Examples in Your Essay
Learn how to add examples in your essay using academic vocabulary for IELTS writing
task 2. Learn a range of linking words and how examples should be written...
[Video]
Mirian
Oh yes
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Tonight, we shall discuss briefly on how to give an example. Time: 8:30
Mirian
Ok
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Hello
Good evening all
Joshua
Hello Sir
Sir....
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I quickly want to talk about giving an example in your essay
Kindly revise this and other info that followed
Tutor Fidelis
How to give an example Click here
Watch this video as well
You example should be an extra or additional explanation illustrating the topic of
the paragraph
In fact it MUST cohere or flow perfectly in the paragraph
Let's use a practical example
Imakuh Christy
Must the example be true
Or can you just creat something
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Imakuh Christy
Must the example be true
Nothing is ever true or false in IELTS writing. It only needs to make sense and
meet all grammar rules
Imakuh Christy
Ok thanks
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Lets say you want to argue about a cause of low production of food in Africa
One cause is the use of rudimentary farming implements
You may write thus:
There are two major causes of low agricultural output in African countries. The
first is the use of crude farming equipment.
Let's pause here for a moment
There are several ways you could give an example
You may do so by providing further explanation using such as:
first is the use of crude farming equipment. Due to the cost of modern agricultural
practice, many African farmers in the rural areas rely heavily on tools such as
cutlasses, hoes, and shovels.
Tutor Fidelis
first is the use of crude farming equipment. Due
The part in bold is an example. That is one way of giving an example
Let's explore other ways:
Joshua
Okay Sir
Tutor Fidelisadmin
first is the use of crude farming equipment due to the cost of farming machinery.
For example, an average tractor in Africa cost thousands of dollars, and many poor
African farmers cannot afford to buy such
Haddie Ayo
Okay
Tutor Fidelisadmin
One thing you need to take note of is the relationship between the example the
previous sentence. Let's analyse
Tutor Fidelis
first is the use of crude farming equipment. Due
1. There are two major causes of low agricultural output in African countries. The
first is the use of crude farming equipment. Due to the cost of modern agricultural
practice, many African farmers in the rural areas rely heavily on tools such as
cutlasses, hoes, and shovels.
2. There are two major causes of low agricultural output in African countries. The
first is the use of crude farming equipment due to the cost of farming machinery.
For example, an average tractor in Africa cost thousands of dollars, and many poor
African farmers cannot afford to buy such
See the relationship between the phrases in bold

But look at this:
first is the use of crude farming equipment. For example, an average tractor in
Africa cost thousands of dollars, and many poor African farmers cannot afford to
buy such.
Can you see any clear relationship between the example and the previous sentence?
I need your response
Hydee
The second example is not coherent
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Good
Hydee
The second example is not coherent
The sentence is grammatically correct but not coherent
This is a a class assignment
Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools.
Others, however believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mixed
schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Follow the structure of the class strictly
Take note that if you shouldn't us the symbol % as in 10%. Rather, you should write
it in full - 10 percent
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Look at this piece from an article:
In many cultures, daughters are expected to help at home, but sons are not. Young
girls often help with cooking, cleaning, carrying water and caring for their
siblings. A UNICEF study has shown that girls in North Africa aged 5 to 14 spend
twice as much time on chores as their brothers. This can take up a lot of time each
day. If a young girl doesn’t have time to go to school, this can limit her future
chances.
Take note of the correlation between the example and the sentence before it.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Good evening all
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good evening
Tutor Fidelisadmin
No one responded to the assignment
Anyways, lets talk about handling problems/solutions essay
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i would turn mine in by tmr, i could not get work done today.
Tutor Fidelisadmin
You can find the main class here
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ok. thanks
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There are two structures and you should adopt the one that suit you.
Structure 1:
Introduction
BP1: Causes
BP2: Solutions
Conclusion
In this structure, it is important you master how to discuss at least two causes
and solutions in each respective paragraph without writing too much.
Structure 2:
Introduction
BP 1: a cause and a solution

BP 2: another cause and a solution
BP 3: another cause and a solution
Conclusion.
The backside of this structure is that you have to think about a problem and a
solution per paragraph. This is difficult if you can't quickly figure out a
solution or if two causes have a single solution
Even as I mentioned 2 causes and 2 solutions, I will strongly encourage you to do a
minimum of three each
Lets get a question to practice with
Many people are involved in sports when they are young but stop once they are
adults.
Why do many adults stop doing physical exercise? What can be done about this
problem?
This is a typical problem/solution essay
In your three-sentence introduction, you should write the
BS
VPP
SP
This is mine:
A good number of young people all over the world loves to engage in one form of
sport activities or the other. However, as they become adults, many of them lose
interest in participating in sports. This essay will discuss key factors
responsible for this with suggestions on how to encourage them to continue even as
they age.
Take note of this interesting digression. This is important because I will use it
to update the main class:
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Wellness enthusiasts in recent times have expressed a decline in the participation
of sporting activities by adults compared to to the days of their youths. Some
reasons identified for such decline in sporting activities include loss of interest
in sports and a lack of time to engage in sporting activities. This essay would
explore in details the reasons identitied and proffer possible solutions.
Please before we continue, can you reach other students on whatsapp to join the
class
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In some cases, when you are writing your BS, you may break the VPP into 2 parts.
You may use one part to form your BS and other to form your VPP. If you noticed my
introduction, you would see that I divided the VPP in the question into two. This
was really easy because the VPP in the question had two different thoughts in a
sentence (1. Many people are involved in sports when they are young 2. but stop
once they are adults.) I divided both thoughts, expanded on them to form my
sentence 1 and 2.
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Ok
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Watch out for this when you are handling Problem/solution,
advantages/disadvantages, opinion essay
Udodirim Nwuke Vip January AC , You should learn the structure as taught. This will
help me to monitor your progress. There are many ways to write an essay but on a
test day, you are going to use one way. Master that one way before your test day
Let's move to BP1:
Here, you should identity, at least 2 reasons young ones don't engage in sporting
activities once they become adults
Kindly start with this easy to remember phrase:
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Ok
Tutor Fidelis
Udodirim Nwuke Vip January AC , You should learn the structure as taught. This will
help me to monitor your progress. There are
Noted
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There are two(three) main/ several reasons/factors....
Thereafter, you can outline the reasons
Ensure you explain at least one of factors with an example. Personally, I will
attempt to cast my sentence in such a way that I use such as
It helps to write much with less
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So i shouldn't attempt to list the reasons in the 1st paragraph
Rather give a broad statement
Tutor Fidelisadmin
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So i shouldn't attempt to list the reasons in the 1st paragraph
It is not necessary as it is too cagey. Besides, you have to spend time think about
them at that early stage
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Ok
Tutor Fidelisadmin
There are several factors that prevent young ones from engaging in sporting
activities once they become adults. Firstly, as adults, many of them engaged in
full-time employment which consumes a significant part of their time. Moreover,
adulthood comes with responsibilities such as caring for family members. Many
adults are more preoccupied with fulfilling these than spending time doing sports.
In addition, some are discouraged because of the high possibility of securing
injuries as adults during physical activities. This is even worse when one
considers the time it takes for an adult to recover from muscular strains or other
forms of injuries. Lastly, many are ignorant of the need for them to exercise, as
they easily dismiss such as an activity for young people.
It is late already. Tomorrow, we will complete it.
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Does it mean in one paragraph you intend to list the causes and the other possible
solutions?
Tutor Fidelisadmin
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Does it mean in one paragraph you intend to list the causes and the other possible
solutions?
Structure
Intro
Causes
Solutions
Conclusion
4 paragraph structure. See the IDP training materials for this and the other
structure
Hydee
But there was no example
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Hydee
But there was no example
If you study our yesterday class carefully, you should see an example there
Hydee
There are several factors that prevent young ones from engaging in sporting
activities once they become adults. Firstly, as adults, many of them engaged in
full-time employment which consumes a significant part of their time. Moreover,
adulthood comes with responsibilities ,such as caring for family members. Many
adults are more preoccupied with fulfilling these than spending time doing sports.
In addition, some are discouraged because of the high possibility of securing
injuries as adults during physical activities. This is even worse when one
considers the time it takes for an adult to recover from muscular strains or other
forms of injuries. Lastly, many are ignorant of the need for them to exercise, as
they easily dismiss such as an activity for young people.
See the ev example
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Yeah
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Hello, good evening everyone
Hydee
Good evening
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Mirian
Good evening all
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Good evening all
One essay type I quick need to touch is advantages/disadvantages essay
If you are to discuss just the advantages and disadvantages of a topic, you may use
two BPs
Intro
BP1: @ least 2 advantages
BP2: @ least 2 disadvantages
Conclusion
Joshua
Good day Sir
Tutor Fidelisadmin
As usual, in your intro, you should write the
BS
VPP
SP: This essay will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of (topic)
In your conclusion you may add your opinion if you wish. See the IDP training
manual on how you could do this
If the question ask you:
Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?
You need to demonstrate that in your essay

Let's say you believe that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages, you need to
state that clearly in your introduction : (SP)
Introduction:
BS
VPP
SP: I feel the advantages of this phenomenon outweigh the disadvantages. (Review
the main class for other good ways you could express this)
You may demonstrate that the advs outweigh the disadv by number:
PB1: 3 advantages
PB2: 2 disadvantages
You may also demonstrate this by saying
BP1: There are several advantages of (top)
BP2: There are few disadvantages of/ The only few disadvantages are ...etc
Let's practice with a question
Online education and training is becoming increasingly popular in the business
world. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?
In the last decade, there has been an increase in the number and variety of online
courses available to adults.
What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course?

Tutor Fidelis
Online education and training is becoming increasingly popular in the business
world. Do the advantages of this development outw
Introduction:
Technology has significantly affected the method of imparting knowledge in recent

years. One such areas is the availability of online training and education in the
business environment. In my opinion, the drawbacks of online education pale into
insignificant when compare to the benefits.
Joshua
Hmmm
Tutor Fidelisadmin
There are incomparable advantages of online study. One of such is that it offers a
flexible learning arrangement for workers. With an access to a computer and
internet, busy individuals can study wherever they prefer. This could be at home,
at work or even at a friend’s house, and at any time of the day. Employees are also
able to study at their own pace, depending on whether they find the material easy
or difficult. As course material is available on their owns computers, they can
easily review material as many times as they wish. This comes with the advantage of
reduced fear of missing classes.
Ifeoluwa Owolabi
Hmmm
Tutor Fidelisadmin
However, there are few problems associated with online training. As this depends
wholely on technology, those with limited training on technology may find it
challenge. Example of these individuals include those who are handicapped or
physically challenged and the elderly. Also, places with limited technology may
find this form of education very expensive as this requires a functional computer
and good internet access. For example small-scale businesses located in rural areas
in Nigeria may find this especially challenging because of poor availability of of
internet network
Ifeoluwa Owolabi
Hmmm
Any question?
Joshua
Hmmm
Any question?
Ifeoluwa Owolabi
Noo
Tutor Fidelisadmin
I received this problems/solutions essay from a VIP student. I rated it between 7
to 7.5 :point_down:. The original essay followed by my assessment
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JoshuaJan 27, 2020 8:34:12 PM
One problem faced by almost every large city is traffic congestion.
· What do you think the causes are?

· What solutions can you suggest?
The influx of large population into urban areas has created a plethora of problems.
One worrisome issue is traffic congestion. This essay will discuss the reasons for
this phenomenon and recommend viable suggestions to curb it.
One major reason for vehicular congestion in cities is bad roads. In other words,
dilapidated roads and poor road networks will reduce vehicular movement which might
lead to unavoidable stoppages at intervals. This could lead to long queues of cars,
thus limiting free movement. In addition, poor road network could cause this
unwanted situation. This effect is seen at Ibadan, where a single road connects
divert business locations. Ultimately, this will lead to traffic suggestion when
commuters scrabble to link-up to their destination. Furthermore, the irregular
activities of mass transit schemes have encouraged increased private ownership of
cars. This will further increase the number of automobiles on the inadequate
thereby leading to traffic challenges.
Nevertheless, if the government could build more roads and repair existing once,
there might be a significant reduction in traffic issues. Road constructions such
as flyovers and bridges would prevent unnecessary movement obstruction on the
roads. Another possible solution is the revival of mass transit schemes. That is to
say, if their operations become efficient and effective, it will encourage
commuters to play them to their chosen destinations. Definitely, this is less
costly and would ensure fewer cars on the roads thereby traffic congestion will be
minimized.
To sum up, ineffective road network, bad roads and functioning transportation
scheme has caused traffic congestion; however, reviving this scheme and building
more roads, flyovers, bridges, repairing existing once will effectively tackle
traffic issues.
Tutor FidelisJan 28, 2020 7:29:34 AM
The influx of large population into urban areas has created a plethora of problems.
One worrisome issue is traffic congestion. This essay will discuss the reasons for
this phenomenon and recommend viable suggestions to curb it.
:point_down:
One major reason for vehicular congestion in the cities is bad roads. In other
words, dilapidated roads and poor road networks will reduce vehicular movement
which might lead to unavoidable stoppages at intervals. This could lead to long
queues of cars, thus limiting free movement. In addition, poor road network could
cause this unwanted situation. This effect is seen at Ibadan, where a single road
connects diverse business locations. Ultimately, this will lead to traffic
suggestion when commuters scrabble to link-up to their destination. Furthermore,
the irregular activities of mass transit schemes have encouraged increased private
ownership of cars. This will further increase the number of automobiles on the
inadequate thereby leading to traffic challenges.
Nevertheless, if the government could build more roads and repair existing once,
there might be a significant reduction in traffic issues. Road constructions such
as flyovers and bridges would prevent unnecessary movement obstruction on the
roads. Another possible solution is the revival of mass transit schemes. That is to
say, if their operations become efficient and effective, it will encourage
commuters to play??? them to their chosen destinations. Definitely, this is less
costly and would ensure fewer cars on the roads thereby traffic congestion will be
minimized.
To sum up, ineffective road network, bad roads and functioning transportation
scheme has caused traffic congestion; however, reviving this scheme and building
more roads, flyovers, bridges, repairing existing once will effectively tackle
traffic issues.
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Tonight, we shall look into opinion essay. Time is 8 pm. Study ahead from here
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Good evening all
Joshua
Good day Sir
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Let's discuss opinion (argument) essay
Who is here?
Ifeoluwa Owolabi
Good evening sir
I'm here
Joshua
Okay Sir
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Let's start
Opinion essay comes in various forms
Opinion or argument essay comes in any of these forms
1. To what extent do you agree?

2. Do you agree or disagree [Do you agree or disagree with this statement?]
3. What do you think?
4.What is your opinion?
5. Is it good thing (positive development) or bad thing (negative development)?
The introduction format is similar to others
BS
VPP
SP: (pay attention to this part)
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Opinion or argument essay comes in any of these forms 1. To what extent do you
agree? 2. Do you agree or disagree [Do you agree
For number 1. Ensure you include the degree (I fully agree with ... )
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For 2: I agree with.. (or) I fully agree with..
Joshua
Okay Sir
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3 and 4: I fully agree with.../ In my opinion,.../ I think.../ I believe that/ I
agree with... etc
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5. I believe this development is positive/ This phenomenon should be encouraged/
Everyone should support this trend...etc
If you agree, make sure you have at least two point to support or position {SP}.
You may discuss these two points in your BP1 and BP2.
In your BP3, try to also discuss one reason why others may disagree. Make sure you
neutralize this point.
Alternatively, In your BP1, you may discuss iscuss one reason why others may
disagree. Make sure you neutralize this point.
You may discuss your supporting ideas in your BP2 and BP3.
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In the penultimate paragraph, the writer's touched on counter argument and
'minimize the effect' afterwards.
See page 116/119 of the IDP material
Joshua
Hmmmmmm
Simplicity in the write up
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This method should be practiced and perfected before you sit the test otherwise you
may earn far lower than your ability, as it is easy to mess up one's writing
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I will use this essay question as practice
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Okay Sir
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For many years in the past, people of various cultural groups were easily
identified by their dressing pattern. However, this is no longer the case, as
people now dress in a similar fashion globally. This development, to me, is not
only negative but should be discouraged.
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Take note that the question already has a background topic which you can use to
form your BS
Sayo Owolabi
Can we use the BS word for word sir or still need to paraphrase?
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Sayo Owolabi
Can we use the BS word for word sir or still need to paraphrase?
I have made it clear that word for word is a 'crime' punishable with word count
deductions by IELTS. NEVER TRY IT
Sayo Owolabi
Ok sir
Joshua
Okay Sir
Joshua
Hmmmm
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Traditional clothing signified which ethnic group one belonged to, and could
indicate one's gender, class, religion, tribe and region. For example, the Yoruba
men in Nigeria traditionally wore a "Buba", "Sokoto" with a traditional cap,
while women, wore a "Buba" and "Iro" and tie a "Gele" over their heads. Even
without formal introduction one could easily separate and identify different people
based on their appearance. Unfortunately, this advantage of dressing in a manner
that reflected one's culture had been lost as a result of global culture on
dressing.
Worse still, this trend of everyone dressing the same way has systematic
westernized the globe which is a threat to the uniqueness of different ways of
life. The rich African culture was often promoted, transmitted and sustained
through various designs and styles of dressings. Children, nowadays, hardly know
any of these as they have been socialised to think like the Europeans and
Americans. Moreover, many of the local businesses which specialised in making local
fabrics are out of business as a result of globalization. Sadly, this loss comes
with intrinsically great costs as the rich technical know-how are forever gone.
Admittedly, some may assume that dressing in a similar way has reduced cultural
divisions thereby uniting the world. However, those with this assumption fail to
realise that the 'unity in diversity' respects the uniqueness of various cultures.
To sum up, when people's clothing in the past was a reflection of there culture,
they enjoyed several benefits. Therefore, the global culture on dressing is a
negative trend.
Take note of the following:
The way the question was worded is worth considering: a contrast between the past
and present. The question assumed that people dressed to reflect their culture in
the past. Now, everyone dresses alike Grammatically, this means that people have
stopped dressing the way they used to (whether you agree or not is immaterial
here). So your writeup must not ensure that the past is past and present is
present. See the underlined verbs below:
dressing.
fabrics are out business as a result of globalization. Sadly, this loss comes with
intrinsically great costs as the rich technical know-how are forever gone.
negative trend.
Joshua
Hmmmm
Thank you Sir
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Another lesson is that when you use non - English words, ensure your put them in
quotes, e.g "Buba", " Gele"
When you want to concede, you may use any of these signpost words: Admittedly,
Granted, Concededly etc
After writing your concessionary sentence, Make sure your 'destroy or neutralise'
it. This is especially necessary when you are taken a side (agree, disagree, it is
a positive development, it is a bad thing). See how this was done
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identified by their dressing pattern. However, this is
dressing.
fabrics are out of business as a result of globalization. Sadly, this loss comes
with intrinsically great costs as the rich technical know-how are forever gone.
negative trend.
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Theodora OJan 29, 2020 10:39:55 AM
Buying things on the Internet, such as books, air tickets and groceries, is
becoming more and more popular.
Do the advantages of shopping in this way outweigh the disadvantages?
In the past few decades, online business has been trending around the globe. While
this trend is growing rapidly, some are yet to be involved in it. I think the
advantages of online shopping surpass its disadvantages.
Undoubtedly, there are some significant reasons why some shop via the internet. One
of them is that it is more convenient. In other words, it could be done while
attending to some personal things such as gisting with friends, surfing the
internet, seeing movies or even cooking. In addition, home deliveries of ordered
goods are available to customers. The buyers are not perturbed about how they get
their goods as the marketers usually given a period of time within which those
orders will be delivered to them in their houses. Therefore, more people patronize
online sellers.
Despite the benefits of online shopping, some risks also exists. Firstly, some of
the goods could be bad. For example, a wrist watch I once brought online was not
working upon delivery, but it was returned and I was refunded. Oftentimes, only the
pictures and prices of the items are displayed on the internet at the time the
order is placed. As a result, the buyers are unable to acertain the actual state of
the marketed good. Secondly, this system can not be used to buy things urgently.
Because the products being ordered need to be packaged and transported, internet
buying is not advocated under urgent situations. Hence, some people are reluctant
to do internet shopping.
To sum up, it is obvious that buying things using the internet has both merits and
demerits. I believe its benefits outweighs its drawbacks.
In the past few decades, online business has been trending around the globe. While
this trend is growing rapidly, some are yet to be involved in it. I think the
advantages of online shopping surpass its disadvantages.
Undoubtedly, there are some significant reasons why some shop via the internet. One
of them is that it is more convenient. In other words, it could be done while
attending to some personal things such as gisting chatting with friends, surfing
the internet, seeing movies or even cooking. In addition, home deliveries of
ordered goods are available to customers. The buyers are not perturbed about how
they get their goods as the marketers usually give a period of time within which
those orders will be delivered to them in their houses. Therefore, more people
patronize online sellers.
Despite the benefits of online shopping, some risks also exist. Firstly, some of
the goods could be bad [alt... could be in a bad condition]. For example, a
wristwatch I once brought online was not working upon delivery, but it was returned
and I was refunded. Oftentimes, only the pictures and prices of the items are
displayed on the internet at the time the order is placed. As a result, the buyers
are unable to acertain the actual state of the marketed good. Secondly, this system
can not be used to buy things urgently.[alt... online system does not favour urgent
request] Because the products being ordered need to be packaged and transported,
internet buying is not advocated under urgent situations it takes some days for
goods to be delivered . Hence, some people are reluctant to do internet shopping.
To sum up, it is obvious that buying things using the internet has both merits and
demerits. I believe its benefits outweighs its drawbacks.
Keep it up. Take not of the alternatives (alt) which is in form of an improvement
of the phrases or sentences your wrote... In the introduction, I cancelled the part
which as not necessary.
You can learn this style: Give a general fact (BS). Give a specifically area such
fact could be seen (this specific fact should be your VPP.) While it fits this
question, it is not in all questions you can do this. See this below
Internet technology has changes the way people transact business. One of such
popular areas is the availability of online shopping .....
Internet technology has changes the way people transact business (general fact)
One of such popular areas is the availability of online shopping which enables
people to..... (Specific fact)
See some examples here
Here , here
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Let's quickly discuss more on opinion essay
Structure 1a. You (completely) agree
Introduction: BS
VPP
SP: I completely support this notion because of these
important reasons
BP1. Reason 1
BP2. Reason 2
BP3. Reason others may disagree (counter argument using Granted, Admittedly,
Concededly, .) Neutralise counter argument using However,...
Conclusion.
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Structure 1b. You (completely) agree
Introduction: BS
VPP
SP: I completely support this notion because of these
important reasons
BP1. Reason others may disagree (counter argument using Granted, Admittedly,
BP2. Reason 1
BP3. Reason 2
Conclusion.
Structure 2a. You (completely) disagree
Introduction: BS
VPP
SP: I completely disagree with this notion because of these
important reasons
BP1. Reason 1
BP2. Reason 2
BP3. Reason others may agree (counter argument using Granted, Admittedly,
Conclusion.
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Structure 2b. You (completely) disagree
Introduction: BS
VPP
SP: I completely disagree with this notion because of these
important reasons
BP1. Reason others may agree (counter argument using Granted, Admittedly,
BP2. Reason 1
BP3. Reason 2
Conclusion.
Structure 1a. It is good thing (positive development)
Introduction: BS
VPP
SP: This development is not only positive but should be
encouraged.
BP1. Reason 1
BP2. Reason 2
BP3. Reason others may think it is a negative development (bad thing) (counter
argument using Granted, Admittedly, Concededly, .) Neutralise counter argument
using However,...
Conclusion.
________________________
Structure 1b. It is good thing (positive development)
Introduction: BS
VPP
SP: This development is not only positive but should be
encouraged.
BP1. Reason others may think it is a negative development (bad thing) (counter
using However,...
BP2. Reason 1
BP3. Reason 2
Conclusion.
Structure 2a. It is bad thing (negative development)
Introduction: BS
VPP
SP: This development is not only negative but should be
discouraged.
BP1. Reason 1
BP2. Reason 2
BP3. Reason others may think it is a positive development (bad thing) (counter
using However,...
Conclusion.
____________________
Structure 1b. It is bad thing (negative development)
Introduction: BS
VPP
SP: This development is not only negative but should be
discouraged.
BP1. Reason others may think it is a positive development (bad thing) (counter
using However,...
BP2. Reason 1
BP3. Reason 2
Conclusion.
There may be occasions you need partially agree.
You may partially agree on the following questions:

You SHOULD NOT partially agree on this question:
1. Do you agree or disagree [Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
You should either (completely) agree or (completely) disagree. No middle point.
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Let's talk more about opinion essay (to agree/disagree partially)
This is especially so when you are answering To what extent do you agree or
disagree?
You have the option to
Completely/fully/wholly, strongly agree

Completely/fully/wholly, strongly disagree
Moderately/partly/partially agree/disagree.
Whichever side you choose should depends on the type of question
Most times, it is easier to completely agree or disagree
If you must partially agree/disagree, be sure you can justify your answer.
Let's look at this question. Here I will partially agree. I am doing so for the
sake of the class. If it were in exam condition, my decision might be differet
In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems
as a result of eating too much fast food. To solve these problems, it is therefore
necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food?
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Consuming excessive convenience foods has resulted in a number of health-related
problems in certain countries. Some are of the opinion that government should place
heavy tax on these foods. Inasmuch as I agree with this suggestion, I still feel
that additional step is needed to effectively reduce the consumption of fast
foods.
Before we move on, I have some comments to make on the introduction.
From the main class, I mentioned that some questions have background topic.
This is one of those questions
In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems
as a result of eating too much fast food.
This part is the background topic
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Look at this, you would notice the background topic too..
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But this has none
If your question should have a background topic, kindly paraphrase it to form your
BS
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problems in certain countries. Some are of the
That is what I did here
Also, there are many ways to write your SP in opinion essay.
For those who have been practising writing essays and have gained confidence, you
can write in such a way to fit your essay
For others, kindly stick to the conventional structure:
I completely agree with this opinion based on these important reasons
I completely disagree with this opinion based on these important reasons
I partially agree with this opinion based on these important reasons

heavy tax on these foods. I partially agree with this opinion based on these
important reasons
See another variation here
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Tutor FidelisDec 7, 2019 1:58:01 AM
Other ways to moderately agree...
This is true as far as it goes.
This is not entirely true
In reality, this does not occur exactly as described.
How you use it depends on the context.
If in doubt, just use the popular 'I partially/partly/moderately agree or disagree'
Ifeoluwa Owolabi
Kk
The conclusion?
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Ifeoluwa Owolabi
The conclusion?
???
I don't get that
Ifeoluwa Owolabi
I mean how will d conclusion be like? To sum up......
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Ifeoluwa Owolabi
I mean how will d conclusion be like? To sum up......
I haven't written the body...
Conclusion usually follows this format:
Summarise the point in the BPs

Restate your position.
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heavy tax on these foods. Inasmuch as I agree with this suggestion, I still feel
that an additional step is needed to effectively reduce the consumption of fast
foods.
It is true that placing high taxes on fast foods might help decrease their
consumption. These taxes could either reduce the profits of the producers and
ultimately take them out of business or lead to a higher cost of purchasing these
foods which may discourage consumers. A good example was what happened last year in
the Libo County in China, where there was a 20 percent reduction on the consumption
of fast foods after the local council introduced a 50 percent tax increase on
producers and marketers of these products. Some, therefore, advocate that similar
or better results could be achieved if national governments introduce same measure.
However, tax alone cannot achieve sustainable results as an additional measure is

needed. The introduction of tax may only discourage low income earners, not the
rich, from buying fast foods. Therefore, proper education or awareness campaign on
the danger of fast foods also needs to be introduced. This could be done using both
the conventional and social media. Also, sasic school curriculum should expose
children, who are the primary consumers of these products, to the dangers therein.
By so doing, everyone will be in a good position to make a well-informed decision
on this subject.
To sum up, there is a possibility that high tax on fast foods may discourage
consumers. Nevertheless, I believe that a better result would be achieved if this
is incorporated with educating the masses on the health dangers of consuming these
foods.
Ifeoluwa Owolabi
Kk
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Any question?
Ifeoluwa Owolabi
That means if I totally agree, I must talk about the advantages of tax in both
paragraphs?
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If you agree:
Give at least reasons why you agree
Mention a reason others may disagree buy destroy it

Ifeoluwa Owolabi
That means if I totally agree, I must talk about the advantages of tax in both
paragraphs?
Maybe tomorrow, I will write on this.
Ifeoluwa Owolabi
Kk
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Clear?
Ifeoluwa Owolabi
Yes
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Many thanks sir IELTS TUTOR
Welcome
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heavy tax on these foods. I strongly feel that this strategy will yield good
results.
First, placing high taxes on fast foods will lead to decrease in their consumption.
One way is that levies will lead to price increase which may discourage consumers.
A good example was what happened last year in the Libo County in China, where there
was a 20 percent reduction on the consumption of fast foods after the local council
introduced a 50 percent tax increase on producers and marketers of these products.
Therefore, if this similar approach is introduced on a wider or national scale,
better results will be achieved.
Secondly, the introduction of high tax can either discourage further establishment
of restaurants that produce fast food or lead to closure of existing ones. This is
because a very high tax could reduce the profit margin in this business or even
make it difficult for startups to survive. This conclusion supports the view of
economists that the surest way to kill a business is to 'suffocate' it through
taxation. If there is no production of fast foods, consumers will be left with no
alternative but to buy healthier foods.
Granted, some may argue that using taxes to reduce consumption of fast foods is
preventing people to make choice on what they like. They feel that individuals have
right to determine what is best for their health. However, the fact that there has
been an alarming rate in the number of health challenges associated with the
consumption of unhealthy meals is a justification for government to intervene.
Afterall, a healthy nation is said to be a wealthy nation.
To sum up, it is clear that government can help reduce health problems resulting
from eating fast foods through the imposition of high tax on these items.
Therefore, I completely agree that government should implement this measure to
improve people's health.
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Today's GT question
Task 2
It is better for children if the whole families ( e.g aunts , uncles and
grandparents ) are involved in the children's upbringing , rather than their
fathers and mothers only . What is your opinion
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Emmanuel
Good evening sir
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I want us to look at the question that was ask in GT Task 2 today
Emmanuel
Okay
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There are many factors that may determine getting a 7+ in this kind if question
Especially for my VIP students
1. Before you sit the test, how many of this type question did you write for
assessment?
2. Have you master the structure very well?
3. Do you understand the question?
Today's GT question
Task 2
It is better for children if the whole families ( e.g aunts , uncles and
grandparents ) are involved in the children's upbringing , rather than their
fathers and mothers only . What is your opinion
This question in our categorisation is an opinion essay.
There are many ways you could attempt this essay, but there is one thing in common
that should be done: give at least two reasons to justify your opinion.
While many may wish to answer this question in a special way, I recommended that
you either agree or disagree. (Let that be your opinion. How you express that may
differ
When you answer this way, it helps you to focus on the question.
I will give you 10 mins to read an attempt I made on this question. We will analyse
it there after
Emmanuel
Okay sir
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Raising children is especially challenging for parents nowadays. To some, it will
be of immense benefit for children if parents' relations are part of this training.
I disagree with this view based on these important reasons.
First, many a parent has personal plans on how to raise their children. These
plans or philosophies may be as a result of different exposures such as religious
leaning, academic orientation, or other life-changing experiences. Children's
extended family members may not share those ideals with the parents. Imagine a
situation whereby parents share different religious beliefs or political
philosophy with their relatives! Such an environment could be potentially damaging
to the emotional health of children. Therefore, it is better to refuse the
interference of extended family members in raising one's wards.
Secondly, the disturbing rate of child abuse and molestation by uncles and aunts is
another reason to limit their involvement in raising one's children. According to
the UNICEF, extended family members are responsible for over 50 percent of rape of
children between the ages of 1 to 10. Because of the close relationship between the
victims and the perpetrators, this atrocity goes on for years without parents'
knowledge. Based on this, parents alone should be responsible for the training of
their children.
Granted, some people might argue that members of extended family help to lessen the
burden of raising children. Such assistance could be in forms of providing
financial supports or correcting erring children when their parents are not
available. Nevertheless, this assistance pales into insignificant when compared to
the aforementioned dangers of allowing relatives to be involve in raising one's
children.
To sum up, it is clear that there are negative consequences when there is an
involvement of grandparents, uncles, and aunts in the upbringing of one's
offsprings. I, therefore, feel that parents alone should be saddled with this
responsibility.
Look at the structure I used here
This was taught this week Wednesday
Although with few participants.
Let's look at the essay again
Our introduction still remain the same:
BS
VPP
SP.
In my SP, I disagreed with the VPP of the question.
In BP1 and BP2, I explained the two reasons behind my opinion.
In BP 3 in wrote a concession and rebutted it
From the beginning to the end, my position is clear.
Any question so far?
For those that joined us recently, we will start the class afresh on Monday.
When answering opinion essay, try to use the 5 paragraph approach
Some my agree with the viewpoint of the question (VPP)
If you do ensure you have your two reasons to back up your opinions.
When attempting IELTS question, leave out personal interest.
If would normally agree to a view in real life but you can write better when you
disagree, choose the one that flow with your pen not the one in your heart
In real life, I would prefer to agree. when I got my two reasons for agreeing and
two reasons for disagreeing, I was able to write better when I disagreed
My advice is that, try to write sufficient essays on each question type before you
sit the test. You cannot improve your writing by reading this class alone. You
improve your writing by writing
Emmanuel
Should we write on this and submit
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Emmanuel
Should we write on this and submit
Not yet. Study the main class and do the assignments there and submit to me
privately. I guess you haven't completed Task 1 class
Interestingly, this question was asked in 2012
That is all this night
Good night
Emmanuel
Thanks
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Goodnight sir
Mirian
Good night/ good morning :+1:
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Announcement.
From Monday by 8 pm, we will be having our discussion class. We are starting all
over again for the sake of those just joining. The discussion class will be largely
on practising all you have studied from the main class. It is therefore advised
that you spend quality time studying the the course and completing the assignments.
You are encouraged to practise along with me. I encourage hard work not luck as the
surest way to getting a 7+. That means you MUST practise all question types. I am
not going to pamper you. My desire is to push you to get a 7+. It may not be
convenient for you. I never promise that it will be, except you want to be giving
IELTS 75k every time.
You should start with Task 2 Discussion Essay Type

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To start this class tonight, I will need your presence
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It seems many are not available right now
Sola Alash
Just getting to the midpoint of my destination because of traffic.
Emmanuel
I am available
Yewande Ipinlaye
Just got home because of traffic
Success
Just got in... This will be my first.
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When will be the best time for discussion
Emmanuel
9 pm is fine for me
Success
9pm is very fine...
Akapa Temisan
I’m available as well
Yewande Ipinlaye
I am available
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So, it seems 9 is the best time
Has anyone studied the first essay type in the main class
Emmanuel
The discussion essay type
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Emmanuel
The discussion essay type
Yes, have you?
Emmanuel
Yes sir
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Ok
You should be familiar with the fact that Discussion Essay is when you are asked to
discuss both views and give your opinion
Example
Some people think that universities should offer places to students who have high
marks. Others think that universities should take people of all ages whether they
performed well or not.
Discuss both views and give your opinion

In this type of question, you need 4 paragraphs to get this done...
Introduction
BP1
BP2
Conclusion
Your introduction should have a General or Background Statement (GS or BS),
reference to the viewpoints or problems presented (VPP), and reference to the
Specific question ( SP)
Study the various ways to give a BS
Emmanuel
okay sir
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The topic of this essay is about university admission.
This is my BS. Afterwards, you can write yours:
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Millions of students apply for admission in various universities worldwide.
Universities worldwide receive myriads of admission applications every year.
Before you write yours, take note of this:
While thinking about the GS using the topic of the question, keep at the back of
my mind that you should frame it in such a way that it will flow with the next
sentence.
As you are thinking about the BS, keep in mind the next sentence which is the VPP.
Let me write the second sentence to see if flows with my GS
Although certain people believe that only those with excellent grades should be
considered, others belong to the school of thought that all applicants should be
offered admission.
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Although certain people believe that only those wit
Check for yourself if both sentences are coherent
You may write your GS and the second sentence.
Akapa Temisan
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If you don't know what to do, kindly spend time to study this session in the main
class
We will continue from her tomorrow. If possible, try to attempt it before going to
bed
Emmanuel
There has been an influx of students seeking admission across the globe. Although
some people are of the opinion that only high scoring students should be
considered, others believe that admission should be offered to all applicants.
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Emmanuel
There has been an influx of students seeking admission across the globe. Although
some people are of the opinion that only high
Perfect!
Emmanuel
Thanks
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Thanks sir
I will submit mine tomorrow morning
Sola Alash
The quest for university education has become more competitive in recent times.
Although several criteria are considered when admitting students in different
schools and faculties, a school of thought is of the opinion that students who
scores high marks should be given top priority during admission process, another
school of thought is of the view that performance or not, students of all ages
should be considered.
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Sola Alash
The quest for university education has become more competitive in recent times.
Although several criteria are considered when ad
The quest for university education has become more competitive in recent times. :
+1::+1::+1:
Although several criteria are considered when admitting students in different

schools and faculties, a school of thought is of the opinion that students who
scores high marks should be given top priority during admission process, another
should be considered
Keep it simple. Two views are presented in the VPP, but yours has 3 and the
presentation defiles basic rules of grammar.
1. Although several criteria are considered when admitting students in different

schools and faculties, 2.a school of thought is of the opinion that students who
scores high marks should be given top priority during admission process, 3. another
should be considered
Sola Alash
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The quest for university education has become more competitive in recent times. :
+1::+1::+1: Although several criteria are considere
Many thanks
Hydee
Nowadays, higher learning institutions have encountered a great number of
applicants. Although certain individuals opine that admissions should be granted to
only those with outstanding grades, others belong to the school of thought that all
applicants should be offered admission irrespective of their grades.
Yewande Ipinlaye
In recent times, there has been an influx of university applications. On the one
hand, some believe that priority should be given to high performing students while,
on the other hand, others are of the opinion that everyone should be granted equal
opportunity regardless of age or performance.
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Hydee
Nowadays, higher learning institutions have encountered a great number of
applicants. Although certain individuals opine that ad
Nowadays, institutions of higher learning have encountered a great number of
applicants. Although certain individuals opine that admissions should be granted to
only those with outstanding grades, others belong to the school of thought that all
applicants should be offered admission irrespective of their grades.
The VPP is nice. The difference between and usage of Nowadays and In recent times
were fully explained in the main class. You are not expected to make this kind of
error.
Yewande Ipinlaye
In recent times, there has been an influx of university applications. On the one
hand, some believe that priority should be give
In recent times, there has been an influx of admission applications into the
universities. On the one hand, some believe that priority should be given to high
performing students while, on the other hand, others are of the opinion that
everyone should be granted equal opportunity regardless of age or performance.
VIP students who stuck very closely to the formula of this class did better and
learn faster than those who didn't. You are less likely to have many errors in your
writing. There is no crime using some key words taught in the class. Your aim is to
get a 7+.
Yewande Ipinlaye
Okay sir
Tutor Fidelis invited Jide
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Good evening all. By 9, we will be having our class.
Jide
Ok sir
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Kindly review yesterday's class.
Yewande Ipinlaye
Present
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Let's give other 5 more mins to join us
Good evening all.
Yewande Ipinlaye
Good evening sir
Success
Good evening
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Yesterday, discussed the introduction to Discussion essay in part
We are adopting a 3-sentence introduction.
The first sentence is Background or General Statement (BS or GS)
The second sentence is reference to the viewpoints or problems presented in the
question (VPP)
In a discussion essay, there are two views
To write the second sentence, all you need do is to summarise or recast the views.
In this class, we are adopting any this three structure:
Akapa Temisan
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Whereas certain individuals opine that..(view 1), others belong to the school of
thought that..(view 2)
Although certain individuals opine that..(view 1), others belong to the school of
thought that...(view 2)
While certain individuals opine that..(view 1), others belong to the school of
thought that...(view 2)
Yewande Ipinlaye
Okay
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Tutor Fidelis
Whereas certain individuals opine that..(view 1), others belong to the school of
thought that..(view 2) Although certain indivi
In fact, it is a rule to use in this class. I am forcing you to write this way so
that, at least, a sentence in your introduction will be complex.
Yewande Ipinlaye
Okay
Tutor Fidelisadmin
The next sentence or last sentence in your introduction is the SQ.
It is reference to specific question (SQ)
Without much explanation, read this:
Emmanuel
Okay sir
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This essay will discuss both viewpoints in order to ascertain the best approach.
This essay will discuss both viewpoints in order to reach the best conclusion.
This essay will discuss both viewpoints in order to suggest a more
balanced/effective approach
This essay will discuss both viewpoints in order to ascertain the best approach.
This essay will discuss both viewpoints in order to reach the best conclusion.
This essay will discuss both viewpoints in order to suggest a more

balanced/effective approach
This essay will discuss both viewpoints in order to provide an objective suggestion
on a more effective approach
This essay will discuss both viewpoints in order to determine the most sustainable
method.
Study this part after the class
Tutor Fidelis
Example Some people think that universities should offer places to students who
have high marks. Others think that universities
Although certain people believe that only those with excellent grades should be
considered, others belong to the school of thought that all applicants should be
offered admission. This essay will discuss these viewpoints in order to determine
the best criteria for granting admision.
Any question so far?
Emmanuel
Sir please when you say this viewpoints,ought it not to be these viewpoints
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Emmanuel
Sir please when you say this viewpoints,ought it not to be these viewpoints
Corrected
Thank you
Let's move on
Emmanuel
Thanks sir
Tutor Fidelisadmin
We are done with our introduction
The second paragraph is called BP1 (Body Paragraph 1)
Here you should discuss just one of these views
Yewande Ipinlaye
Okay sit
Sir
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Remember it is not your view. It is other people's view. So it has to remain that
way in your essay.
There are many ways to start your BP1, but I will be adopting this simple method.
Study the main class for other methods
On the one hand, there is a major reason some people feel that (view)
In a discussion essay, simply start your sentence in BP 1 with
On the one hand,

Yewande Ipinlaye
Okay
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Although certain people believe that only those wit
On the one hand, there is a good reason some individuals believe that only high
performing candidates should be offered admission.
Your second sentence is to state the reason: The reason is that...
In some cases, you may just go ahead to state the reason without that
performing candidates should be offered admission. It is assumed that those
admitted with this criterion are more likely to cope better with the academic
demands of a university.
Notice here that I have stated the reason people hold view 1
So I answered the question: Why?
I need to explain that reason
That will form my next sentence
demands of a university. Before graduating, students are expected to attend
classes, conduct research, study and pass minimum number of courses.
After that, my next sentence is to provide an example.
classes, conduct research, study and pass minimum number of courses. For instance,
in Obafemi Awolowo University, students are expected to have a minimum of 3.0
Culminated Grade Point Average (CGPA) to retain their studentship.
Take note that, so far, my explanation and example are still hanging. I need
additional sentence to link it back to my topic sentence (second sentence)
Yewande Ipinlaye
Yes
Tutor Fidelisadmin
classes, conduct research, study and pass minimum number of courses. For instance,
in Obafemi Awolowo University, students are expected to have a minimum of 3.0
Culminated Grade Point Average (CGPA) to retain their studentship. Therefore, to
cope with this rigor of university education, people feel that those who can
withstand the pressure - that is, very intelligent candidates - should be admitted.
Can you see the link from the first to the last?
I have seen some students stopping at sentence 4. Not linking their sentences to
the central point makes their work incomplete and confusing
Any question
Yewande Ipinlaye
It is clear to me
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Okay
Can you try it
Yewande Ipinlaye
Yes I will. Can I send it in first thing tomorrow morning?
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Hydee
Understood
Tutor Fidelisadmin
Kindly cover the main class up to this point before writing. You may wish to refer
the discussion essay at the beginning of this group click here
Yewande Ipinlaye
Thank you sir
Emmanuel
On the one hand,there is a good point why some people believe that only top
performing candidates should be admitted into Universities.They believed that those
taken in with this consideration are more likely to meet up with academic demands
of a university. This is so because, the school environment is very tasking in
terms of mental, emotional and physical strength in conducting research,studying
and passing minimum number of course credit and lecture hours. Hence, to withstand
this rigorous academic environment, individuals feel that students who have been
known as high flyers should be admitted
Sir I have already written mine before the instructions. Although I will still go
ahead and study the main class to this point

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In short, shall refer to it as:

1. The commonly used:

Many people have varying views about... (the topic)

It is generally believed that everyone wants to be successful in life.

There are different ways people believe (think,) ....

There are various ways people define success.

2. The seemingly dramatic BS.

Nowadays, ...(topic)...is highly debatable among people

Same-sex marriage is a hotly debated topic in many African countries.

Psychologists and sociologists are interested in /worried or concerned about/

Meaning of vested interests:

According to ..., on average, one in every three marriage ends in divorce.

What, How, Which, When, Where, To whom, Whose etc.

Who should actually keep the environment clean?

Let's use this as a case in point.

Discuss both these both views and give your opinion

Generating a BS using a question that is answered by the VPP:

What does success really mean to people in the 21th century?

Is the question fitting to the VPP? Yes.

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

People use different criteria in selecting people as friends.

People have varying views on the criteria to select individuals as friends.

Although/while/whereas certain individuals opine that [view 1], others belong to

The above structure guarantees that, at least, 1 complex sentence is in your

Examiner will see this as low range of vocabulary

Referring to the Specific Question

Write 5 BS (use the five methods taught)

Submit using this formats

BS2: Nowadays, the appropriate strategy to minimize road accidents is highly

BS5: What is the best approach to reducing road accidents?

BS5: What is the best approach to reducing road accident?

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

BS4 - Every year, a lot of road accidents occur worldwide.

BS5 – What is the best approach to reduce accidents on the road?

Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

BS4 - Every year, a lot of road accidents occur worldwide.

A lot is informal and should not be used in formal essay

BS5 – What is the best approach to reduce accidents on the road?

No need for comma

BS4: According to The Daily Times report on traffic accidents,60% of traffic

How can reduction in road accidents be achieved? Whereas some category of

BS4. According to emergency response team, 2 in every 4 emergency call is as a

On the one hand,

Discuss both views and give your opinion

No agreement between sports and an avenue

Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Not bad, keep it up

Those are not relevant to your topic sentence

Discuss both these views and give your opinion

See the relationship between the phrases in bold

I need your response

BP 1: a cause and a solution

BP1: @ least 2 advantages

BP2: @ least 2 disadvantages

Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

You need to demonstrate that in your essay

You may also demonstrate this by saying

BP1: There are several advantages of (top)

What are the advantages and disadvantages of studying an online course?

Technology has significantly affected the method of imparting knowledge in recent

· What do you think the causes are?

This sentence is too long