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Ryan Gallagher
AP Literature
6 December, 2010
Meta-cognitive Essay
Seeing as this is a paper that’s sole purpose will be to analyze my thoughts and reasoning
behind the assignment, I feel that it is necessary to include my reason for choosing the optional
assignment that I did. The reason I chose the third optional assignment, which was the
“Hemingway V. Faulkner” creative writing piece, was for the reason that in the past, I have not
Hemmingway’s Hills like White Elephants as I believe William Faulkner would have told the
tale. The rewrite process proved long and difficult as I constantly had to refer back to examples of
both of the author’s work, in order to ascertain a better understanding of the differences between
the two, in addition to capturing the stylistic excellence that is Faulkner’s writing. This was in
essence the shorter, less drawn out, and typically conversation driven plots of Hemmingway,
opposed to the complex sentence structured, crammed with detail, and the constant looking into
the internal thoughts of the characters in the story. For me, the most difficult part of it all was
extending the conversations between the two characters, and finding a way to do that subtly, yet
sophisticatedly. Because there was not a lot to go on in terms of the thoughts of the characters, or
even in terms of their conversation, you will see how I had to constantly refer back to the setting,
which I utilized as a means of paralleling the thoughts and events of those characters involved in
the story.
From the very beginning, you will notice that I use an editorially omniscient narrator who
is also a participant, as they constantly utilize the first person pronoun, “I”. I chose to do this
because Faulkner usually used an omniscient narrator, who would at times insert his own
opinions about the events unfolding throughout a story, as was seen at the beginning of A Rose
for Miss Emily as the narrator comments on the women of the town’s main reason for being there
was “mostly out of curiosity to see the inside of her house” rather than to mourn for the loss of
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Miss Emily. I followed a similar pattern with my introduction as I wrote about how the bartenders
“only wished to see what the relationship was between the odd couple”, rather than being
genuinely interested in their service. This allows for the reader of my story to get a glimpse into
the mind of the bartenders. I also did not give the narrator a name or a gender, in order to parallel
A Rose for Miss Emily yet again, and the way that the narrator was never identified, which I
believe allowed them to be less restricted in describing the events of the unfolding story. The
significance of remaining genderless also allows the story to be personalized by the reader,
almost giving them the semblance that they are the ones witnessing the events taking place, and
allows for some interpretation of how they would react to the experiences based on their gender,
or personal experience. As far as the diction goes, I noticed how Faulkner hardly utilizes elevated
word choice, especially when depicting dialogue. On the contrary, Faulkner utilizes very
colloquia, almost slang words, as was seen in his short story, Barn Burning, when the father asks
“Where’s the nigger” (Barn Burning 163). The racial slur appears many times throughout the
story, in addition to appearing in many other stories written by Faulkner. This can be a result of
the kairotic moment at which his stories-the early nineteen-hundreds- a time when racism
proliferated throughout the southern region of the United States. For this reason, I also decided to
describe the woman serving drinks in great detail, as I commented on how she was a “large dark
woman who could have passed for a Negro.” This added detail was only implemented as a means
of paying homage to the style of William Faulkner, and his consistency as a regional writer who
Another aspect of his writing that made Faulkner standout stylistically was his constant
use of parenthesis in order to give the readers a glimpse into the minds of the characters and
narrator, or even as a means of providing more information to the reader about the subject.
Examples of this can be seen throughout Faulkner’s various works, as was scene in the beginning
of A Rose for Miss Emily, when the narrator describes how nobody had every been inside the
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house of Miss Emily, or even knew what it looked like “save an old manservant-a combined
gardener and cook-had seen in at least ten years” (A Rose for Miss Emily 26). This interruption
provides the reader with the reason why everyone other than this manservant had seen the house,
and that is as a result of his importance as a maintenance worker-which also gives us reason to
believe that he might have played a role in the murder of Homer Baron, but that is just
speculation-who had to care for the house. I emulated this when I wrote about how the bartender
grew “increasingly impatient,-she only wanted to hear what he wanted so she could be done with
him, and move onto her other customers”, which I used to emphasize the annoyance that the
bartender was experiencing. This is also seen on various occasions throughout the rewrite.
Finally, two major aspects behind the rewrite that ultimately told the story, was my use of
setting to establish theme and the symbolism behind the various props and actions of the
characters in the story. For example, in the original story, as written by Hemingway, the young
woman constantly looks off at the line of hills, which we interpreted as an attempt to hold on to
her innocence, and possibly even the achieving of purity and innocence through death: abortion. I
allowed for these aspects to remain the same, as they were the driving force behind the story’s
plot. As far as the setting is concerned, when one thinks of a bar, two things come to mind: a
place where information is shared, and where people go to forget about their problems. This
parallels the character’s reason for being there: to try and forget about their problems through
silence and drinking, in addition to the fact that they are there to discuss the situation regarding
the pregnancy of the girl, and the course of action that they will take to deal with it. More
symbolism can be seen in how the characters are also waiting in a train station. This is symbolic
of the fact that the two are waiting for her to give birth, in addition to the fact that they are
waiting anxiously, because neither one of them wanting to be the one to bring up the touchy
subject. A symbolic act can be found in how the man “placed his empty cup down on the counter,
instead of the felt pad that had been provided for that purpose” which is representative of his
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uncaring nature regarding the seriousness of the matter. This same idea was seen in Faulkner’s
Barn Burning, and how the act of burning the barn by the hands of the boys father was not a mere
act of spite, but rather “an expression of his profound hatred for anything not belonging to him”
(Kennedy Gioia 237). Similarly, the act of placing the cup somewhere other than the coaster, is
not just as act of physical negligence, but also one of emotional negligence.