Dear Abby,

Your title does an effective job at introducing the issue and your stance on the argument
that is going to be presented in your paper in a fairly objective way. By introducing your topic
with a reflection of the difference between past hunting practices and present ones, you are able
to strategically grab the reader’s attention while also convincing them that the issue is a
significant one that needs addressing. And by defining the concept of trophy hunting at the end
of your paragraph you are accommodating for readers that are both familiar and unfamiliar with
the topic, which ensures the clarity of your argument in future paragraphs. In addition, by
introducing both sides of the argument in your introduction you not only provide an unbiased
introduction to the issue, you also effectively forecast the arguments that are going to be
presented in the rest of the paper. Finally you end your introduction with a sound and clear thesis
statement that clearly defines your stance on the issue and helps transition into the next
paragraph. The structure of your body paragraphs does an effective job at maintaining flow of
reading and grouping arguments and counterarguments together in a way that sets up your claim
and helps support your argument. While your body paragraphs do include a lot of sound facts
and statistics to back up your points, you also include a lot of instances of pathos throughout
your paper, drawing attention from the hunters to the animals involved. This helps not only
provide evidence for your point, but also helps strengthen your other points that are discussed
throughout your paper. Using people’s emotions to support your argument is an effective way to
gain support from readers regarding your claim. Throughout your paper you don’t tend to make
any inferences regarding your counterarguments. All of your points are backed up with facts
from credible sources and statistics from organizations involved in the pursuit of this argument
(i.e PETA) which helps add to the credibility of your argument and provides trustworthiness due
to an unbiased and objective portrayal of the opposing sides views. Your conclusion effectively
brings completeness to the argument, following a similar structure to that of your introduction.
You also do a great job of incorporating your points into your concluding paragraph and using
that to argue why your position is the better one. You not only define the issue, you also provide
an effective strategy for solving it at the end of the paragraph. The only thing that would add to
the closure of your argument is to include a call to action for the readers and explain their role in
the execution of this solution. (Side note you might want to proofread your spelling of United
States throughout the paper)
Sincerely,
Madison Richardson