Editor’s Name: Kayla Brantley

Writer’s Name: Aracely Colon

First Impression:

• After reading the essay for the first time, what is your overall impression?

My overall impression of this essay is that it was well written and informative. The essay was

interesting, and I enjoyed the topic.

1. Introduction

• Is there a good title? Does it draw you, the reader, into the paper?

The wasn’t a title for the essay.

• What is the essay’s thesis? Is it clearly worded? Does it provide a focus for the rest of the

essay? Does the thesis state a causal argument? Does the claim identify clearly what causes and

effects are being examined?

The thesis for this essay is “Some people still question what change they can make to help the

environment and how it will make a difference, there are many solutions to becoming

environmentally friendly, that don’t necessarily involve completely changing their ways.” It is

clearly worded, and it does provide a focus for the essay. As she goes on to tell of different

simple changes in your daily life that can contribute to helping reduce the plastic or waste.

2. Content

• How clearly are the body paragraphs related to the essay’s thesis?

The body paragraphs are in relation to the essay’s thesis. They tell about the waste that is caused

by plastic and she gives small tips on how to help save the environment.
• Which topic sentences could be more focused?

I think the essay would transition better if the writer showed the problem or effect for the topic

sentence because each body paragraph tells of a solution to an individual problem.

• Does the writer use examples from their source material to support his/her points? What

about other examples?

Yes the writer used evidence for each paragraph from her sources.

• Is enough evidence furnished to get the audience to support the proposal? If not, what

additional evidence is needed? Does any of the evidence provided seem inappropriate or

otherwise ineffective? Why?

I think the evidence used was good. She has some that showed statistics and was informative to

help her claim.

• What kinds of sources are cited? How credible and persuasive will they be to readers?

What other kinds of sources might work better?

I found the sources very credible as I’ve mentioned the sources were informative. All the sources

pertain directly to the essay as they’re either for recycling, plastic, environment, or pollution.

• Where could the writer use more detail?

Normally when hearing about pollution to the world it has more dire consequences. I think the

essay could show the consequences of doing nothing or the irreversible damage. Maybe highlight

the scare factor.

• Is the essay organized – that is, can you follow the writer’s ideas? Does the essay need

transitions?

The essay is organized. I think the transitions between paragraphs need to be a little smoother.

3. Conclusion
• Is there a conclusion?

Yes, there is, and I like how she starts it with “Reduce, Reuse, Recycle.”

4. Assignment Requirements

• Does the essay meet the minimum requirements for length?

The word count is a little short.

• Does the essay meet MLA guidelines for spacing, heading, and a works cited page?

Yes, the essay is in MLA formatting.

Comments:

• Which parts of the essay are especially clear or stand out for you, the reader?

I think the tips that are through the essay stand out to me the most.

• What questions do you have that are not answered in the essay?

Maybe where to take recyclables? I know that my city doesn’t have the weekly recyclable pick

up like other larger cities do. I’d like to know how or where to take my recycles.