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Does your narrative stay tightly focused on the issue it raises for you?
The paper tends to lean heavily on statistics.
Do you have a paragraph or two that contextualizes your issue in relation to the narrative? How
or why did your experience raise these questions for you?
Not really. I figured the literature review would be a more formal approach to my
topic.
Is your thesis in your literature review clearly asserting a point about the research you will be
discussing?
Yes. The statistics and cultural are stacked against men’s mental health.
Does your thesis statement correspond with your concluding statement(s), or are they making
different arguments?
My thesis is more about statistics than the conclusion, which is about society.
Do your body paragraph sentences refer back to, or act as smaller arguments that help to support
your thesis statement?
Yes. They draw on the mention of statistics.
If not, how can you tie your arguments back to your thesis?
My arguments could do a better job of analyzing the statistics.
Or, how might you alter your thesis to “fit” the arguments you are making in your body
paragraphs and conclusion?
I could include more of a social aspect to my thesis.
What evidence can you use to better support your thesis and/or your smaller body paragraph
arguments?
I could weave the thesis into the body paragraphs more.
Second, take a look at your body paragraph sentences and how they relate to one another. Ask
yourself:
Do your body paragraph sentences connect to and flow with one another?
. Yes. They bookend the ideas that I discuss in the paragraph.
Is each body paragraph sentence introducing a new concept or idea?
Yes. They also build off of other ideas.
Do the first and last sentence of your body paragraph accurately represent what you want to
argue in that paragraph?
Yes, although they could be stronger.
How do your paragraphs speak to each other?
They carry the flow of the topic from one paragraph to the other.
Are they disconnected, or do they build toward the statement you’re making in your conclusion?
They branch off of the main idea in separate ways and come back to the thesis at
the end.
If not, how can you rearrange or further connect each body paragraph to one another through the
first and last sentences that you have included here?
I could include more information from the other paragraphs in each paragraph.
How can you re-work your body paragraph sentences to more accurately express the arguments
you wish to make?
I could make them more clear and draw more succinct conclusions.