There are severalserious errors in technical English that detract from the rather good content of

this essay. In the first paragraph, the third sentence (beginning with

“That it is . . .”) is a fragment, as is the third sentence of paragraph three (beginning with “The
journalist . . .”). An error in capitalization appears in the first sentence

of the essay; Wall Street should be capitalized. Medicare should also be capitalized. Although
points are not taken off for errors like these, they do detract from

the general impression of the writer as competent and in command of Standard Written English.

The style is rather informal, and this is certainly acceptable. However, certain devices should be
avoided; it is better to use a third-person approach (people) rather

than a second-person approach (you). The last sentence of the first paragraph would be
stylistically improved in this way, as would the second paragraph. Also,

words such as okay should be changed to acceptable or permissible.

The content is clear and the writer addresses the central issue throughout the essay. Good
examples are provided in the third paragraph. The first sentence of the

third paragraph captures the attention of the reader, as does the finalsentence of the essay

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