SAR 6

by kaitlyn holcomb

Submission date: 07-Aug-2019 09:24AM (UTC-0500)

Submission ID: 1158355666
File name: 109688_81413792_1081767978_SAR_6.docx (124.95K)
Word count: 359
Character count: 1620
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ORIGINALITY REPORT

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SIMILARITY INDEX
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INTERNET SOURCES
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www.bradshawgroup.com
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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

86
I love the image that you have chosen to work with for
this assignment. I think it is very provocative, but you
and I see very different things here.

I am very curious about who you feel is the target

audience.

/100 Be as specific as you can be. I like that you addressed

the use of babies, and that you picked out the disparity
between the white babies being portrayed as babies,
and the brown skinned baby being portrayed as a
domestic servant, as if she was born for that role?

But do really think about how the audience. Also

consider that both the way the world actually works and
the way it "should" work are important aspects of this
argument.

B + 86

PAGE 1

QM "You"
2nd person isn't appropriate for academic writing. Do not directly address your audience.

Comment 1
I am not sure what you mean here? What is the distinction? What do you mean by brought upon by
their family?

Comment 2
The image is a visual argument, not a visual analysis. Your response is the analysis.

Comment 3
Are you sure this is the argument the image is making? Look closely at the image and the text. Not it
says "shouldn't" not "doesn't." I think that is a very important distinction to recognize when examining
the claim the image is making.

QM Missing ","
Missing comma:
 Though it may not always be grammatically necessary, a comma can often help to prevent a
misreading. When a sentence opens with an introductory element (a phrase, clause or word that is
logically related to another phrase or clause in the same sentence), it is a great help to your reader
to place a comma after that introductory element. Such phrases will often begin with words like
"because," "while" or "although," as in the following example: "While everyone was fighting, the bear
wandered away." As you can see, without the comma, the sentence would be confusing.

Comment 4
But why are they infants? Who is the target audience?

Comment 5
as

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Comment 6
define this term

Comment 7
powerful? empowering?