The provided line graph depicts an increasing population in Commented [MM1]: Since it's not sheer increasing, I'd

rather not write "increasing".

India and China between 2000 and 2050.
A glance at a graph reveals that India had allocated more
population to itself during the process.
Commented [MM2]: 1st. The use of past perfect isn't right
(let me know your descriptions if you think yes)
2nd. Word choice isn't appropriate. Check the meaning of
"allocate".

As it is clear, the number of residents climbed gradually in

China in the early 2020s then remained steadily steady over Commented [MM3]: Not a true assumption. For further
information needed contact me.
10years. In contrast, India, that followed an upward trend,
surged rapidly from a thousand million residents to well above
1400 million from 2000 to 2030. It can be seen that, before
they acted oppositely, they had come across to 1450 in 2030. Commented [MM4]: Not a right assumption.

Afterward, the increasing population kept going and reached

1600 million in India in 2050. However, China population
dropped below 1400.
It is quite evident that the total resident's number in India was
will be a wellhead of China from 2030 to 2050 also, it is needed
to mention that it was is vice-versa from 2000 to 2030.

Expected band:

Grammatical
Task Coherence and Lexical
range and
achievement cohesion resource
accuracy
Band 7 6.5 6.5 6
Overall 6.5