In the modern world, people are no longer necessary to use

food from animals or products from animals such as

medicine and clothing. Agree or disagree
264 words
In this day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been
placed on the fact that people do not have to use food and products Commented [MOU1]: Chỗ này lủng củng nè
unnecessarily use
made from animals. In my opinion, I support this idea for all reasons
mentioned below.
Firstly, killing animals for medicine and clothing may detrimentally
affect the nature’s ecosystem. To be more specific, It has been Commented [MOU2]: Our natural ecosystem
Commented [MOU3]: Câu main idea chỗ này nên nói kĩ
scientifically shown that all living organisms consider each other as a ra là gây mất cân bằng sinh thái luôn, do main idea là
câu trả lời thứ 1 cho cái câu 2 ở intro em nói á In my
source of food, which creates the food chain in the ecosystem. As a opinion, I support this idea for all reasons mentioned below.
Kiểu ý nó phải bao quát
result, when people over hunt wild animals for medicine or clothing
industries, the shortage of any pieces in this chain may lead to the Commented [MOU4]: Bỏ

imbalance of the ecosystem. For example, when rabbits are hunted for
medicine, their predators such as tigers or lions may be forced into the
verge of extinction due to the serious shortage of food. Commented [MOU5]: Chỗ này mà paraphrase đc thì
điểm cao hơn

Secondly , the products made from animals are not as effective as they Commented [MOU6]: Mấy cái này lo paraphrase đi

are rumoured. In other words, such medicines do not truly contain
substances which are believed to be the treatment for serious diseases
such as cancer. Or worse, when being metabolised, those substances
can cause the allergic for human being. For example, because it is said
that the ivory of Elephants and Rhinos is likely to make people feel
Commented [MOU7]: , so …. Ê giải thích kĩ ra vì vậy
nên là gì gì đó đi em, chứ đọc chưa thấy liên quan lắm
tới cái câu 2 intro á In my opinion, I support this idea for
all reasons mentioned below.
Kiểu main idea em phải viết sao mà examiner nó có
dốt tới mấy cũng phải hiểu
Commented [MOU8]: Hoặc dùng To make matters
worse,

stronger, they end up being over hunted by human. However, it has

been proven that ivory only contains protein which has the same
function of that found in human’s hair and nail.  ê kiểu phải lồng
ghép hoặc kết luận lại nói là nên bữa nay human có thể dùng mấy cái
alternative products làm bằng mấy cái k phải animals vẫn đảm bảo sức
khỏe hay gì đấy, kiểu nó phải link vào cái đề em

In conclusion, I once again affirm that products made from animals

should be banned for all reasons mentioned above.
VIẾT BÀI LẦN 2: In the modern world, people are no longer
necessary to use food from animals or products from
animals such as medicine and clothing. Agree or disagree

275 words

In this day and age, more and more contemporary attention has been
placed on the fact that people unnecessarily use food and products
made from animals. In my opinion, I support this idea for all reasons
mentioned below.
Firstly, killing animals for medicine and clothing may destroy the
balance of our natural ecosystem. To be more specific, It has been
scientifically shown that all living organisms consider each other as a
source of food, which creates the food chain in the ecosystem. As a
result, when people over hunt wild animals for medicine or clothing,
the shortage of any pieces in this chain may lead to the imbalance of
the ecosystem. For example, when rabbits are hunted for medicine,
their predators such as tigers or lions may be forced into the verge of
extinction due to the serious food shortage.

Secondly, although it is rumoured that natural products have

extraodinary effects, these products are truly cannot meet the user’s
expectation. In other words, It is clear that natural medicines do not
contain substances which can be the treatment for serious diseases such
as cancer. To make matters worse, when being metabolised, those
substances can cause the allergic for human being. For example, the
ivory of Elephants and Rhinos are mistakenly belived to make humans
stronger although their so-called precious component is just protein
which shares same function as humans’ hair or nail. Therefore, people
should use products which are combined from artificial substances
rather than killing animals for natural products.
In conclusion, I once again affirm that products made from animals
should be banned for all reasons mentioned above.

1. Ecosystem: all the living things in an area and the way they affect
each other and the environment : hệ sinh thái
2. Imbalance: a situation in which two things that should be equal
or that are normally equal are not : sự mất cân bằng
3. The verge of extiction: bờ vực của sự tuyệt chủng
4. Meet someone’s expectation: đáp ứng sự kì vọng
5. Metabolise: to use chemical processes in the body to turn food
into energy, new growth, and waste products: hấp thụ
6. Allergic: dị ứng
7. Artifiical: made by people, often as a copy of something natural:
nhân tạo