Kevin Garcia

English 102

Professor Batty

12/12/2018

Poetry Essay Reflection

In this revision of the essay, I felt I needed to remake the whole essay due issue with

getting the message that I wanted to give, I felt my introduction to my thesis was weak and had a

full of grammar issues. My thesis was not clear of the purpose of the essay, so I rewrote thesis to

more clear and easier to identify. My topic sentence is now aligned with my thesis. Before my

essay was jumping around to different subjects and it was not clear to the readers. I felt that I had

to many quotes in my essay, so I cut half of my quotes. In my previous draft I felt that the quotes

did not really focus on my subject, so I chose the three that did. The biggest issue from essay was

the supporting details and the wrap up of my body paragraph. Professor Batty pointed it that my

logic was all over the place and was not clear to the reader. Also, the professor pointed out that I

should focus on each part of the song. In this revision I broke down each line in the quote and

explain the message and the purpose of the quote. I also tied up the whole quote in a single

sentence to make the whole message clear to the readers.The only thing I decided to keep was

the conclusion because I felt that still pertain to my essay.