Group Assignment for GLSC session 3

KatherinaWijaya - 1601221710

Kennardi Wijaya – 1601226573

Raihan Abhari – 1601250471

Ronaldo Yonathan – 1601264312

Kevin – 1601226844

Sarah Rizky Andyni – 1601273582

Sharen Lefisia - 1601221686

1. Revise these sentences to improve you-attitude. Eliminate any awkward phrasing. In some cases, you
may need to add information to revise the sentence effectively.

a. We will expect payment in full from you by the fifth day of each month.

 We'll be waiting for your payment in full each month by the fifth day

b. Your error tax form will result in a penalty to you of $ 14.17.

 We're sorry that we will charge you $ 14.17 from your tax form because there's some error

c. This letter you wrote is simply awful; you need to rewrite it for me ASAP.

 There's some missing word from your letter, it will be nice if you wrote it again and send it to me
by the end of day

d. Your service contract with us is hereby terminated.

 I'd like to tell you that your contract with us will terminated until further notice
2. Revise the following sentences to improve emphasise. In some cases, you may need to add or omit
information to revise effectively.

a. Don’t drop in without an appointment. Your counselor or caseworker may be unavailable.

 You will see a counselor or social worker if you make an appointment in advance

b. Don’t forget to let your supervisor know that you won’t be coming in on Monday because you are
taking a vacation day.

 Be sure to let your supervisor know that you can't attend on Monday

c. I apologize for my delay in answering your inquiry. The problem was that I had to check with our
suppliers to see whether we could provide the item in the quantity you say you want. We can.

 There's a problem that I have to handle first with our suppliers, I'm sorry for the inconvenience
that make me delay your inquiry

d. If you have any problems using your e-mail account, I will try to explain it so that you can understand.

 We'll gladly to help you if there's some problem regarding your email account