Anjalissa Avila

Professor Ditch

English 113A

9 May 2018

Reflection Essay

To begin with, I know the way in which my writing has improved from the beginning of

the

semester to now are because my grade improvement. At the beginning of the semester the

majority of the assignments were all zeros because I did not follow the correct format and just

my writing structure in general. I knew that I had to work on my grammar that included run-on

sentences and transition sentences. The main thing that I really worked on too was my

introduction paragraphs. The Learning Resource center was definitely a huge help for me and my

papers. The tutor changing my entire paragraph, they made sure that the thoughts that I had on

my paper stayed the same. In other words, instead of changing the common idea, which was the

mentality was the key to happiness, she made sure that I was specific in the thesis. Another thing

that the tutor helped me with was that she mentioned that my sentences were sporadic, but she

suggested that I should not completely take them off, but that each of those sentences could of

went into their own paragraph. By having someone else read my papers made a huge difference

to my essays. Looking back at progression essay was a huge change in my writing and with

grading wise too. The LRC was very helpful and it was useful..The tutor took her time reading

my paper and was marking down some notes and sentence suggestions for my thesis. The

objectives on my paper was to shorten my introduction and to make my thesis statement clear
enough for the reader to understand, also to make sure that I was understanding the prompt

correctly.

In my first progression essay a lot of the sentences that I wrote were awkward and run

ons,

for example, in my progression one essay I had to change the majority in my second paragraph in

which I replaced with, “People tend to mistakenly confuse pleasure as happiness because

according to the novel, ​Pursuing Happiness, ​the article, ​The Sources of Happiness, ​by authors

His Holiness the Dalai Lama and Howard Cutler both mention in the book that pleasure is

something when certain desires are met and it only last for a small amount of time, as to with

happiness is it a lifetime experience.” This conveyed that I had to add more details and be more

specific with what I was talking about in my essay. One of the main things that that I kept on

getting suggested for was to write about things and be more specific as if people never had never

read the book before. When it came to my second progression essay a lot of more changes were

made within each paragraph. In my second essay some of the changes I made were as followed,”

In the novel, “​The Guernsey Literary and Potato Peel Society​”, conveys the way in which the

characters Juliet Ashton, Markham Reynolds and other characters impact the member of the

society during the crisis that happened during World War II.” This was right at the beginning of

my introduction paragraph. I mentioned how the book was relevant to the state of mind and

whatever brings us joy is the key to our happiness. I know that I made a huge improvement and I

know that my writing is not perfect, but it is much better than it was at the beginning of the

semester. I also know that format is very important and citing. I know it may be intentional, but I

now know that it is possible to plagiarize yourself. With more practice and more visits to the
Learning resource center I can make a huge difference with my writing. So on that note, I know

my writing has improved.

Work Cited:

Avila, Anjalissa: Progression Essay 1 and 2