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by Michael Kawamoto
good
strange combination
Frag.
good--does it
relate to
other
The prompt asks for only
sources?
one purpose and one
introduction.
causes or diagnoses?
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SIMILARIT Y INDEX
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INT ERNET SOURCES
2%
PUBLICAT IONS
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ST UDENT PAPERS
PRIMARY SOURCES
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Submitted to CSU, Fullerton
St udent Paper 2%
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Naoko Mato, Kiyoshi Hirahara, Tomomi
Ichikawa, Jin Kumagai et al. "Memory-type
1%
ST2+CD4+ T cells participate in the steroid-
resistant pathology of eosinophilic pneumonia",
Scientific Reports, 2017
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Text Comment. Michael, You've f ound solid sources, written accurate citations, and
explained the usef ulness of each article--good! T he trouble here is that you needed to f ollow
the prompt's instructions to earn the maximum points. When you prepare to write your next
paper, be sure to review the prompt f irst, so you don't do more work than necessary (or
redundant work).
QM ||
Problem in Parallel Form:
Coordinate ideas should be expressed in parallel f orm. All expressions that are similar in
content and f unction should be expressed similarly.
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QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."
Text Comment. T he prompt asks f or only one purpose and one introduction.
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RUBRIC: 36 3 ANNOT BIBLIO RUBRIC 4
ABSENT OR BELOW Audience's needs are of ten not recognized: terms and ideas need explanation and
BASIC language needs adjustment f or the audience. Purpose (to persuade reader that
sources are appropriate f or your review) isn't clear or achieved.
DEVELOPING Shows some attention to audience's needs, sometimes def ining necessary terms and
ideas and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to persuade reader that
sources are appropriate f or your review) may be unclear at times, and it may not be
achieved convincingly.
PROFICIENT Usually shows attention to audience's needs, def ining necessary terms and ideas
and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to persuade reader that sources
are appropriate f or your review) may be implied, but it's clear and achieved.
ADVANCED Shows sophisticated attention to audience's needs, def ining necessary terms and
ideas and using audience-appropriate language. Purpose (to persuade reader that
sources are appropriate f or your review) is clear and achieved with style.
ABSENT OR BELOW Omits or uses discipline-appropriate in-text and end-of -text citations and quotation
BASIC marks incorrectly. Drops quotations and ideas into text without introducing source.
Frequently uses irrelevant or unpersuasive sources or relies exclusively on one
source.
DEVELOPING A f ew errors in discipline-appropriate in-text and end-of -text citations and quotation
marks. Of ten includes sources without introduction in cases when introduction is
necessary and discipline appropriate. Sometimes relies too heavily on a single source
or uses irrelevant or unpersuasive sources.
PROFICIENT Correctly uses discipline-appropriate in-text and end-of -text citations and quotation
marks. Usually introduces each source f ully (as necessary and discipline-appropriate)
—reader knows who did the research or communicating, f or whom, and why. Use of
sources is usually diverse, relevant and persuasive.
ADVANCED Correctly uses discipline-appropriate in-text and end-of -text citations and quotation
marks. Introduces each source f ully (as necessary and discipline-appropriate)—
reader knows who did the research or communicating, f or whom, and why. Use of
sources is always diverse, relevant and persuasive.
ABSENT OR BELOW Annotations to the working title and purpose are unclear, and their relevance,
BASIC timeliness, balance, and authority may be questionable or unclear. Alternately, the
writer may not have written the required sentences f or each source.
DEVELOPING Annotations are related to the working title and purpose, but their relevance,
timeliness, balance, and authority may be questionable or unclear.
PROFICIENT Annotations usually persuade reader that the listed sources support the working title
and purpose and are relevant, timely, balanced, and authoritative.
ADVANCED Annotations persuade reader that the listed sources support the working title and
purpose and are relevant, timely, balanced, and authoritative.
ABSENT OR BELOW Organizational devices (working title and purpose, intro, summary sentences,
BASIC headings) are missing or unclear. 100-word annotations are incoherent.
DEVELOPING Organizational devices (working title and purpose, intro, summary sentences,
headings) f it the prompt, but may be vague, too broad, or inconsistently or illogically
linked. 100-word annotations may not be coherent.
PROFICIENT Clear, specif ic organizational devices (working title and purpose, intro, summary
sentences, headings) f it the prompt and tie ideas and topics together. 100-word
annotations are coherent.
ADVANCED Clear, specif ic organizational devices (working title and purpose, intro, summary
sentences, headings, etc.) f it the prompt and tie ideas and topics together logically
and seamlessly. 100-word annotations f low logically and seamlessly.
ABSENT OR BELOW Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors impede readability. Lanuage may ref lect
BASIC a gender or cultural bias. Design may be unconventional and inef f ective.
DEVELOPING Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors of ten impede readability or otherwise
distract f rom meaning. Lanuage may occasionally suggest a gender or cultural bias.
Design may be inconventional or inef f ective.
PROFICIENT Spelling, syntax, diction, or punctuation errors are f ew and do not distract f rom
meaning. Lanuage respects gender and cultural dif f erences. Design is conventional
and ef f ective.
ADVANCED Outstanding control of language, including ef f ective diction and sentence variety.
Lanuage respects gender and cultural dif f erences. Design is conventional and
ef f ective.