Prep Sheet for OP-Doc Critique

Group Members:

Isaac, Ashley, Frida, Carlos

Quick Synopsis of OP-Doc (Intro, Act I, Act II and Ending)

*It might also be helpful to use your Planning Circle to explain this part.
Part 1: Poem and Title
Part 2: Path to homelessness and experiences
Part 3: Interviews and daily struggles
Part 4: Statistics and question

Purpose for the OP-Doc (what you want the audience to take away after viewing)
We want to dispel the myths that all homeless teens are runaways. We also want to show
their daily struggle.

What dilemmas or issues would you like specific feedback on from your group and
senior?
We want to know if our ending is good enough or too sudden and also how we can improve in
general areas.

Notes Section- Complete this during the Critique Protocol on Friday, February 9th.
● Have a close up of teen eyes then it goes black and goes into something else.
● Make it more dramatic/ add some pauses
● Step back towards the fact that all teens are runaways
● Get different teenagers we can talk to on the streets and have them all say “the
numbness which protects me”
● San diego youth services golden hill youth center
● ==_Good beginning
● Strong idea/ the ending could be our own addition to poem or having everyone say the
same thing
● How we can help
● Donate guy clothes/socks, underwear, shoes

Notes for February 23rd

Poem was good
Song called Tomorrow
Re-record the poem , more than one person
Take out the black transition
B-real for poem
Too fast transitions between struggles, B-real , Break up evidence
Fade interview from black screen
Use silhouette, raise voice of the guy

​https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=osg9PmkfTB0

03/02/17

Say “ Homeless teens face many struggles” Raise voice

Lack of a constant place to stay
Make sure timing is the same ^
Use same font
Combine lack of education and job opportunities
Delete “ As well as all the struggles teens face”
Cut gap of interview from isaiah
Add subtitles to interviews
Crop Ashley out
Add b-roll to interviews
Cut Michelle’s interview
Michelle’s name should come up sooner
Fade music out after question comes up
Add subtitles through b-roll
Raise audio to interviews

- We like that you guys added an question at the end to keep the audience thinking
- Some of the pauses are an little to long as well as the text last to long
- Add subtitles when everyone talks throughout the video
- First name is to fast
- Background music at the end, make it more upbeat
- Background for subtitles are different maybe keep it consistent throughout.