this is very difficult, never forget the group youre writing for and always know that inputting

notes is much easier than playing the part

This rhythm is going to be very tough at this tempo with more than one note
on these vibe chords, you probably dont need the root of each chord twice, unless you really want it that way
ensure that you can play this piano part, its pretty difficult
this g is going to be out of tune on our timpani, its very high up and ours suck
what does regular sticks mean?
it isnt as much in the recording, but be aware of the fact that when the timpani drops out, were going to lose the feeling of the bass voice and that will throw people off
 new dynamic?
fortissimo will be a lot here, maybe mezzo forte or forte at most i would think
diminuendo parts or else it will be a huge dropoff texture change, unless thats what you want
 i wouldnt change to 4/4 here with a different tempo, it will just confuse people.
if it were me, id the just add a fermata and a caesura
have vibraphone be marked significantly lower than fortissimo here, especially because its not the main melody
this is going to be loud
 mark down a dynamic, it will come out anyways, dont want too much
the notes with the parenthesis will confuse, and i read the arranger notes, but a skilled player will do that anyways
id say mark this down a dynamic or two, dont want to overpower. also, you can just write l.v. and they will know not to dampen, or just write sim. in the following measure
specify, hit with a soft mallet? roll? etc.
 y cresc.?
a lot of repetition beyond main melody, add dynamic contrast!
again, probably dont need two roots, especially if other instruments are covering those notes
super confusing rhythm, will throw people off.
try writing it in an easier to read way?
let ring? dampen?
potentially add more harmony, dont want it to be just two yparts
you can also just write ped.
 always add dynamics at new sections!
going to be very very tough
this whole section will be very difficult on mallets
weird looking - try to rewrite
piano cant play a chord and just sustain two notes and crescendo through,
either make it a whole note or the same rhthym as mrm. 2
beaming eights like this will make people think its a triplet
slurs infer pedal
confusing looking
also very confusing, maybe give sus
note to vibes?
 super abrupt ending with no resolution, you can do this if you want, but id have a huge two, five, one chord ending
overall, great job. what took me forever to learn is to not write for the midi sounds, but to write for players. also, be very aware of the skill level of the people youre writing for. add lots of dynamics and expression.
be aware of switching sections to other sections, and to not have too many voices drop or else it wont sound smooth to the listeners ear.
good job!
jake