The graph shows oil production capacity for several Gulf countries between 1990 and

2010.

The bar chart illustrates the amount of oil production in 6 countries from 1990 to 2010, measured in Commented [A1]: productivity to avoid repetition.
million barrels per day. Commented [A2]: during a 10-year period starting 1990. to
avoid repetition
Overall, oil production generally increased over the years. Also, Saudi Arabia produced the highest Commented [A3]: Not really necessary. You can leave it out.
amount of oil, while accounted for the lowest volume of oil production. Commented [A4]: ??? Which country?

From 1990 to 2010, there was a significant increase in oil production in Saudi Arabia. In 1990,
approximately 9 million barrels of oil was produced by Saudi Arabia before reaching a peak of over 14 Commented [A5]: made to avoid repetition.
million barrels per day in 2010. By contrast, the amount of oil which were produced in Qatar remained Commented [A6]: Not necessarily since you have mentioned
this name before.
relatively constant at less than 1 million barrels per day.

The figures for the other countries in terms of oil production went up slightly during the period. In Iran, Commented [A7]: No need for this.
over 3 million barrels was produced per day in 1990, compared with roughly 2 million barrels in the
remaining countries. Throughout the remainder of period, the figures for Iran rose slightly to over 4 Commented [A8]: data to avoid repetition.
million barrels per day in 2010, while that of Iraq, Kuwait, and UAE also increased, but grew to under 4 Commented [A9]: minimally
million barrels per day.

Task response 7 You have given a good overview, but the

opening sentence still repeated the words in the
topic. You may lose marks because of it.
An acceptable number of comparisons have
been included. Good job.
Cohesion and coherence 6.5 Although a limited number of cohesive devices
was used, it was not too difficult to follow the
thread. My suggestion is that you use more
linking words to make it more academic and
earn higher bands.
Vocabulary 6 Repetitions still occurred frequently. You have
mentioned the unit too many times. It is not a
must for you to always insert the unit. You can
simply use the figures only. My advice is that
you should use thesaurus.com to help find
more synonyms to support your task.
Grammar 7.5 There were some minor mistakes with the
tenses, but overall the use of grammar was
good. Try to use more variations of
grammatical structures and increase their
complexity to earn a higher band.
Overall 6.75 By far your task is levelled at Acceptable. You
should find different ways of interpreting the
given data to make it more interesting. Keep
up the good work and try to avoid the mistakes
in the future. Good luck!