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IRBR CLIO - Mdulo: Ingls Regular- Professor: Anthony Rosenberg
Class 7 Essay Writing: Brainstorming and Planning
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Tips for Rio Branco English Writing Test - Composition
General Structure
1st paragraph Introduction to broad theme in first sentence, moving towards a more
specific argument in the final sentence(s) the Thesis Statement.
2nd, 3rd (and 4th if needed) Development of supporting ideas that aid the readers understanding of
the Thesis Statement presented in the Introduction. These paragraphs
should be linked by means of transition sentences.
Last (5th or 4th) paragraph - Wrapping up of argument, linking ideas to the initial Thesis Statement.
Language Specifics
Vary language - Try not to repeat language; that is, use synonyms. The aim is to show
off the wide range of sophisticated vocabulary you have.
Idiomatic expressions - Employ them carefully. Do not exaggerate on the number per essay.
Phrasal verbs - Employ them only when necessary. Do not exaggerate on the number
per essay.
Sophisticated vocab - Used sophisticated language. This means that sometimes the Latin-
based word is a better option.
Sentence Structure
Vary length - Try to vary the length of sentences within each paragraph. This avoids
monotony and promotes advanced structure as well as interesting turns of
phrase (a chance to show off!).
Connectives - These are helpful tools, but do not overuse them. Avoid repetition of
connectives.
Vary starters - Start sentences with different parts of speech (gerunds, connective
clauses, adverbial clauses, pre-modifying adjective clauses, etc.).
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IRBR CLIO - Redao Ingls - 2009 - Unidade Rio
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What can go wrong, why and how to fix it
1) My Introduction is too long
What went wrong? Why did it go wrong? What can I do?
- You wrote too much in the - You tried to include too much - Eliminate information that is not
Introduction information necessary
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7) My essay seems informal
What went wrong? Why did it go wrong? What can I do?
- Essay lacks level of - you probably used too many - Substitutive informal language
sophistication for Rio Branco test colloquial terms, slang, phrasal for formal (sometimes Latin-
verbs etc. based) vocab
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12) My Conclusion is quite repetitive
What went wrong? Why did it go wrong? What can I do?
- Your Conclusion does not deliver - You have probably tried to - Do not summarize. The essay is
the punch it should and it seems summarize your essay in the too short to warrant a summary.
you are chuvendo no molhado Conclusion. Try to prompt the reader with
rhetorical questions; consider how
things could have been different;
how things may be different if
something is done (future); make
suggestions
INTRODUCTIONS:
Openings
Dictionary definitions of words your reader should know (unless you are redefining them);
Rhetorical questions Did you know? or Have you ever wondered? are a no-no;
Do not use This paper will be about In this paper I will prove;
Beginning too far away from your actual topic (e.g. There are many novels, all of which have
characters. Some characters are heroes, and some are not.); and
A book report list of irrelevant facts (William Shakespeare lived in the Elizabethan era in England.
He wrote many plays. One of these plays was Hamlet.).
Thesis Statements
c) A thesis is the main idea, not the title. It must be a complete sentence that explains in some
detail what you expect to write about.
Title: Social Security and Old Age.
Thesis: Continuing changes in the Social Security System make it almost impossible to plan intelligently for
one's retirement.
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d) A thesis statement is narrow, rather than broad. If the thesis statement is sufficiently
narrow, it can be fully supported.
Broad: The American steel industry has many problems.
Narrow: The primary problem in the American steel industry is the lack of funds to renovate outdated
plants and equipment.
f) A thesis statement may have one or more main points. However, they must be directly
connected to the same argument. Disconnected arguments in the same thesis statement can
not only make it too difficult for the reader to understand, but also for the writer to support.
Disconnected main points: Stephen Hawking's physical disability has not prevented him from becoming a
world-renowned physicist, and his book is the subject of a movie.
Connected main points: Stephen Hawking's physical disability has not prevented him from becoming a
world renowned physicist and author.
On stem-cell research
The United States government should not fund stem-cell research because such research is not
ethical, cost-effective, or medically necessary.
In this essay, we can expect to see a paragraph on ethics; another on cost
effectiveness; and another on medical necessity.
On World War II
Americas use of the atomic bomb at the end of World War II was an unnecessary action that caused
unprecedented civilian casualties for purely political ends.
In this essay, we can expect to see a paragraph on the destruction caused by the
atomic bomb; and another on the political motives behind the decision to use the
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bomb. It highly likely that the Conclusion will present alternatives that could have
been taken.
Sample introductions
The underlined part is the Thesis Statement. Notice how each paragraph starts broad, then takes the reader
to more restricted arguments. Finally, the texts reach a very specific argument, which is presented last.
Only about half of the freshmen entering most American colleges each year ever graduate. It is not that
freshmen students are not intelligent, and the reasons half drop out are numerous. As it is quite normal to
study away from ones hometown, some merely get homesick, while others transfer to other types of
education, and still others leave for personal or economic reasons. Yet, a large number of students do in fact
leave for academic reasons, and most of these students never graduate because they do not realize the time
and dedication to study that success in college requires.
Practically every consumer, including those who do not smoke and would never even consider taking up the
habit, can easily identify each of the following slogans: Id walk a mile for a Camel, Come to Malboro
Country, and Youve Come a Long Way, Baby. Advertising, bombarding us on every level, is so
widespread and pervasive that we rarely give it a second thought. However, the images presented in these
advertisements are etched in our minds whether we choose to admit it or not. Even children are not immune
to the effects of advertising. In fact, children and adolescents are now targeted in Cigarette campaigns as
potential consumers. Our children are potential victims of unscrupulous individuals who would use a cartoon
character, such as Joe Camel, to sell cigarettes to adolescents. The only real concern of cigarette
advertisers, who use all their wiles to deliberately seduce the buying public, including children, is the bottom
line. They clearly do not act in the best interest of the consumer.
Rebellion in the Backlands was written in the beginning of the twentieth century by one of the most
influential writers in Brazil: Euclides da Cunha. At that time, Brazilian society followed a French pattern and
searched for a European understanding of civilization. The Republic had just been installed in Brazil a few
years before, and there was a constant need to provide definitions and concepts for the Brazilian nation.
Hence, Rebellion in the Backlands is of the utmost importance to understand the Brazilian identity, since
Euclides da Cunha turned his back on Europe and showed the real blend of social, racial and cultural aspects
that shaped Brazilians.
BODY PARAGRAPHS:
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historical facts (make sure you are clear on them. Do not guess);
statistics (make sure you are clear on them. Do not guess);
specific examples (make sure they are relevant. Do not go off on figurative tangents); and
other factual data.
TRANSITIONS:
Transitions glue ideas (paragraphs) in an essay together. In both academic writing and professional writing,
your goal is to: convey information clearly and concisely; and convert the reader to your way of thinking.
Transitions help you to achieve these goals by establishing logical connections between paragraphs and
sections of your paper.
Examples of transitions
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Notwithstanding such pertinent and crucial recommendations, it cannot be neglected that
the human rights approach proposes the best framework for prison management and reform in
Brazil. All individuals, whether in gaol or not, are born with human dignity. Because they hold rights
not only against other people, but also against the State, they must be treated with entire respect
for their dignity. Therefore, cruel, inhumane or ill treatment is severally prohibited, especially if
committed by a State agent.
(Conclusion has been omitted)
In the first transition, the last sentence of the first body paragraph refers back to the problems presented in
the previous paragraph (dire need for) and forward to the next idea to be presented (overhaul combined
effort).
In the second transition, the transition is in the beginning of the next paragraph (third body paragraph) and
refers back to the recommendations (methods, investment), and forward to the next idea (human rights).
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CONCLUSIONS:
How to DO this(possibilities)
Good Conclusions
Paint a picture of the real world (in your view)
On jury duty
Even though serving on a jury is not only a civic responsibility but also an interesting experience,
many people still view jury duty as a chore that interrupts their jobs and the routine of their daily
lives. However, juries are part of America's attempt to be a free and just society. Such cherished
aspects of democracy do not come free of charge. To maintain this, we, the people, are required to
consider how our world works and make difficult decisions so that it may continue or improve. Thus,
jury duty challenges us to be interested and responsible citizens.
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Looking towards the future
On the lack of qualified teachers
Without well-qualified teachers, schools are little more than buildings and equipment. Should higher-
paying careers continue to attract the best and the brightest students, not only will there be a
shortage of teachers, but those available may not have the best qualifications. The youth of a nation
suffer for the sake of growth in business and trade. When the youth suffer, the future of the populace
has little to look forward to.
Rhetorical questions
On electoral campaigns
Campaign advertising should help us understand a candidate's qualifications and positions on
important issues. Instead, most tells us what a boob or knave the opposing candidate is, or it presents
general and favorable images of the candidate as a family person or God-fearing citizen. Do such
advertisements contribute to creating an informed electorate who chooses political leaders the same
way they choose soft drinks and soap?
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IRBR CLIO - Mdulo: Ingls Regular Professor: Anthony Rosenberg - Class 6
Thorne (1993): Boys and girls present a number of differences in the way each gender
interacts with their same-sex friends. It is important for parents and teachers to understand
these to provide for a better future.
Thornes statement is resonant in all cultures, and, through the recognition of this fact, parents and teachers
alike can learn how to approach the growing pains that all children go through, especially in their teenage
years. By understanding these types of relationships, and how they affect children, adults can make
adjustments to ensure a positive, fulfilling, exciting and memory-filled childhood. This is the way to prepare
the next generation of leaders. However, primarily, we must go back to playground basics.
Girls tend to engage in more cooperative kinds of play, such as jumping rope or practicing dance steps
together. In speech, they tend to say "Lets ..." or "Why don't we ...", implying that a motherly nature is
innate in females. Such gentle, maternal interaction creates friendships based on dialog, honesty and
kindness. In contrast, boys employ competitive rough-and-tumble play and make verbal threats either in
anger, or in the spirit of play. Their rambunctious ways reflect an aggressive approach to life to achieve
goals. Dialog, therefore, is more objective; yet, boys are usually less offended by harsh words and unkindly
behavior. Such differing interaction with same-sex friends, during the adolescent years, paves the way for
gender stereotyping. Hence, every part of our daily lives, from the work environment to our love lives, is
affected. Still, it seems as though the male relationship is somewhat different to that of females.
Unlike boys, who tend to hang around with a larger group of casual friends, girls like to spend time with only
one or two best friends. Consequently, they are inclined to form longer-lasting relationships that demand
more dedication. Boys, on the other hand, may have enduring friendships, but the level of dedication is not
as high as for their gender counterparts. Instead of hanging out with a larger number of buddies
sporadically over a longer period, girls feel the need to spend more quality time with their close friends.
Nevertheless, even the most intimate of comrades have their ups and downs. When hostility emerges
among friends, girls talk about the undesirable behavior of playmates behind their backs rather than to their
faces. As a result, girls take longer when resolving a conflict. Boys, contrariwise, are more direct and
confrontational, so clashes are often over quickly. Hence, grudges seem to be more common in female
relationships. One could say that boys bounce back a little quicker than girls after a spat between friends.
Understanding conflict, the volatility of relationships, gender, and discourse is just one way that parents and
teachers can prepare to lead children through life. As Thorne explains, we must provide for a better future.
I believe that, by recognizing fundamental behavior patterns, and empathizing with the roles of each sex in
society, role models can fine-tune their own discourse to serve as examples for the next generation. After
all, if we cannot lead by example, then why are we leading?
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