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Identification: With the use of my graded WP1, I realized that I did not cite some sources
correctly.
Citation of original issue: In an article by Somini Sengupta, a foreign correspondent for the
New York Times, Sengupta swiftly begins describing the massive plight of Syrian refugees over
Solution: I went back to italicize New York Times within the paragraph.
Citation of fix: In an article by Somini Sengupta, a foreign correspondent for the New York
Times, Sengupta swiftly begins describing the massive plight of Syrian refugees over the past
four years.
Identification: In my graded WP1, I realized that a particular part of my fourth sentence was not
Citation of original issue: In utilizing this detail, she fluidly transitions into the main
discussion of the article in which discusses the United Nations fear that amongst refugees,
Islamic State fighters may also be entering developed nations to carryout terrorist activity.
Citation of fix: From there, she fluidly transitions into the main discussion of the article in
which discusses the United Nations fear that amongst refugees, Islamic State fighters may
Identification: In my 7th sentence, I needed to clarify the intent of the authors tactics.
Citation of original issue: If the author were to neglect the background, it would significantly
Citation of fix: If the author were to exclude the background of the topic, it would significantly
Identification: I attempted to condense an explanation, but realized that in doing so, it would
Citation of original issue: After the background, authors then begin to engage readers in the
information in an educative way while relying on the readers assumption that the article is
Solution: I decided to create another sentence to get my ideas across more concisely.
Citation of fix: In being a news article, authors rely on the audiences assumption that the
article is unbiased because journalistic presentations are often complied with factual details to
inform the audience rather than to sway or confirm the audiences personal belief or opinions.
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Kashia Thao
Writing 2
Prof. Speiser
8 June 2017
According to the official Syrian Refugees website, around 11 million Syrian refugees
have fled Syria in search for safety within other nations (Timline). This spiraling tragedy has led
to increased worldwide tensions that have placed the Syrian Refugees Crisis as the center stage
of nationwide news. The escalation of this continuous tragedy has led to the development of
various informational outlets that exist to educate readers in their own ways as the calamity
unfolds. In particular, news articles and blog posts effectively detail the information of the crisis
while achieving their own goals. Whereas news articles utilize various tactics that successfully
inform and, surprisingly, perpetuate a heightened seriousness regarding these events, blog
posts heavily rely on emotion that evoke empathy among readers to propel, as well as, encourage
News articles, the first genre discussed here, are primarily informative sources that exist
to educate readers concerning ongoing events. Authors of news articles often include a brief
background that prep the reader with the right knowledge which contributes to the current event.
In an article by Somini Sengupta, a foreign correspondent for the New York Times, Sengupta
swiftly begins describing the massive plight of Syrian refugees over the past four years. From
there, she fluidly transitions into the main discussion of the article in which discusses the United
Nations fear that amongst refugees, Islamic State fighters may possibly be entering developed
nations to carryout terrorist activity. Likewise, Jethro Mullen, a CNN News Desk Editor, utilizes
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information regarding the lack of safety in Syria for civilians due to decreased health response
treatment and destructive civil war that develops his discussion on the effects of refugee
movement among other countries. The background in both these articles smoothly presents the
information to the audience while preventing confusion. If the author were to exclude the
background of the topic, it would significantly disrupt the audiences understanding of the
articles purpose. For example, if Sengputa were to immediately introduce the United Nations
fear of Islamic state fighters entering countries under low authorization, readers may not
understand why they are worried. However, by emphasizing that there is a tremendous inflow of
Syrian immigrants entering different nations, the reader is better able to understand that this
exact tremendous inflow could camouflage these worrisome individuals. Therefore, the inclusion
of background is vital for news articles because it provides readers with a stronger foundation in
After the background, authors then begin to engage readers in the information in an
educative way. In being a news article, authors rely on the audiences assumption that the article
is unbiased because journalistic presentations are often complied with factual details to inform
the audience rather than to sway or confirm the audiences personal belief or opinions. They also
tend to sustain a formal and concise tone that most effectively delivers the information. Sengputa
states, Last week the European Union forced through a plan, over the bitter objections of some
of its nations, to distribute 120,000 asylum seekers among member states. The use of logos,
which is primarily used to present facts, is indicative that the article is heavily objective and
presented without bias. Continuing with this formality, news article authors typically utilize
ethos such as in Mullens piece, Syria is haemorrhaging women, children and men who cross
borders often with little more than the clothes on their backs, the UNHCR said. The inclusion
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of ethos institutes and sustains the articles credibility because it strengthens the objectivity of
the article thus concluding in its validity. To reassert the credibility of the discussion, authors
add graphics to further the audiences visual experience in which they can better understand the
statistics employed by the author. In Sengputas article she includes a graphic detailing how the
European nations plan on splitting the refugees amongst their countries. Likewise, Mullen
integrates a graphic depicting the surge of Syrian refugees into major countries as shown below
(Almukhtar).
Essentially, in specifying tone and including authoritative statements as well as graphics, the
author engages the reader in the information, but furthermore helps the reader to understand the
educational purpose and value of the article as it draws attention to ongoing worldwide events
Contrary to news articles, blog posts are typically formulated to evoke emotion within the
reader to encourage involvement in their cause. This also indicates that the readers expect a bias
because blog posts ensue more intimate and personal connections. In his blog post, Daryl
Grisgraber pays close attention to the organization of details. For example, he firstly begins by
introducing the conflict in which Mercy Corps is being forced to shut down its organization in
Turkey because of the lack of funds. By placing this as his first explanation, Grisgraber first
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handedly presents the issue that is intended for the audience to understand. Secondly, he
continues to explain the remarkable assistance the Mercy Corps have provided Syrian civilians
that unbiasedly applauds the existence of the group by highlighting considerable efforts it is
willing to make for the sake of simple humanitarian deeds. After elaborating on the effectiveness
of the group, Grisgraber begins to take a more personal approach such as, Though we tend not
to hear as much about local Syrian groups as we do about the larger agencies, it is high time we
began to realize that so many of the lives saved inside Syria were saved because local groups
risked their lives to reach people. In utilizing these specific words, Grisgraber takes advantage
of pathos, in which evokes sympathy, by targeting our personal ignorance. Finally, he effectively
promotes his cause by giving various of reasons as to why the existence of the Mercy Corps is
vital. In carefully considering the organization of details, authors can distinctively engage their
audiences in their discussion. Then they condition the reader to feel as if their involvement is
significant which is finalized with additional details that secures the readers choice in
successfully combined to further promote the existence of Syrian aid groups such as hers,
Concern. Immediately from the title, Shatterd Lives: protecting civilians in war-torn Syria
Goodhue already establishes a dejected and melancholic tone that is indicative of the emotions
that will be projected. Goodhue supports the despondency of the title with a bolded statement
from a Syrian woman who suffered the tragedies of the civil war, We were scared. I asked him
to go see what was happening outside on the street, (Sameh in Goodhue). The ambiguity of her
statements stimulates fear in the reader that is furthered by despair as the women continues to
explain that her husband had been killed out of nowhere, (Sameh in Goodhue). In starting her
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piece with this narrative, Goodhue establishes a personal connection from the woman to the
reader that invokes contemplative reflection meaning that thoughts such as, What if this
happened to me? or, What would I do if I were in her position? would arise. This effectively
ties the readers attention into the blog posts which allows Goodhue to inform the audience on
the impact of the Syrian civil war on civilians still within the Syrian border. Like Grisgraber,
Goodhue then institutes an issue that requires the readers involvement, Over thirteen million
are in need of humanitarian assistance, with five million of these in besieged or hard-to-reach
areas. Immediately after, Goodhue stimulates more emotion, Recently, someone provided us
with enough money to purchase winter clothes for all the children, for example. But I am always
afraid that the help will stop. How will I manage then? (Sameh in Goodhue). This statement
kindles and heightens a sense of desperation and hopelessness that elicits compassion among
readers. However, these intended emotions are dramatically transformed as she then includes
another bolded statement highlighting the success of Concern such as, When first arrived,
Concern provided food baskets for us and also registered us to receive food vouchers. We were
so thankful (Sameh in Goodhue). Goodhue successfully finalizes the purpose of her article in
which was to promote the existence of her affiliated Syrian aid group for the sake of Syrian
civilians. Goodhue significantly displays how the use of structure is vital in provoking emotion
because without a strong structure the reader would fail to grasp the concept and the purpose of
the blog post. They may understand the emotion, but may also disregard why that they are
feeling is important.
With the use of the Syrian Refugee Crisis, the tactics that news articles and blog posts
use become more apparent. News articles about the crisis depict how their objectivity is
maintained for the sole purpose of educating the reader about the escalation that is occurring on a
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national and humane level. Blog posts then extract specific pieces of information, such as the
wellbeing of Syrian civilians, to encourage readers to become personally involved in the issue. In
doing so, they successfully do their jobs in reporting and inciting historically changing
worldwide events.
Works Cited
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Almukhtar, Gregor Aisch and Sarah. "Seeking a Fair Distribution of Migrants in Europe." The New York
Times. The New York Times, 04 Sept. 2015. Web. 26 Apr. 2017.
Goodhue, Sadhbh. "News and Blog." Shattered Lives: Protecting Civilians in War-torn Syria. Concern
Grisgraber, Daryl. "Support Local Syrian Aid Groups. They Are Saving Lives." Refugees International.
Mullen, Jethro. "Number of Syrian Refugees Rises above 2 Million, U.N. Agency Says." CNN. Cable
Sengupta, Somini. "Refugee Crisis in Europe Prompts Western Engagement in Syria." The New York
Times. The New York Times, 30 Sept. 2015. Web. 26 Apr. 2017.