Yeltsin Loango

Professor Batty

English 101

May 30, 2017

REFLECTION

The visual rhetoric essay didn't come out the way I wish it could have and think in the revising I will

turn in a better essay. After turning in my essay the feedback and something I need to work a lot on

this essay on the main point of the mural. I mentioned manifest destiny and I think I need a lot of

work and a lot more to touch up on, when mentioning this. Instead of focusing on little things I need

to see it as a whole and as an overall meaning. I need to fix my thesis as well in making it more clear

for the reader to understand what I will be talking about on the mural. I'm going to be splitting a

paragraph and instead will be putting certain factors/ statements that are in their in other paragraphs.

I have to talk not only the good things about manifest destiny, but as well talk about the negative

effects it had on people. I'll be inserting a paragraph about and only about the colors used in the

murals, because color does play a really big factor in any painting. I need to talk about every object

in the picture as a solo item and give the description and why it matters so much and useful to be in

the painting. I think this would make my essay a lot better along with grammatical fixes I can use. My

intro will have to be easier to be found and clear for the reader to follow my essay along the way

while reading.