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Arnold Schroder

Mrs. Sanchez

P. 3

2/6/2017

Reflection Letter

For my reflection letter I have chosen my Brave New World Essay, Racial Profiling essay

and my Into The Wild essay, and my process work for the juvenile justice argument, Bullying

essay pre-write process work, and the into the wild pre-reading. From this work, I will reflect on

what I learned about developing an argument, and my methods of defending my perspective on

this argument and how I can improve my evidence citations. I will address my academic essays,

my improved grammar skills that ive learned, my evidence collecting skills, and how i could

improve my essay writing skills.

For this assignment I have chosen to write about my BNW essay, an argumentative essay

about a book whose story is relatable to our society, which resulted in having myself write during

first semester, about an argument where their society hates independent activities that people

do by themselves by having established communism in their government (BNW essay); my

Bullying Research Paper I wrote during second semester, about proving how bullying is

unnecessary in this country because it turns people against each other through violence and

hatred among society (Racial Profiling essay); and lastly my Into The Wild essay, in which I

talked about how Chris McCandless was a crazy fool who did activities in his life regardless of

how dangerous they were (Into The Wild).

During this assignment I have chosen my Juvenile Justice Process work, bullying essay

pre-write process work, and my into the wild pre-reading. My Juvenile Justice Process work
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impacted my understanding on subjects given, through understanding bias opinions, and forming

an argument through the evidence given, such as how most juveniles offenders and many adults

are given a second chance in life (JJ process work 4). The Bullying essay pre-write from the

Bullying essay impacted my understanding of the use of Ethos, logos and Pathos during essays,

by providing me with personal experience reflection, logos through personal reflection based

off my written experiences during this pre-write (Bullying prewrite 4). My into the wild pre-

reading impacted my skills of quick writing for essays, given the current knowledge and

understanding of the subject, such as what I experienced being into the wild during my lifetime,

and how I can relate to it (Into the wild pre-reading).

Over the year I have improved my skills in creating a claim/thesis, writing final drafts,

finding evidence to support my claim, Creating commentary, and the use of anecdotal evidence.

Throughout the year these skills were fairly poor, showing a weak thesis, unfinished final drafts

(very similar to rough draft), finding little evidence to support my claim, putting too little

commentary, and relating very poorly with anecdotal evidence. However, approximating second

semester, these skills were all excelled. I focused on developing a meaningful thesis such as

Christopher McCandless was a crazy fool who attempted activities to live his life as he pleased

even though others warned him of the dangerous of such excursions and activities (Into the

Wild essay), where I included excellent thesis, enough evidence to support it including

commentary, and finally concluding the draft correctly.

As my skills have developed over the year, my strengths in Evidence, and Ethos, Logos

and Pathos have increased powerfully, focusing mainly during my Bullying essay, brave new

world essay, and racial profiling essay. However, I show weaknesses on my works cited page and
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topic sentences, mainly due to lack of topic sentence structure, and poorly developed works cited

page.

After completing my Brave New World essay, I have finally mastered the process of

adding commentary after my evidence. I learned that I needed to add an imaginary i think

before the sentence to explain. Mostly, I needed to add anecdotal evidence that would create a

connection to this evidence in the essay such as These people avoid strong emotional

attachment so they don't really connect with one another and aren't able to form a strong bond

(BNW essay).

I believe that when it comes to reading books, I excel at my reading skill. However when

it comes to reading a very long article, I Tend to need slight improvement. Luckily I set my mind

to read whats important in the article and highlight the key phrases that may work as evidence

(just like in my racial profiling essay).

The timed write essays in this class have helped me develop my skills in understanding

what to expect in a college level reading class, where time, work and comprehension matter.

These skills help me in other classes to develop argument supporting evidence that may serve me

in showing bias. I believe that I am somewhat ready for college level reading. Mainly due to my

increase in grade average that ive received after every assignment in this semester, where ive

learned my mistakes and improved them after every assignment.