Name: Andrea Martinez

1 Topic Selection: Focuses on a specific location that has a secondary purpose. 5/5

2 Title: The title should be both creative and informative. 2/2.5

3 Thesis: Has a clear argument with supporting reasons about the secondary purpose of a specific
location. 8/10

4 Development/Support: Ideas are fully developed. Uses his/her observations of this location to
support his/her argument about the places secondary purpose. Location has been carefully
analyzed for hidden meaning. 4.5/5

5 Essay quotes or paraphrases at least two critical/scholarly sources. Essay may refer to Still
Water Saints, but this is not required. 5/5

6 Organization: The ideas appear in a logical order. The paper uses transitions to move from one
idea to the next. Each body paragraph should discuss a different point. 8.5/10

7 Spelling/Grammar/Mechanics: The paper is virtually free of spelling, grammar, or mechanical

errors. 4.5/5

8 MLA Citation: The paper uses MLA style citation for quotes, paraphrases, summaries, and a
Works Cited page. 1.5/5

9 MLA Formatting: The paper uses MLA formatting (12-point, Times New Roman, etc.). 2.5/2.5

10 Page Length: The paper is 1000 words (less than 1000 will result in a non-passing grade). Yes

Total: 40.5/50

Comments: Andrea, overall your essay is very thoughtful and interesting. I like your central point
about the mission being a place for learning about ones heritage and gaining a sense of belong
and connection to people from the past and present. I think your thesis could be worded a bit
more concisely though. I think you could explain a little more about the history of the mission,
since this is the history/heritage that visitors should be learning. I think the internal organization
of your paragraphs could be clearer; beginning with more direct topic sentences would help with
this. You have paraphrased some historical information, but you have not cited it (in-text
citations). You also should try to incorporate more quotes.