Name: Andrea

1 Topic Selection: Focuses on a specific mural that tells a story or history about Latina/o culture
and expresses a political or social view. 5/5

2 Title: The title should be both creative and informative. 2.5/2.5

3 Thesis: Makes a clear argument about the murals social or political message. 9/10

4 Development/Support: Ideas are fully developed. Uses the physical description of the mural as
evidence for argument. Mural has been carefully analyzed for hidden meaning. 1/5

5 Essay quotes or paraphrases at least one critical/scholarly source. Essay may refer to Still
Water Saints, but this is not required. 5/5

6 Organization: The ideas appear in a logical order. The paper uses transitions to move from one
idea to the next. Each body paragraph should discuss a different point. 8/10

7 Spelling/Grammar/Mechanics: The paper is virtually free of spelling, grammar, or mechanical

errors. 4.5/5

8 MLA Citation: The paper uses MLA style citation for quotes, paraphrases, summaries, and a
Works Cited page. 3/5

9 MLA Formatting: The paper uses MLA formatting (12-point, Times New Roman, etc.). 2.5/2.5

10 Page Length: The paper is 750 words (less than 750 will result in a non-passing grade).
Yes/No

Comments: Andrea, you did a great job of stating the thesis, organizing your paragraphs, and
creating a cohesive flow to your ideas. In the intro, you shouldnt give away too many details
(like a movie trailor), so save some of the important details like the fonts styles for the body of
the essay. I think these details about the mural need to be discussed at greater lengths. How does
the font, for example, relate to the overall meaning of the mural? Also, you could discuss how
Che pointing at the audience mimics the old Uncle Sam army posters; this seems like an
intentional parallel that ought to be explained. The last body paragraph does not seem that
necessary in terms of proving your argument. Rather, spend more time discussing the mural
itself. Be sure to cite your sources, even if you are paraphrasing. You need to work on your MLA
citations, especially the works cited page.

Final Score: 40.5/50

Holly Batty , 19 mar en 14:31