solutions paper

by Noelia RODRIGUEZ

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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

/100 Instructor

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Comment 1
32% is too high...you have many long quotes....only use what you need word f or word...you can
also paraphrase and still cite.

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

Comment 2
comma error

Comment 3
State or Congressional leaders

QM Citation Needed
Cite Source:
Please use the link below to f ind links to inf ormation regarding specif ic citation styles:
http://www.plagiarism.org/plag_article_citation_styles.html

QM Del.
Delete

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

QM Wordy
 Wordy:
If you use too many words to describe a relatively minor point, your paper may seem wordy. In
order to be as concise as possible, trim your sentences down and use longer, more meaningf ul
words. T ry to use f ewer two- and three-letter words, passive constructions, and weak verbs
such as "seem" and "appear."

Comment 4
who is your audience...it must be only 1; which entity can accomplish all of this?

Comment 5
what good will this do? lobby him f or what?

Comment 6
who? who is your audience?

QM Ital.
Italicize

Comment 7
this is word f or word...

Comment 8
need more substance here

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QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

QM Citation f ormat

QM Run-on
Run-on sentence:
T he sentence contains two or more independent clauses. Separate the clauses with a period or
semicolon.

Comment 9
this seems like it should go earlier in the paragraph when discussing tax credits...
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Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

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Comment 10
if this is already being done, is it lowering the recidivism rates? need more

QM Cap. Error
Capitalization

Comment 11
I don't understand this proposal - it seems disconnected f rom everything else...what other
programs? what are they? why aren't they working?

QM No Personal words- No I, you, we, us, "one", etc

Comment 12
use topic sentence to f ocus on solution

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

Comment 13
need more substance here....need more evidence about connection...seems surf ace level

QM Cap. Error
Capitalization

QM Plural
Plural

Comment 14
this paragraph seems scattered...are you discussing drug abuse or mental health issues...are
they the same thing? you said they already have a program but ex-of f enders won't go? should
they wait until they are arrested f or drug abuse or a mental health issue and then send to
rehab? I don't understand

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 Comment 15
if it is a block quote - you do not need quotes

Comment 16
this quote is too long...only use what you need

QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

Comment 17
use topic sentence to f ocus on solution

QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."

QM Coll.
Inappropriate use of slang, clichd phrases, or idiomatic expressions:
T he use of slang, clichd phrases and idiomatic expressions can conf use your readers and
destroy the f ormal tone of your writing.

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

QM Coll.
Inappropriate use of slang, clichd phrases, or idiomatic expressions:
T he use of slang, clichd phrases and idiomatic expressions can conf use your readers and
destroy the f ormal tone of your writing.
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who?

QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."

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Comment 19
comma error

Comment 20
why is this a new paragraph in the middle of a quote?

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

QM Frag.
Fragment:
A sentence f ragment is a phrase or clause that is in some way incomplete. Such f ragments
become problematic when they attempt to stand alone as a complete sentence. T he most
common version of this mistake occurs when a writer mistakes a gerund (a verb that acts like a
noun) f or a main verb, as in the f ollowing sentence: "In bed reading Shakespeare f rom dusk to
dawn."

QM Cap. Error
Capitalization

QM Awk.
Awkward:
T he expression or construction is cumbersome or dif f icult to read. Consider rewriting.

Comment 21
this quote is too long...only use what you need

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 Comment 22
most of your conclusion is someone else's words...need to rewrite

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