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UWRT 1104
Rhetorical Analysis
I chose a paper from my Introduction to Business course to analyze. The essay is titled
Cultural Awareness and the purpose of this paper was to elaborate on an experience that had
taken me outside of my comfort zone. My comfort zone consists of individuals who have the
same interests and goals as I do. A few of my goals are graduating in four years, meeting new
people and becoming more comfortable in my secondary discourse community. In this paper, I
analyze an essay where I was forced into my secondary discourse community. My secondary
discourse community is the socialization into a new institution. Going from high school to
When analyzing the essay, I realized I referred to myself too often. I presented myself as
a conceited individual with that simple action. I believe differences make individuals unique. I
will continue to treat others the way I desire to be treated. (Sellers) The quote tells my audience
that I longed for more content to inject into the essay. The sentences do not reflect college level
writing. This demonstrates one of many weaknesses. When writing, I believe I do not have
many strengths. I cling onto my weaknesses because that is what I am use to.
In addition to referring to myself too often, I also lost who I was as a writer. I presented
my paper in a way that I felt my professor preferred. My professor had a strict guideline for
what should be written in each paragraph. The paragraphs are extremely structured and left little
room for the writer to put their personality in the paper. For example, Cultural Awareness is the
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foundation of communication and it involves the ability of recognizing cultural values, beliefs
and perceptions.(Sellers) We were required to put the definition of cultural awareness. There
were several requirements expected of us. All of the expectations motivated me to mushfake the
entire paper. The paper contained elements that were not authentic. For instance, I believe this
experience helped prepare me for what it will be like in the business world.(Sellers) In reality, I
had no idea how that experience impacted my life. I was fearful of my professor noticing the
I let the fear of failing prevent me from reaching my full potential. I allowed myself to
blend in with my peers instead of standing out. My paper remained at the surface level and
never went further than that. I believe the most efficient way to consider others perspectives
and point of view is to be less judgmental.(Sellers) The point of the quote was obvious. I
would have rather kept my essay safe, than push the limits of my writing. I asked my peers of
their opinion and viewed their papers before submitting mine. Rewording their sentences
became second nature to me. For instance, Although I was uncomfortable, I was able to look
past their differences and truly see them for who they were, (Sellers) was not my oringal
thought. I did not use my peers work word for word. I constantly fought an internal battle that
As soon as I read my paper, I noticed how narrow my vocabulary was. I did not use
complex words or develop complex sentences. For example, I stated, Through cultural
experiences I have grown to love and respect others differences. I feel more comfortable around
people who do not look the way I do.(Sellers) That was a very generic answer. I feel as though
my primary discourse is very simple and to the point. Once I attempt to inject a more advanced
vocabulary, I feel uncomfortable or that my message is unclear. I relate to the woman in the Gee
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article who has an informal word choice because she exemplifies everything I am. She uses
simple words to get her point across that she is suited for the job she is being interviewed for. I
immediately connected with the way she presented herself, because I gathered so much of myself
within her.
The strengths in this paper are that I remain on topic and I get to the point. Some may
say that is a weakness, but that is a strength for me. I stated I believe the most efficient way to
consider others perspectives and point of view is to be less judgmental. Everyone is judged for
one thing or another in their life. I truly believe if society as a whole has more of an open mind,
great things will happen. I was asked what the most efficient way to consider other peoples
feelings. I answered the question and moved on. I did not put a tremendous amount of emotion
I do not engage in my ethos when writing. I am personally not an emotional person and
do not show my emotions often. I received that characteristic from my father because he is
extremely tough and believes that showing emotions is a sign of weakness. This carries over into
my writing because I do not writing from the heart or what I feel. For example, I was interested
in this event because I believed I would be introduced to a wide range of people. This quote
lacked emotion. I do not write from the heart because I do not live my life displaying my
emotions. I keep my thoughts and feelings to myself. This is a simple way for me to stay on
My primary discourse is simple, funny, and to the point. I do not have a large vocabulary.
I believe that is because I do not enjoy to read. I will read a book every now and then, but
nothing that will enhance my vocabulary. I stated, Cultural experiences have shaped my own
perspectives in a extremely positive and beneficial way. Through cultural experiences I have
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grown to love and respect others differences. In my mind, this sounds fine for the paper, but I
was told by my professor that I needed to enhance my vocabulary. I was told to step out of my
comfort zone. There are various different ways I could have said those few sentences. I have
reached the point where if I desire to enhance my writing, I need to polish my current skills and
Works Cited
Sellers, Johana Grace. Cultural Awareness. 2016. Belk School of Business, Charlotte,
NC.
You do a great job integrating primary and secondary discourses and mushfaking into
your paper. Your honesty was refreshing, and I learned a lot about you as a writer and as a person
and reading it. Good job! Some paragraphs remain undeveloped either in textual support or in
really specific how and why explanations. There's also a lack of coherence between paragraphs
so the paper is a bit choppy. I would focus on coherence for the revision and on developing some
of your body paragraphs either through evidence and support or through better explanations. A
good first start!
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