Nelson,

Interesting article and very interesting analysis. The structure of this essay is great, very ordered
and easy to follow. Each paragraph also starts with a topic sentence which really helps the
reader know what youre going to communicate with them. Each paragraph beyond the
introductions analyzes exactly what the topic sentence is about, proving it through usage of the
evidence in the passage which makes the argument strong. A variety of techniques that the
author used were explored like pathos, ethos, punctuation and diction. Not only that literary
techniques were also used to analyze the authors purpose like metaphors and innuendos. Helps
assure the audience that you understand the work very well.

Here are some improvements you could make:

Lets start with the small errors. Small error in the first paragraph line 4. Another issue in the
second paragraph second line. Formatting in paragraph 6 for the quote could use some work as
it is integrated in the paragraph in a different font it. It confused me, as at first I thought it was
a large quote, but it was actually a large chunk of your work that is in a different font.

For the main paragraph bodies, I feel like some work can use some expanding and further
exploration. For example, you mention the use of diction, but never really specify the type of
diction used. You did say it made the editorial conversational, but maybe bring up some
examples that can strengthen your argument in that area as you only wrote a sentence for it.
You have a strong point, now all you need is the evidence and explanation for how diction
made the piece of work more conversational. The use of punctuation can also be explored
further as you mentioned the commas create a dramatic effect and provokes the audience
which is a great argument. But maybe you could further analyze other techniques which also
compliments the commas and create a similar effect, like in the following quote: isnt the only
one doing this in 2017, Im not drinking anymore of this Cooks theyre trying to pour, and
neither should you. You could mention the usage of ellipsis and how that also adds on the
dramatic effect and how the author combines the two punctuation to create a stronger
impression on the audience.

In the second last paragraph, when youre talking about innuendos and metaphors, you have a
lot of great points. But to further improve on that paragraph, you should connect your
arguments and explain what the effect of using metaphors and innuendos can have on the
audience. For example, you could say Huang used literary devices in order to create an image
in the audiences head to show them the insecurities he has because of what society thinks of
Asians by comparing himself to a coatrack in TJX (something like that sorry it was poorly
written).

Overall, I feel like you have a strong paper, I had to really dig in a look for problems within this
paper, which is good news for you. I feel like the next step for you is to look over your writing,
fix the small errors and maybe elaborate in areas that I mentioned to make your paper a lot
strong than what is already a really good paper. Best of luck! Hope this helped.