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Benefits of Technology vs. Negative Effects 1586019

(I)Many people can see the positive aspects of living in a world where technology is so

prominent. Easy to communicate with family and friends, everything so overly simplified to do

or make, and all the entertainment one seeks in the tips of ones finger. However the scale of it

benefits does not override the negative aspects of technology when it comes to health and mental

improvement in society. The easy communication between others, actually led to social isolation

because it does not help in building deep relationships leading it to be just superficial. Everything

that is so overly simplified, led people to be lazier physically and mentally which can lead

(Cause) to amnesia and obesity. The entertainment also impacts relationships and contributes to

the mental health as well.

Many people would say that, Technology had made human life comfortable. Everything

that we see and use in our daily life is the gift of technology. The clothes we wear, the house we

live, the car we travel, the bridge and flyovers, the mobile phone we carry, the fan, etc. are all

examples of successful implementation of technology (Important India, 6). However, with

comfort comes to lack of mental and physical exercise. One of these examples includes the fact

that when smartphones were non- existent, people use to take the time to memorize phone

numbers instead of just saving it to their contacts. Directly addresses the prompt-With this

memorization, it decreased the chances of people getting Alzheimer disease. As proof,

Alzheimers disease has increased by 71 percent (Sauer, 4). This shows that there is a

correlation between the prominent use of technology with Alzheimer disease.

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With this comfort, also came the lack of physical activity which can impact people

physically and mentally. This is because exercise can direct benefit brain cells by giving

delivering oxygen and blood to the brain. It has been stated that, regular aerobic exercise

increases the size of the hippocampus, which is a part of the brain responsible for memory

(Godman, 3). The decrease of physical activity because of technology can also lead people to

becoming overweight. [This is more than a number on a scale, it includes diabetes and heart

disease.] Elaborate More- How does this affect people? This would help argument

The fact that People are excessively dependent of modern gifts of technologies such as

cars, computers, smartphones, etc. They feel helpless if any of these technological equipment,

machinery or tool fail to perform (Important India, 10), can not only affect mental and physical

activity but can lead to isolation from society which leads to depression and anxiety. Humans are

so indulged in the device they own that they lost sight of their surrounding and forgot how to

build real-life relationships because all relationships have become (?complete senetence).*

People may say that communication has become easier, and meeting people from various parts of

the world has become possible. However, what is the point of building relationships from all

around the world when people are incapable of building relationship close to them.* - Relates

back to your argument-

(C)With the comfort that technology brings, and its negative effects on health, the

question should be is it worth risking the physical and mental health of people all around the

world. The health of individuals should come before the entertainment that hold so highly. If this
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means cutting off technology a little from peoples daily lives to improve mental health, levels of

happiness, and physical capability, then it should not be a hard choice.

Improvements: You should format your body paragraphs by separating the negative and

positive aspects instead of combining them in each paragraph. However, although that is

preferable, your format was just fine.

Good parts: Your use of evidence was good, and you did great at remaining on topic. I like

how you compared and contrasted whilst implementing your argument.

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Work Cited

Work, Team. "Technology: Advantages and Disadvantages of Technology." Important India.

N.p., 19 Sept. 2016. Web. 12 Mar. 2017.

Godman, Heidi. "How Physical Activity Can Affect Your Brain." Sustainable Brainhealth

Institute. N.p., n.d. Web. 12 Mar. 2017.

Sauer, Alissa. "Speaking Two Languages Delays Dementia." Alzheimers.net. N.p., 06 Dec. 2013.

Web. 30 Mar. 2017.