Obsessed Script Commentary

What changes were made

throughout our drafts

Changes from First Draft to Second

INT. SCARLETTS HOUSE- DUSK
MONTAGE
SCARLETT is looking
worriedly in a mirror,
brushing her hair, and
hasnt seen the UNIDENTIFIED
FIGURE behind her.
In our first draft, we thought it would be effective to have
repeated shots of Scarlett looking in the mirror. However,
when editing our rough cut we realised that this would be
too confusing for our audience. Therefore, we decided to
stick to two shots: one where Scarlett hasnt seen J behind
her in the mirror, and another were she turns around and
he disappears. We also changed to location of Scarletts
house to her school, so there were not too many shots to
confuse our audience.
 Changes from Second Draft to Third
EXT. OUTSIDE CHURCH- DUSK
MONTAGE In our second draft, we thought that handheld shots would
The camera moves in a handheld have conveyed Scarletts panic- but when editing we thought
fashion, mimicking someone these shots looked amateur so decided to edit them out.
walking quickly through the
trees.
(SINISTER MUSIC BUILDING UP)

EXT. OUTSIDE CHURCH- DUSK

MONTAGE When reviewing the handheld shots, we thought the one
which had the church in the background specifically was all
A desolate church with graves that was needed to indicate Scarletts fear of her being
and trees surrounding it comes
followed. We also included a similar streetlamp shot, which
into view.
also helped to emit Scarlett's panicked emotions.
ELLIE DAVIES
(SINISTER MUSIC PLAYING)

In-between second and third drafts, we decided to include a

UNIDENTIFIED FIGURE- J (V.O.)
Shes mine.
voiceover of J over the shots where he was following Scarlett
and making a scrapbook of her. We felt that this voiceover
added an ominous tone to our opening sequence, making our
narrative more realistic and believable.
 Changes from Second Draft to Third
INT. PSYCHIATRISTS OFFICE -
DAY When evaluating our second draft, we realised that we
MONTAGE needed a shot to frame our narrative, therefore making our
audience understand that Scarlett was being stalked by a
DANIEL BURTON person called J. Therefore, we thought a good shot to include
was a psychiatrist asking J about who Scarlett was, making our
PSYCHIATRIST plot clear and compelling to our audience.
Who is Scarlett?

(SINISTER MUSIC PLAYING)

Once again, we realised when reviewing our rough cut

INT. CLASSROOM- DAY footage (second draft) that the phone scenes werent looking
MONTAGE as polished as we would have liked, due to us trying to film
them outside along with the church scenes. We thought it
SCARLETT is sat in a would be more effective to use a different setting of Scarlett
classroom doing work, when in a classroom to give our opening sequence more variety.
she receives a text. Text This meant the shots filmed would look more clean, as the
appears as font on a screen phone scenes were pivotal to get correct. During our group
Whats your favourite game? chats, we found an existing example of a character getting a
Mines following you home. text which appeared as font on the screen: so we decided to
replicate that, with success.
(SINISTER MUSIC PLAYING)