Documenti di Didattica
Documenti di Professioni
Documenti di Cultura
by Milizhia Mills
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T IME SUBMIT T ED
12-SEP-2016 07:30PM
WORD COUNT
639
SUBMISSION ID
704173101
CHARACT ER COUNT
2872
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GENERAL COMMENTS
100
Instructor
Milishia,
/100
PAGE 1
Comment 1
Good MLA header! Just be sure its in T NR, 12 pt. f ont. Also, you want it to 1" f rom the top of
the page.
Comment 2
If it's any comf ort, I'm not making any judgment calls on your experiences. I f eel that all that's
happened to us as individuals have brought us to where we are today.
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Comment 3
Here, I would encourage your introduction ending on a direction, or main idea, f or your readers.
If you could summarize a central thread, or important connection, between all these important
events, what would it be?
Comment 4
She sounds inspirational!
Comment 5
T his seems important; perhaps you could elaborate on how this helped you?
PAGE 2
Comment 6
Here, you only want your last name and page number to reoccur on each page. You only need
the f our-line header on the f irst page.
PAGE 3
Comment 7
T his is def initely a more dif f icult essay to develop; however, the events/connections I've read in
your draf t are def initely headed in a good direction. Your work is showing!
Comment 8
I'm going to double check that now.
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Process work is present and provides strong evidence that student has participated
Clear evidence of strong development Strong evidence of revision
PROFICIENT
(93)
DEVELOPING
(86)
Some evidence of process work Attempts at idea development but ideas are
lacking in some way Little evidence of revision
LACKING
(77)
UNSATISFACTORY
(69)
0 / 100
PROFICIENT
(93)
DEVELOPING
(86)
LACKING
(77)
UNSATISFACTORY
(69)
0 / 100
PROFICIENT
(93)
DEVELOPING
(86)
LACKING
(77)
UNSATISFACTORY
(69)
0 / 100
ST YLE
EXEMPLARY
(100)
PROFICIENT
(93)
DEVELOPING
(86)
LACKING
(77)
UNSATISFACTORY
(69)
0 / 100
PROFICIENT
(93)
Some minor issues in readability Writer displays strong ability to use grammatical
conventions appropriately
DEVELOPING
(86)
LACKING
(77)
UNSATISFACTORY
(69)
0 / 100
EXEMPLARY
(100)
PROFICIENT
(93)
DEVELOPING
(86)
LACKING
(77)
UNSATISFACTORY
(69)