Peer Review for Project #3

Writers name: Dakota Anderson

Readers name: Chantia clark
1. Summarize below an idea you like--or type out an actual sentence you like--from the paper.
Briefly explain below what you like about that idea or sentence.
All real humans have flaws, and all real humans have pimples. I like this sentence because its
real and its the truth.
2. Type out a sentence below that you find confusing or unclear. Explain below why its
confusing. N/A

3. Look at the writers opening paragraph. What could be done to make it more
interesting/engaging?
It could be a little more interesting maybe by adding the pictures of the ads. I didnt see them so
I am not sure if its an error on my end or not.
4. Type out below the sentence (or two) that seems to contain the writer's thesis. Does the thesis
statement provide a main assertion / point about the ads? Is the thesis clear? Are there problems
with the thesis (for example, it's too narrow, too broad, or it's just an announcement of a
topic)? Explain below.
If that means having to turn a human into an alien. Objectifying people has become a trend in
ads today, sometimes it is appropriate and sometimes it is frowned upon.

5. Look for the paragraphs in which the writer offers his/her supporting points. Summarize the
supporting points below:
The ads use attractive females and their bodies for advertisements

6. In each body paragraph that describes the ads, are there enough specific details/ examples/
quotes from the ads to illustrate the main idea of the paragraph? Are there areas that should be
improved? Explain below.
Yes

7. In each paragraph that analyzes the ads, are there specific references to Kilbourne's video? Is
the connection between Kilbourne's ideas and the point the writer wants to make about the ad(s)
clear? Could additional references be made to Kilbourne? Where?
Yes there are numerous connections between Kilbournes idea and the point the writer is making

8. Does the paper have clear organization and transitions? Could the organization or transitions
be improved? Explain below.
Yes there are clear organization and transitions.

9. Are sources cited correctly in the text of the paper and in the Works Cited page, according to
the MLA guidelines explained in the textbook and in the learning module for the week?
Yes, sources are cited.

10. Make notes below about any errors you see in punctuation, grammar, or sentence structure.

11. Provide a final word of encouragement to the writer below:

I think you did an excellent job. I would have liked to see the ads so I am not sure if you are
planning on adding them for your final draft. You are very good at detailing also. I could see the
ads in my mind as you were describing them. Good work!