Name: ____________________

Persuasive Outline: extended examples REAL LIFE

Introduction
(Attention-Getter: 1 sentence: ask a question or tell a narrative or use a quotation)
Sticks and stones may break my bones, but words will never hurt me, except that words or pictures
sent over the Internet can hurt me and you, too.
(Position sentence: 1 sentence) YOU CAN ADD THIS OR NOT
There is no doubt in my mind that students who commit cyber bullying should get in trouble at school
for bullying another student.
(Thesis): (1 sentence)
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High school and middle school students should be suspended from school for bullying because
students are at school just as much as they are at home, so it is the schools responsibility to make
sure students feel safe from things, such as, negative comments from a bully that multiple people
could see, comments about someone because of how they look or due to a mental disability, and
malicious comments from extreme bullies which can cause the person bullied to take their own
life.
Body Paragraph #1- make sure to use transitional phrases that persuade

Transitional word/phrase + idea #1 from thesis:

As a matter of fact, students spend 8-10 hours at school, five days a week, so it is the schools
responsibility to make sure students feel safe from things such as negative comments from a
bully that multiple people could see.
Create 2 examples of the idea and include why that person should be punished

Ex: Jack bullies John every day because Jack thinks John should give him his homework. In
addition, Jack shoves John into a locker and takes a picture of John scrunched up crying in the
locker which he posts on Facebook. This leads to John feeling bad about himself and Jack thinks
he is a badass. John is so scared of Jack that he stops coming to school. Jack should be punished
and the school needs to get involved to provide safety for its students. The school is responsible
for suspending Jack so that he doesnt cause more harm to John.

Likewise, Becky thinks she is better than everyone else. She picks on people to make herself feel
better. As I have noted, the school needs to step in and stop Becky. Becky uses her phone to take
photobomb pictures of her classmates, and she writes comments like No shower today HA, look
at her ugly hair, lol and Dang! Boy, stop eating, save some for the rest of us, and she posts
this to her Instagram and she Snapchats these pictures to all of her friends. She just does not
care. There have been complaints about her to teachers. Beckys parents cant make her stop so
the school does need to protect the students she bullies. On the contrary, Becky may or may not

learn her lesson but something has to be done.

Body Paragraph #2- make sure to use transitional phrases that persuade
Transitional word/phrase + idea #2 from thesis:
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Body Paragraph #3- make sure to use transitional phrases that persuade

Transitional word/phrase + idea #1 from thesis:

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Conclusion

Transitional phrase and restate position in different words (position + idea #1, idea #2, idea #3)
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Edit:
1. Make sure you stated your position: FOR or AGAINST
-should or should not, must or must not, need to or need to not, does or does not, do or do not,
agree or disagree
2. Add persuasive words and transitional phrases when you are making your points.
3. Add transitional words/phrases between paragraphs.
4. Check your sentence structure NO run-on sentences.
5. Can you see your examples?
Did you create an IMAGE or TELL A STORY (pathos)
Did you include numbers or statistics (logos)
Did you add a credible or reliable resource (this could be you) (ethos).
6. Check your spelling.

Copy all this into a composition essay sheet.

You should indent slightly: make sure you have
paragraphs.
Write small!