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PROFESSIONAL ENGLISH 2
BEING CONCISE
What is a concise sentence?
The less said the better. --Robert Browning, English poet
Concise sentence involves using the most effective words in order to get
ones point across. It uses a minimal amount of effective words to make
ones point. Writers often include words in their sentences that are
unnecessary and could be omitted in order to make the sentence more
concise. In other words, concise sentence is used to avoid a wordy or
lengthy sentence.
WORDINESS
VERSUS
BEING
CONCISE
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Example
The committee took into consideration the adoption of the proposal.
This is shorter and says the same thing.
The committee considered adopting the proposal.
Wordy Form
Single Form
as a consequence of
because, for
commensurate with
consistent with
although, despite
to
if not
if so
in accordance with
following
in conjunction with
with
in order to
to
in the eventuality of
if
in the light of
according to
because
if
on the subject of
about, concerning
prior to
before
relating to
about
about, concerning
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A phrase that repeats itselflike "true fact," "twelve noon," "I saw it with my
own eyes"is sometimes called a pleonasm.
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Redundant phrases are bad habits just waiting to take control of your writing.
Beware of the following.
Redundancy
12 midnight
midnight
12 noon
noon
3 am in the morning
3 am
absolutely
spectacular/phenomenal
spectacular/phenomenal
an honest person
a total of 14 birds
14 birds
biography
circle around
circle
close proximity
proximity
completely unanimous
unanimous
consensus of opinion
consensus
cooperate together
cooperate
each
enclosed herewith
enclosed
end result
result
the same
final completion
completion
free gift
gift
he/she is a person
who . . .
he/she
although
in the field of
economics/law
enforcement
in economics/law
enforcement
if
job functions
job or functions
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new innovations
innovations
the same
particular interest
interest
four days
personally, I think/feel
I think/feel
personal opinion
opinion
puzzling in nature
puzzling
refer back
refer
repeat again
repeat
return again
return
revert back
revert
shorter/longer in length
shorter/longer
small/large in size
small/large
square/round/rectangular square/round/rectangular
in shape
summarize briefly
summarize
surrounded
surrounding
circumstances
circumstances
the future
custom
we are in receipt of
we have received
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ACTIVE
PASSIVE
Murad.
Murad will clean the table.
Murad.
Murad has/had cleaned the table.
EXERCISE 1
Provide the plural form of the Passive Voice
ACTIVE
PASSIVE
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Leslie repaired the television.
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Leslie has/had fixed the door.
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5. Avoid using intensifiers that dont intensify
Avoid using words such as really, very, quite, extremely, severely when they
are not necessary. It is probably enough to say that the salary increase is
inadequate. Does saying that it is severely inadequate introduce anything
more than a tone of hysteria? These words shouldn't be banished from your
vocabulary, but they will be used to best effect when used sparingly.
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6. Avoid expletive constructions
This sounds like something a politician has to learn to avoid, but, no, an
expletive construction is a common device that often robs a sentence of
energy before it gets a chance to do its work. Expletive constructions begin
with there is/are or it is.
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as a matter of fact
by means of
exists
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for the most part
have a tendency to
in a manner of speaking
in my opinion
in the case of
in the nature of
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in the process of
it seems that
manner
type of
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Exercise 2
Revise these sentences to state their meaning in fewer words. Avoid passive
voice, needless repetition, and wordy phrases and clauses. The first sentence
has been done as an example.
Example
Although Bestari Hall is regularly populated by students, close study of the
building as a structure is seldom undertaken by them.
Answer
Bestari Hall is usually filled with students who do not study the building as a
structure.
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4. Trouble is caused when people disobey rules that have been
established for the safety of all.
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5. The subjects that are considered most important by students are those
that have been shown to be useful to them after graduation.
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Exercise 3
Rewrite the following sentences eliminating meaningless or redundant words.
You may have to modify the sentence structure.
i.
When I asked her about the new job, she sort of looked at
me with anger and basically did not reply.
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ii.
Now that Bob has truly been fired, appealing to the CEO is
kind of useless.
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iii.
iv.
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v.
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