One of the most tenacious and enigmatic phenomenon in the recent decades

is crimes committed by young offenders. The dramatic rise in the dilemma

has sparked urgent public concern over the potential impact of the trend. The
objectives of this essay are to analyze the forces behind this issue and to find
conclusive resolutions so as to uphold an ordered society.
It is always important to notice that our community is surrounded by huge
amount of reasons that help to ingrain the young offenders. The first reason
is rooted to the fact that the prevalence of the mass media printed mass
and TV in particular- with detailed description to the violent senses. Social
experts refer to the link between violence on TV and aggression in the
society, as in the case of South Africa before and after the prevalence of
crime documentaries. There was an obvious rise in the crime level in the
community after allowing such material to be presented. (I omitted
something here) Another justification is that the producers of these materials
encourage youngsters to imitate the stars of the violent movies and present
them as role models. (I omitted something here) Furthermore, complete
portray of the crimes will desensitize the audience against the horror of the
crimes such as homicide. It dramatizes the process of tracing offenders.
Given that, immersed are the viewers in the storyline as few of them are
encouraged to link the crimes as a brutal, unsympathetic and devastating
action. This form of representation will fail to convince the viewers as no
criminal will stay at large and most of them will be brought to justice. (VERY
LONG)
What adds fuel to this argument is the malevolent impact of the domestic
violence not only at home but also on the streets and at schools. This type of
rearing children with corporal punishment will have devastating effects on the
personality, inasmuch as they lose self-confidence and take the easiest way
of solving the problemsas he / she knows- by violence.
It is worth mentioning that a challenging social phenomenon has appeared on
our community in the recent decades; it is the homeless juveniles. Those who
breed with un-proper environment without education nor vocation. Academic
society studies emphasize that those youngsters are deemed as a time bomb
in the society and need an urgent solution. Despite the growing concern by
the government in order to tackle that issue, little progress can be achieved
and their numbers are in simultaneous increase.
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From the above analysis one can notice that the causes of the increased
proportion of young offenders are inextricably intertwined and so are their
solutions. The government with all society members should hold their efforts
to tackle this trend through awareness media programs and high quality
education.
Although the quality of you writing is superb now, I find the lenght an

obstacle. Try to be concise, and make a balance between different

paragraphs. Still this style is awesome. prepare three pieces in a very similar
way and show them to me. Best of luck.