Peer Review Sheet

For English 1002, Paper 3

A. The Story
1. Does the story start out with an attention-grabber, specific and
concrete, that might be expected to interest readers?

2. Does the description of the setting use concrete sensory details (from the
5 senses=sound, sight, touch, taste, smell) to enhance readers interests?
How about the description of the characters? Name two places where
more concrete, sensory details could be used, and suggest some types to
use.

3. Show two places where memory-soaked and /or revelatory words and
images are used well, and explain how you know this (see ABGW 503=504)
. Suggest at least two places where these two types of words could be used
to good effect.

4. Where could the dramatic tensions and/or the connections between one
event and another be sharpened or tightened to make a better story (see
ABGW 499, 500,)? How can the paper better show the connections
between character and action, and how one action leads to another?

5. How well does the story relate to its takeaway, or theme, or lesson
learned? How can the story be better related to its takeaway?
Suggest some ways in which this can be done.
6) Suggest some ways in which the story can be made more engaging and
interesting as a whole.
interesting as a whole to its readers.
B. The Takeaways and Paper #3 as a Whole
1) How well does the paper preserve a conversational tone? Are there any
places that sound like a closed-form research paper? Even if there arent ,
suggest more ways to make this sound like an interesting presentation.
2) Where does the author need to use I and an active verb to relate what
he, or she, said or did? (For example: I threw the basketball through the
hoop rather than The basketball was thrown through the hoop by one
of the college students. I learned how much I needed to hear and so
on). Suggest at least two places where I and an active verb can be used
well.
3. How clearly does the author reflect on what truths the story taught him
or her? How does the author share this process of truth-seeking effectively?
Suggest a way that this can be done more effectively.
4) How well does the paper persuade readers about its points? Is its tone
harsh when it means to persuade? Can the author be more persuasive by
stating concretely what he or she means, then expressing hope for the
readers as well? Suggest one way in which the tone can be improved, OR
the points of persuasion stated more clearly, OR both.
5) How conversationally is research introduced? Does the research seem to
flow in, naturally, with the tone of the paper? (Remember that there are
no parenthetical citations and no References page with this paper) Are
attributive tags used well?
6) How strong and lively is the overall voice of the paper? Is there a
humorous tone where its appropriate? How about a serious tone? Suggest
ways in which the strength or liveliness, or both, of the authors voice
might be improved.