ENG-105 Peer Review Worksheet: Rhetorical Analysis of a Public ocu!

ent Part of your responsibility as a student in this course is to provide quality feedback to your peers that will help them to improve their writing skills. This worksheet will assist you in providing that feedback. Name of the drafts author: Joshua Davis Name of the peer reviewer: Dennis Boyd Reviewer After reading through the draft one time, write a summary (3 ! sentences" of the paper that includes your assess!ent of how well the essay !eets the assi"n!ent re#uire!ents as s$ecifie% in the syllabus an% the rubric& #eading $r. %avis first draft was pretty good. &t showed how dedicated '%' is on supporting A%(%. '%' stressed that if a person has symptoms of A%(% to get help immediately. &t shows that this website is a good place to find information on diseases, disorders and facts of illnesses.

After a second, closer reading of the draft, answer each of the following questions. Positive answers will give you specific elements of the draft to praise) negative answers will indicate areas in need of improvement and revision. Please be sure to indicate at least three positive aspects of the draft and at least three areas for improvement in reply to the questions at the bottom of this worksheet. Rhetorical Analysis 'ontent an% (%eas * (ow effectively does the thesis statement identify the main points that the writer would like to make about the public document he or she is analy+ing, -hen stated is this information believable, how did it appeal to emotions, and is it being brought forth by a trusted source. * (ow successful is the writer.s summary of the public document under study, &t was successful when it was proved that the '%' was the pinnacle of information concerning types of disorders. * (ow effective is the writer.s e/planation and evaluation of the rhetorical situation, genre, and stance, &t shows where many things were e/plained but, feel it was off track. -here & would read one thing then it 0umps to another point that & wasn.t informed of. * (ow persuasively is evidence used to support assertions and enrich the essay, -hen it was said the site did a fairly good 0ob of presenting the information in a logical format by

building a foundation of information. Also, the author seems to genuinely care about those affected by the disorder. 1ast, the website presents a very confident case on this disorder. * (ow effectively does the essay.s content support the thesis by analy+ing the document and evaluating its effectiveness according to strategies from chapter 2 of The Call to Write? &t does support the thesis but, again it drifts off what is being written about the thesis and confuses the reader a little bit. )r"ani*ation * (ow effectively does the introduction engage the reader while providing an overview of the paper, &t starts good on what the reader will be reading about and gives a short history on A%(%. * Please identify the writer.s thesis and quote it in the bo/ below. &f & stand correct the thesis is one needs to consider is this information believable, how did it appeal to emotion, and is it being brought forth by a trusted source.

* (ow effectively do the paragraphs develop the topic sentence and advance the essay.s ideas, This & felt wasn.t developing for the reader to know what they are reading about. * (ow effectively does the conclusion provide a strong, satisfying ending, not a mere summary of the essay, The conclusion vaguely summari+es what the thesis was about throughout the essay +or!at , (ow closely does the paper follow 3'4 formatting style, &s it double spaced in 52 pt. Times 6ew #oman font, %oes it have 57 margins, %oes it use headers (page numbers using appropriate header function", %oes it have a proper heading (with student.s name, date, course, and instructor.s name", &t wasn.t doubled spaced, no page numbers, small errors on the heading. , Are all information, quotations, and borrowed ideas cited in parenthetical 3'4 format, This was cited correctly good 0ob there. , Are all sources listed on the references page in 3'4 format, 8es, this was done correctly , &s the required minimum number of sources listed, 8es, there were two outside sources provided -an"ua"e .se an% /tyle

* Are the voice and tone of the essay effective in characteri+ing ideas and creating the appropriate mood, &f 96o,: please provide e/amples of ineffective or inappropriate voice and tone. 8es * (ow effectively does the paper incorporate a variety of sentence structures that strengthen the ideas, create vitality, and avoid choppiness in the writing, ;ach sentence had a good structure but, still felt some sentences didn.t fit in on the purpose of your writing. * (ow would you assess the writer.s diction (i.e., word choice", %oes the writer use active verbs, concrete nouns, and precise words, <ery good choice of words used Gra!!ar an% 0echanics * %oes the writer use proper grammar, punctuation, and spelling, &f 96o,: please provide e/amples of errors in need of correction. 8es * &s the writing clear and comprehensible throughout the draft, &f 96o,: please provide e/amples in need of improvement. 8es 1hree thin"s that ( like% about your %raft are: 5. 8ou went into detail on what '%' stands for in children 2. & liked where you stated the pros and cons of the '%' website. 3. That A%(% will still need to be researched more

1hree thin"s that coul% be i!$rove% are: 5. =ill the reader in on what they are reading about. 2. >tay more on the topic of the paragraph you are writing about. &t can confuse the reader. 3. -atch for the language and style use points can be deducted easily.