Humanities Essay Feedback Sheet

Name:__________________________________ Date:______________________ Period:______ The Prompt:

THESIS
Thesis does not respond the prompt Thesis only addresses part of the prompt Thesis relies on assertions that are not appropriate to respond to the prompt Thesis does not set up a well organized paper

ANALYSIS (Development of Ideas)

Analysis is incorrect. Analysis is not specific or clear Analysis is only surface level. Analysis does not explain why the evidence proves the thesis.

EVIDENCE (Use of Documents)

Missing quote/Summary of sources Quote/Summary not embedded smoothly Quote/Summary does not fully support assertion

CONCLUSION
Conclusion is not very clear Conclusion is only surface level. Conclusion contains new evidence that was not presented throughout the paper

Next Steps
THESIS

Rewrite your thesis statement ensuring that it answers the entire question. Reread your paper and ensure that your thesis statement addresses the assertions that you make throughout the paper. Rewrite your paper to ensure that it contains organizational categories.
EVIDENCE

Reread the section and find a more connected piece of evidence. Rewrite your quote, smoothly embedding it into a sentence. Rewrite your paper and explain why the text evidence proves your assertion.

ANALYSIS

CONCLUSION

Rewrite your conclusion and clearly prove your assertion.

Humanities Essay Feedback Sheet

Name:__________________________________ Date:______________________ Period:______ ORGANIZATION
Thesis is not there or very hard to find Thesis is unclear or not specific enough Transitions are weak or non-existent Topic sentences are unclear, weak, or non-existent The essay isnt broken into logical paragraphs

DEVELOPMENT OF IDEAS
Unclear or weak details or examples The essay is formulaic or robotic The essay repeats itself in places The essay is too wordy / not concise The essay does not convince the reader to believe the thesis

FOCUS
The paper contains elements that do not directly respond to the prompt The paper is not balanced to address all of the assertions made in the thesis statement

Next Steps
ORGANIZATION

Rewrite/write your thesis making it very clear what you will explain or prove then rewrite your essay based on the new thesis. Rewrite the essay adding in specific transitional words or phrases (in topic sentences, in body paragraphs, etc.) Create an outline of your essay, starting with a thesis, then topic sentences, then rewrite your essay based on the outline. Rewrite your essay breaking similar ideas into different paragraphs.
DEVELOPMENT OF IDEAS

Reread your essay and find places where you repeat yourself or are too wordy, then rewrite your essay making it more concise. Reread your essay, and write down two or three notes you can do to make the essay more believable or persuasive, then rewrite your essay based on your notes. Find the details/examples in your essay, and rewrite them to be more specific Rewrite your essay eliminating the formula or removing any sentences, words, or phrases that sound robotic.
FOCUS

Rewrite your essay removing elements that do not directly relate to addressing the prompt. Rewrite your essay to include additional elements to address all categories from your thesis. Reread your essay and rewrite sections that are not balanced so that each category contains enough support for each category and sub-category of your assertions.