Axia College Material

Appendix G
Final Assignment
Note that there are multiple parts for this final assignment.
Read two of the five paragraphs on the second page of this appendix. Write a brief paragraph
of about 150 words in which you do the following:
o dentify which paragraph was more effective and analy!e why this is so.
o nclude a discussion of sentence variety and the rhythm of the author"s writing.
o #ocus on the writing rather than the opinions presented.
o $nderline your topic sentence.
%ubmit your paragraph to Writepoint in the &enter for Writing 'xcellence. (o do so) clic*
Library to the right of the &lassroom tab. (hen) clic* Submit a Paper for Grammar and Plagiarism
Review. &omplete the information at the bottom of the page and clic* the radial to the left of
Writepoint.
+nce you submit the paper to Write,oint) you should have access to the results -uic*ly. .fter
a short time) go bac* into the &enter for Writing 'xcellence and clic* My Papers to retrieve your
results. &lic* either the green chec* mar* or WritePoint to open the results.
Review the feedbac* provided by the &enter for Writing 'xcellence and ma*e corrections to
your paragraph.
o When doing so) understand that Write,oint may be helpful but is not always correct.
/a*e the corrections you feel are appropriate.
Write a second paragraph) also of about 150 words) in which you describe the feedbac* you
received from Write,oint) providing specific examples of helpful suggestions) as well as ones you felt
may have been incorrect and why you thin* that.
o $nderline your topic sentence.

Write a third and final paragraph in which describe your strategy for using Write,oint in the future.
o nclude a discussion of how to accommodate submission and feedbac* time.
o $nderline your topic sentence.
,ost your three paragraphs as /icrosoft
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Word attachments. (he paragraphs are as follows:
o (he corrected version of the paragraph submitted to Write,oint
o (he paragraph describing feedbac* from Write,oint
o (he paragraph in which you tal* about your strategy for using Write,oint in the future.
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(he five sample paragraphs are below. &hoose two at random to read. Note that the paragraphs
represent a range of -uality. %ome have errors and do not flow effectively.
1. . lot of people don"t have wills. 'veryone needs a will) but not all people have one. Wills are
important because they explain who gets your stuff after you die. 1ou don"t want your things going to
someone you don"t want them to go to. /y .unt /artha went to a lawyer to get a will) did my will
online. /y dad died in 1233. 4e didn"t have a will. 4is stuff went to my step mom) who don"t get
along with. f he would have had a will) might have been able to start college sooner. 5ut my dad
didn"t have a will. . will is good and you need to get one. 6o you have a will7
2. Recent economic concerns prompted ,resident +bama to meet with credit card industry executives
in .pril) 8002. (he national credit card delin-uency rate has continued to grow in recent times) and
the ,resident) along with &ongress) aims to end unfair fees and increases in interest rates. n
addition) the ,resident as*ed that all terms) disclosures) and statements be clear and easy to read for
consumers. &onfusing terms) often laid out in fine print) are believed to have led to the nation"s rising
debt and delin-uency.
9. ndividuals can be denied credit for a number of reasons. ndividuals who are near limits on existing
cards) have too much outstanding debt or too many accounts overall) have a history of late payments)
charge:offs or ban*ruptcy are li*ely to be denied credit. ndividuals denied credit) by law) will receive a
letter documenting the reason for the denial under the #air &redit Reporting .ct. ndividuals who
receive that letter should then examine the reasons for the denial and ma*e efforts to correct their
credit.
4. /ost consumers understand that a good credit score is vital to one"s financial security and stability.
/any people may not understand how a credit score is calculated. ,ayment history accounts for
roughly 95; of one"s overall score. (his means that on:time payments are absolutely essential. 6ebt
level is not far behind at 90;. (his accounts for near:limits and the total amount of money owed.
<ength of credit history is next at 15;) followed by in-uiries at 10; and mix of credit at 10;.
5. .voiding and managing debt is hard. (hings cost so much money that it"s hard not to spend more
than you ma*e. (he bills pile up) the utilities cost a lot) and going to the grocery store is expensive
too. (hen once those bills are paid) someone in the family gets hurt and needs to go the doctor or an
unexpected bill comes in li*e car tags or something. We are told to =ust use cash and not use credit
cards to help stay out of debt. Who"s going to pay those extra monthly bills if it"s not the credit cards7
.voiding and managing debit is too hard.
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