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Team 5 Adobe Creative Store Proposal

by Doris Hung

WORD COUNT CHARACTER COUNT

6201 31619

TIME SUBMITTED PAPER ID

12-MAR-2013 12:21PM 311589879

Good the get this upfront

You could have gone for insight by considering how sensemaking might or might not have supported your approach or what you found.

This is research, but not experimentation. Fine for a first round in a broader piece of research, but keep in mind that experiments have "manipulations" that you then compare against a before state and/or a control.

This is your "pilot study."

Clear

Nice use of this concept

good, resolves my concern from above

Good to see that this is what they are doing Good connection

At least for the brush part, not really "big data." They probably have usage data even now (fairly structured if using, not using). Might get to big data if they start tracking the full developmental process. Think of the 3Vs when you want to check big or not.

Good application

These next sections take you from a good paper to a very good paper.

What I like about this is that you found an easy way to judge interest - in the audience's "space"

Good to raise these issues

Reasonable issues to raise. In terms of presentation, better to break into several paragraphs.

You've demonstrated careful thought in this paper - and creativity. Complete, professionally presented, good logical flow. Next step, highlight your key insight and provide clear & focused justification. Be willing to say, "this is what is unique and valuable here"

GRADEMARK REPORT FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

95
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Text Comment. Good the get this upfront

Text Comment. You could have gone for insight by considering how sensemaking might or might not have supported your approach or what you found. Text Comment. This is research, but not experimentation. Fine for a first round in a broader piece of research, but keep in mind that experiments have "manipulations" that you then compare against a before state and/or a control. Text Comment. This is your "pilot study."
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Text Comment. Clear Text Comment. Nice use of this concept


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Text Comment. good, resolves my concern from above


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Text Comment. Good to see that this is what they are doing Text Comment. Good connection
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Text Comment. At least for the brush part, not really "big data." They probably have usage data even now (fairly structured if using, not using). Might get to big data if they start tracking the full developmental process. Think of the 3Vs when you want to check big or not.
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Text Comment. Good application


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Text Comment. These next sections take you from a good paper to a very good paper.
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Text Comment. What I like about this is that you found an easy way to judge interest - in the audience's "space"

Text Comment. Good to raise these issues Text Comment. Reasonable issues to raise. In terms of presentation, better to break into several paragraphs. Text Comment. You've demonstrated careful thought in this paper - and creativity. Complete, professionally presented, good logical flow. Next step, highlight your key insight and provide clear & focused justification. Be willing to say, "this is what is unique and valuable here"
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