Alison Widner Dietel-McLaughlin Multimedia Writing and Rhetoric 27 April 2013 Causal Essay Revision Reflection I found this

revision to be particularly challenging. I found the paper itself when I wrote it to also be challenging to write. I was and still am proud of the way it turned out, despite my troubles, however I did agree with the feedback I received. I think my new finished product, however, is much clearer in the delivery of my argument. I tried to find other dimension with which I could analyze the 90s throwback, including searching other decades for hints of why those comebacks happened. Since my point was that the 90s throwback was towards 90s kids, things like a booming economy seemed irrelevant. The group that I was identifying as perpetuating the throwback would not have been old enough to handle money or understand what a good economy was. That is why I went and added more analysis about the strangeness of the age of those participating with the throwback, that much of it is from kids who were barely toddlers in the 90s and probably have fewif anymemories of the decade. I explained that weird phenomenon, but again, had no solid research to determine why kids would jump on a throwback bandwagon other than the original research I had about the need and function of nostalgia. I put that analysis and speculation at the end of my introduction as another piece of introductory work assessing and analyzing the nature of the trend.

Following that, I kept the order of the points I had made originally. The most obvious being the exposure to social media, and then transitioning into the psychology behind nostalgia that would attempt to uncover the mystery that is the brain. I think now, after these revisions and the restructuring that my paper is much stronger, especially in explaining the weird nature of the throwback, which I think I only brushed over previously. I wish I could have found more research, but I had found a lot of what I found originally, and the new things I did find, were not really getting at the same thing I was. I think on this paper, more so than any others in this course, that I understand what it means when writing is a process Like I said before, I struggled with this paper originally, and I think its fair to say that I struggled with the revision even more. Despite the fact that not much has changed, I did do some more (unsuccessful) research and played around with paragraph order quite a bit and now I think it is much more logical and clear. I think adding that extra introduction paragraph was a nice transition, because it not only better explained the nature of the trend, but introduced the upcoming points as well.