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VIETNAM NATIONAL UNIVERSITY, HANOI

UNIVERSITY OF LANGUAGES AND


INTERNATIONAL STUDIES

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WRITING PORTPOLIO
(SEMESTER 5)

Student : Pham Duc Long


Class : 07E10
Supervisor: Nguyen Bich Diep A

HANOI, 12/2009
WRITING PORTFOLIO 5TH SEMESTER

ACKNOWLEDGEMENTS

I should like to express my deep gratitude to my lecturer, Ms Nguyen


Bich Diep (A) for her constant and helpful advice and enlightening guidance
throughout the 5thsemester course of writing.
My special thanks also go to students in class 07E10, ULIS-VNU, HN
whose comments have been considered a great deal of help.

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TABLE OF CONTENTS

No. Topic Page


1. Vocabulary ranges for writing charts, graphs and tables 4
2. Writing a flow chart: HORSE 5
3. Writing a bar chart: LEISURE TIME ENJOYED BY 9
MEN AND WOMEN
4. Writing a pie chart: SURVEY ON PUBLIC 14
SERVICES
5. Writing a line chart: THE CONSUMPTION OF MEAT 18
6. Writing a table chart : MID-TERM TEST 23
(Hand writing)
7. Write a table chart: 24
ENTERING HIGHER EDUCATION
8. Writing a diagram: SOURCES OF NOISE 28
9. Writing a map: WEST FARM IN USA 29
10. Writing a informal letter 36
11. Write an informal letter 38

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VOCABULARY RANGE

Up trend Down trend Adverb

To soar : to fly, rise quickly To plummet: To fall very quickly sharply

To rocket: to rise extremely quickly To decline obviously

To surge: to move suddenly To go down markedly

To shoot up: to move quickly To decrease dramatically

To rise remarkably

To grow suddenly

To increase steadily

gradually

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 5
Date: 05/10/2009

Writing Assignment version 1

Topic: Write a flow chart


Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the horse
over a period of 40 million years.

Correction
Content
The diagram illustrates 40 million years witnessing the changes of the
horse in the evolution process mainly in build (size, mane and tail) and
foot structure.
As we can see from the diagram, the most outstanding modification lies in
foot structure, ranging from a small five-toed named “Eohippus” creature
to “Mesohippus” followed by “Merychippus” with three toes 30 million
years ago towards 15 million years ago. Eventually, it has properly
evolved into the large single-toed animal of today.
Among dramatically-developed features of build, horse mane has
remarkably grown from hairless beginning till long mane as modern horse.
Moreover, horse tail gradually becomes longer and longer while the size of
body becomes larger and larger according to the time transition.
It is clear that in the past 40 million years, foot structure and build’s
evolution has resulted in large modern single-toed horses.

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker: LE THI THU


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class: 07E10
Score:

Week: 5
Date: 05/10/2009

Writing Assignment version 1

Topic: Write a flow chart


Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the horse
over a period of 40 million years.

Comments/
Content Corrections

The diagram illustrates 40 million years witnessing the changes of the


horse in the evolution process mainly in build (size, mane and tail) and
foot structure.
As we can see from the diagram, the most outstanding modification lies
in foot structure, ranging from a small five-toed named “Eohippus” ???
confusing
creature to “Mesohippus” followed by “Merychippus” with three toes
30 million years ago towards 15 million years ago. Eventually, it has
properly evolved into the large single-toed animal of today.
Among dramatically-developed features of build, horse mane has
remarkably grown from hairless beginning till long mane as modern
horse. Moreover, horse tail gradually becomes longer and longer
while the size of body becomes larger and larger according to the Very good!
time transition.
It is clear that in the past 40 million years, foot structure and build’s
evolution has resulted in large modern single-toed horses.

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Name: Pham Duc Long 2nd Marker: LE THI NGUYEN


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class: 07E10
Score:

Week: 5
Date: 05/10/2009

Writing Assignment version 1

Topic: Write a flow chart


Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the horse
over a period of 40 million years.

Correcti
Content on

The diagram illustrates 40 million years witnessing the changes of the


horse in the evolution process mainly in build (size, mane and tail) and
foot structure.
As we can see from the diagram, the most outstanding modification lies in
foot structure, ranging from a small five-toed named “Eohippus” creature
to “Mesohippus” followed by “Merychippus” with three toes 30 million
years ago towards 15 million years ago. Eventually, it has properly
evolved into the large single-toed animal of today.
Among dramatically-developed features of build, horse mane has
remarkably grown from hairless beginning till long mane as modern ???
horse. Moreover, horse tail gradually becomes longer and longer while the when

size of body becomes larger and larger according to the time transition.
It is clear that in the past 40 million years, foot structure and build’s Imagina_
tive idea !
evolution has resulted in large modern single-toed horses.

Assessment:
You should rewrite this writing in a different style. Your ideas
are good but clear.

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 5
Date: 05/10/2009

Writing Assignment version: FINAL

Topic: Write a flow chart


Write a report for a university lecturer describing the development of the horse
over a period of 40 million years.

Content
The diagram illustrates 40 million years witnessing the changes of the horse in the
evolution process mainly in appearance and foot structure.
There are four main stages in the process. The first stage was Echippus which appeared 40
million years. 10 million years later, the horse was named Mesohippus. The third stage
mentioned Merychippus appearing 15 million years ago. The final stage is modern horse.
The appearance of the horse has changed mainly in built body and mane. The size of the
horse has been developed from a fox'
s size to bigger size as we see nowadays. Besides,
according to the image Echippus had no mane, but the mane of the horse was getting
longer and longer. Today the modern horse has very beautiful long mane. The final
change and the most particular one is foot structure. Modern horse has only one toe in
each leg. However, in the first stage, Echippus had five toes. 30 million years later, there
were three equal toes. After that, the ancestors of the horse still had three toes, but the
middle one was bigger and bigger. Thus, it became the biggest one.
It is clear that in the past 40 million years, foot structure and build’s evolution have
resulted in large modern single-toed horses.

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WRITING A BAR CHART


You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and
women of different employment status.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown


below.

You should write at least 150 words.

(CAMBRIDGE IELTS 2. Test 2. Writing test 1. Cambridge University Press)

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 6
Date: 12/10/2009

Writing Assignment version 1

Topic: Write a bar chart

Correcti
Content on
The chart shows the number of hours of leisure time enjoyed by men and
women a typical week in the period 1998-1999, according to gender and
employment status.
Among those employed full-time, men on average had 30 hours of leisure,
whereas women had approximately 37 hours. Thee were no figures given
for male part-time worker, but female part-timers had 40 hours of leisure
time, only slightly more than women in full-time employment.
In the unemployed and retired categories, leisure showed an increase for
both sexes, as might have been expected. Men enjoyed more leisure time-
over 80 hours, compared with 70 hours for women.
Lastly, housewives enjoyed about 54 hours of leisure, on average. There
were no figures given for househusbands.

Assessment: ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker: KHUAT VAN TIEN


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class: 07E10
Score:

Week: 6
Date: 12/10/2009

Writing Assignment version 1

Topic: Write a bar chart

Content Correction

The chart shows the number of hours of leisure time enjoyed by men and
women a typical week in the period 1998-1999, according to gender and In a typical
week
employment status.
Among those employed full-time, men on average had 30 hours of leisure, 50
whereas women had approximately 37 hours. Thee were no figures given
for male part-time worker, but female part-timers had 40 hours of leisure
time, only slightly more than women in full-time employment.
In the unemployed and retired categories, leisure showed an increase for
both sexes, as might have been expected. Men enjoyed more leisure time-
over 80 hours, compared with 70 hours for women.
Lastly, housewives enjoyed about 54 hours of leisure, on average. There
were no figures given for househusbands.

Assessment: ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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Name: Pham Duc Long 2nd Marker: DUONG DINH NAM


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class: 07E10
Score:

Week: 6
Date: 12/10/2009

Writing Assignment version 1

Topic: Write a bar chart

Content Correction

The chart shows the number of hours of leisure time enjoyed by men and Another
word:
women a typical week in the period 1998-1999, according to gender and reflects /
illustrates
employment status.
Among those employed full-time, men on average had 30 hours of leisure,
50
whereas women had approximately 37 hours. Thee were no figures given
for male part-time worker, but female part-timers had 40 hours of leisure
time, only slightly more than women in full-time employment.
In the unemployed and retired categories, leisure showed an increase for
both sexes, as might have been expected. Men enjoyed more leisure ??? why
time-over 80 hours, compared with 70 hours for women.
Lastly, housewives enjoyed about 54 hours of leisure, on average. There repeated
were no figures given for househusbands.

Assessment: ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 6
Date: 12/10/2009

Writing Assignment version: FINAL

Topic: Write a bar chart

Content Correction

The chart illustrates the number of hours of leisure time enjoyed by men
and women in a typical week in the period 1998-1999 according to gender
and employment status.
Among those employed full-time, men on average had 50 hours of leisure,
whereas women had approximately 37 hours. There were no figures given
for male part-time worker, but female part-timers had 40 hours of free
time, only slightly more than women in full-time employment.
In the unemployed and retired categories, leisure showed a remarkable
increase for both sexes. Men spent more leisure time-over 80 hours per
week, compared with 70 hours for women.
Lastly, housewives enjoyed about 54 hours of leisure, on average. There
were no figures given for househusbands.

Assessment: ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 7
Date: 20/10/2009

Writing Assignment version 1

Topic: Write a pie chart


Write about the results of an extensive public survey on people’s attitude to a
range of issues (McCarter, 2006, p.125-126)
McCarter, C. (2006). Academic writing practice for IELTS. Ho Chi Minh city
publishing house

Correction
Content
.The pie charts reflect people’s perceptions of whether education ought to
be poured more money on than health or public transport and an
investigation’s findings on raising taxes for the public services.
70% participants in an extensive pubic survey have the same agreement
that money should be spent on education service as apposed to 20% and
10% for attendants at disagreement and no answer respectively. Although
education is perceived as more worth-investing service than public
transport by 85% people investigated, it loses advantage over health
standing at 40% for support of pouring much more capital on and
exceeding 30 % participants insisting on greater expenditure of education
compared with health.
The fourth chart illustrates the people’s attitude to raising taxes for public
services such as education, health and public transport. Nearly 50% of
answers collected show the disapproval of increasing taxes as
approximately much as answers in favor of

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker: LE THI NGUYEN


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class: 07E10
Score:

Week: 7
Date: 20/10/2009

Writing Assignment version 1

Topic: Write a pie chart


Write about the results of an extensive public survey on people’s attitude to a
range of issues (McCarter, 2006, p.125-126)
McCarter, C. (2006). Academic writing practice for IELTS. Ho Chi Minh city
publishing house

Correction
Content
.The pie charts reflect people’s perceptions of whether education ought to
be poured more money on than health or public transport and an ???
Expression
investigation’s findings on raising taxes for the public services.
70% participants in an extensive pubic survey have the same agreement
that money should be spent on education service as apposed to 20% and
10% for attendants at disagreement and no answer respectively. Although ???
education is perceived as more worth-investing service than public
transport by 85% people investigated, it loses advantage over health w.c
standing at 40% for support of pouring much more capital on and w.c
exceeding 30 % participants insisting on greater expenditure of education
compared with health.
The fourth chart illustrates the people’s attitude to raising taxes for public
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services such as education, health and public transport. Nearly 50% of % people
do not
answers collected show the disapproval of increasing taxes as know
approximately much as answers in favor of

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Name: Pham Duc Long 2nd Marker: LE THI THU


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class : 07E10

Score:

Week: 7
Date: 20/10/2009

Writing Assignment version 1

Topic: Write a pie chart


Write about the results of an extensive public survey on people’s attitude to a
range of issues (McCarter, 2006, p.125-126)
McCarter, C. (2006). Academic writing practice for IELTS. Ho Chi Minh city
publishing house

Content Correction

.The pie charts reflect people’s perceptions of whether education ought to


be poured more money on than health or public transport and an
investigation’s findings on raising taxes for the public services.
70% participants in an extensive pubic survey have the same agreement agreed
that money should be spent on education service as apposed to 20% and
10% for attendants at disagreement and no answer respectively. Although
education is perceived as more worth-investing service than public
transport by 85% people investigated, it loses advantage over health An/ the
advantage
standing at 40% for support of pouring much more capital on and
exceeding 30 % participants insisting on greater expenditure of education
compared with health.
The fourth chart illustrates the people’s attitude to raising taxes for public
services such as education, health and public transport. Nearly 50% of
Collected
answers collected show the disapproval of increasing taxes as to
approximately much as answers in favor of ?
conclusion
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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 7
Date: 20/10/2009

Writing Assignment version FINAL

Topic: Write a pie chart


Write about the results of an extensive public survey on people’s attitude to a
range of issues (McCarter, 2006, p.125-126)
McCarter, C. (2006). Academic writing practice for IELTS. Ho Chi Minh city
publishing house

Content
The pie charts reflect the results of an extensive public survey on people’s
perceptions towards education, health, public transport and raising taxes.
70% participants in the extensive pubic survey have agreed that money should be
spent on education service as apposed to 20% and 10% for attendants at
disagreement and no answer respectively. Although education is perceived as more
worth-investing service than public transport by 85% people investigated, it loses
ground to health standing at 40% for support of pouring much more capital on and
exceeding 30 % participants insisting on greater expenditure of education compared
with health.
The fourth chart illustrates the people’s attitude to raising taxes for public services
such as education, health and public transport. Nearly 50% of collected answers
show the disapproval of increasing taxes as approximately much as answers in
favor of. The remainder (about 3%) did not give any response at all.
It is clear that investment for education is the second priority among public services
as perceived by people in the survey.

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(Cambridge IELTS 7. TEST 2. Writing task. Page 53

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 8
Date: 27/10/2009

Writing Assignment version 1

Topic: Write a line chart (page. 18 above).

Write about the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European
country between 1979 and 2004.

Correction
Content
The graph illustrates changes in the amount of beef, lamb, chicken and fish
consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.
In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams
consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar
quantities (around 150 grams), while much less fish was consumed (just over 50
grams).
However, during this 25 year period, the consumption of beef and lamb fell
dramatically to nearly 100 drams and 55 grams respectively. The consumption
of fish also declined, but much less significantly to just below 50 grams, so
although it remained the least popular food, consumption levels were the most
stable.
The consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend, over
passing that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989. By 2004 it had soared to
almost 250 grams per person per week
Overall, the graph shows how the consumption of chicken increased
dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period.

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker: DANG THI YEN


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class : 07E10
Score:

Week: 8
Date: 27/10/2009

Writing Assignment version 1

Topic: Write a line chart (page. 18 above).

Write about the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European
country between 1979 and 2004.

Content Correction
The graph illustrates changes in the amount of beef, lamb, chicken and fish
consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.
In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams Among
consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar
quantities (around 150 grams), while much less fish was consumed (just over 50
grams).
However, during this 25 year period, the consumption of beef and lamb fell
dramatically to nearly 100 drams and 55 grams respectively. The consumption
of fish also declined, but much less significantly to just below 50 grams, so Should be
Omitted
although it remained the least popular food, consumption levels were the most
stable.
The consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend, over What do
you mean?
passing that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989. By 2004 it had soared
to almost 250 grams per person per week
Overall, the graph shows how the consumption of chicken increased
dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period

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Name: Pham Duc Long 2nd Marker: NGUYEN THI HONG NHUNG
Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class : 07E10

Score:

Week: 8
Date: 27/10/2009

Writing Assignment version 1

Topic: Write a line chart (page. 18 above).

Write about the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European
country between 1979 and 2004.

Correction
Content
The graph illustrates changes in the amount of beef, lamb, chicken and fish
consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.
In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 Very
clever!
grams consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar
quantities (around 150 grams), while much less fish was consumed (just over 50
grams).
However, during this 25 year period, the consumption of beef and lamb fell
dramatically to nearly 100 drams and 55 grams respectively. The consumption
of fish also declined, but much less significantly to just below 50 grams, so ???
although it remained the least popular food, consumption levels were the most
stable.
The consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend, over So
confusing!
passing that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989. By 2004 it had soared
to almost 250 grams per person per week
Overall, the graph shows how the consumption of chicken increased
In
dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period
conclusion,

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 8
Date: 27/10/2009

Writing Assignment version: FINAL

Topic: Write a line chart (page. 18 above).

Write about the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European
country between 1979 and 2004.

Content Correction
The graph illustrates changes in the amount of beef, lamb, chicken and fish
consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.
In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams
consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar
quantities (around 150 grams), while much less fish was consumed (just over 50
grams).
However, during this 25 year period, the consumption of beef and lamb fell
dramatically to nearly 100 drams and 55 grams respectively. The consumption
of fish also declined, but much less significantly to just below 50 grams, so
although it remained the least popular food, consumption levels were the most
stable.
The consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend,
overtaking that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989. By 2004 it had soared
to almost 250 grams per person per week
Overall, the graph shows how the consumption of chicken increased
dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period.

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 10
Date: 12 /11 /2009

Writing Assignment version: 1

Topic : Write about a table


McCarter, S.2006. Academic Writing Practice for IELTS. Task 4: writing task 1. Ho
Chi Minh publishing house (page 118)

Content Correction

The table illustrates the percentage of pupils entering higher education


from five secondary schools, namely Royston Academy, Greystone High,
Harble Secondary, Fairfield Girls and Crackend Boys from 1995 till 2000.
The greatest increase was in Harble Secondary, rising from 30% in 1995
to 80% in 2000. Next came Fairfield, increasing 24% over the same period
from the beginning point of 65%. Pupils entering Royston Academy and
Crackend Boys went up by 10% and 2% respectively between 1995 and
2000 inclusive.
On the other hand, there was a credible decline in the percentage of pupils
attending Greystone High, falling from 90% in 1995 down to 70% in
2000.

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker: LE THI THU


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class: 07E10
Score:

Week: 10
Date: 12 / 11 2009

Writing Assignment version: 1

Topic : Write about a table


McCarter, S.2006. Academic Writing Practice for IELTS. Task 4: writing task 1. Ho
Chi Minh publishing house (page 118)

Content Correction

The table illustrates the percentage of pupils entering higher education


Good
from five secondary schools, namely Royston Academy, Greystone High, lead-in
Harble Secondary, Fairfield Girls and Crackend Boys from 1995 till 2000.
The greatest increase was in Harble Secondary, rising from 30% in 1995
to 80% in 2000. Next came Fairfield, increasing 24% over the same period
from the beginning point of 65%. Pupils entering Royston Academy and
Crackend Boys went up by 10% and 2% respectively between 1995 and Maybe use
2000 inclusive. “in turn”

On the other hand, there was a credible decline in the percentage of pupils
attending Greystone High, falling from 90% in 1995 down to 70% in
Should be
2000. clearer

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Name: Pham Duc Long 2nd Marker: GIAP THI VAN


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class : 07E10
Score:

Week: 10
Date: 12 / 11 /2009

Writing Assignment version: 1

Topic : Write about a table


McCarter, S.2006. Academic Writing Practice for IELTS. Task 4: writing task 1. Ho
Chi Minh publishing house (page 118)

Content Correction

The table illustrates the percentage of pupils entering higher education


from five secondary schools, namely Royston Academy, Greystone High,
Harble Secondary, Fairfield Girls and Crackend Boys from 1995 till 2000.
The greatest increase was in Harble Secondary, rising from 30% in 1995 Good
expression
to 80% in 2000. Next came Fairfield, increasing 24% over the same
period from the beginning point of 65%. Pupils entering Royston Attending
/passing
Academy and Crackend Boys went up by 10% and 2% respectively into
between 1995 and 2000 inclusive.
On the other hand, there was a credible decline in the percentage of pupils
attending Greystone High, falling from 90% in 1995 down to 70% in
You often
2000. have
Well-
organized
Ideas
while
Writing!

Good
luck!

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 10
Date: 12 / 11 /2009

Writing Assignment version: FINAL

Topic : Write about a table


McCarter, S.2006. Academic Writing Practice for IELTS. Task 4: writing task 1. Ho
Chi Minh publishing house (page 118)

Content

The table illustrates the percentage of pupils entering higher education from five
secondary schools, namely Royston Academy, Greystone High, Harble Secondary,
Fairfield Girls and Crackend Boys from 1995 till 2000.
The greatest increase was in Harble Secondary, rising from 30% in 1995 to 80% in
2000. Next came Fairfield, increasing 24% over the same period from the
beginning point of 65%. Pupils passing into Royston Academy and Crackend Boys
went up by 10% and 2% in turn between 1995 and 2000 inclusive.
On the other hand, there was a credible decline in the percentage of pupils attending
Greystone High, falling from 90% in 1995 down to 70% in 2000.
It is undeniable that among five secondary schools, Harble Secondary was in 1st
rank of the percentage of pupils’ entering high school while Greystone High
decreased the number of entrance pupils during the period 1995-2000

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 11
Date: 18 / 11 /2009

Writing Assignment version: 1

Topic : Write about a diagram


McCarter, C. (2006). Academic writing practice for IELTS. Test 5: writing task 1.
Ho Chi Minh city publishing house. Page 120.

Content Correction

The diagram illustrates the findings of a survey conducted on a sample of


1.000 people on the different sources of noise which are a nuisance.
As we can see from the diagram, the results may be classified into four
categories. The largest category was “extremely annoying” sources, of
which Barking dogs was considered the most irritating. Then, DIY,
Mobile phones and Music was in the rank order from 2 to 4. There is no
information given for the “not annoying” categories.
In the “Very annoying” category, it includes two sources: Radios and
Aeroplanes with the first causing more of nuisance than the second
whereas TVs in the category of “Annoying” result from more of
disturbance than Radios. As for Pianos, they were regarded as only being
“Fairly annoying” by those in the sample.
It is remarkable that Barking dogs is the most annoying noise source.

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker: DUONG THI THAM


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class : 07E10
Score:

Week: 11
Date: 18 / 11 /2009

Writing Assignment version: 1

Topic : Write about a diagram


McCarter, C. (2006). Academic writing practice for IELTS. Test 5: writing task 1.
Ho Chi Minh city publishing house. Page 120.

Content Correction

The diagram illustrates the findings of a survey conducted on a sample of


1.000 people on the different sources of noise which are a nuisance.
As we can see from the diagram, the results may be classified into four like spoken
categories. The largest category was “extremely annoying” sources, of English
which Barking dogs was considered the most irritating. Then, DIY,
Good
Mobile phones and Music was in the rank order from 2 to 4. There is no expression
information given for the “not annoying” categories.
In the “Very annoying” category, it includes two sources: Radios and
Aeroplanes with the first causing more of nuisance than the second
whereas TVs in the category of “Annoying” result from more of
What do
disturbance than Radios. As for Pianos, they were regarded as only you mean?
being “Fairly annoying” by those in the sample.
It is remarkable that Barking dogs is the most annoying noise source.

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Name: Pham Duc Long 2nd Marker: LE THI LINH


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class : 07E10
Score:

Week: 11
Date: 18/11 /2009

Writing Assignment version: 1

Topic : Write about a diagram


McCarter, C. (2006). Academic writing practice for IELTS. Test 5: writing task 1.
Ho Chi Minh city publishing house. Page 120.

Content Correction

The diagram illustrates the findings of a survey conducted on a sample of


1.000 people on the different sources of noise which are a nuisance. Omit
“a”
As we can see from the diagram, the results may be classified into four
categories. The largest category was “extremely annoying” sources, of
which Barking dogs was considered the most irritating. Then, DIY, Verb tense
Mobile phones and Music was in the rank order from 2 to 4. There is no
information given for the “not annoying” categories. Second to
In the “Very annoying” category, it includes two sources: Radios and fourth
Aeroplanes with the first causing more of nuisance than the second
whereas TVs in the category of “Annoying” result from more of
disturbance than Radios. As for Pianos, they were regarded as only being
“Fairly annoying” by those in the sample. howerver

It is remarkable that Barking dogs is the most annoying noise source.

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WRITING PORTFOLIO 5TH SEMESTER

Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 11
Date: 18 / 11/2009

Writing Assignment version: FINAL

Topic : Write about a diagram


McCarter, C. (2006). Academic writing practice for IELTS. Test 5: writing task 1.
Ho Chi Minh city publishing house. Page 120.

Content Correction

.The diagram illustrates the findings of a survey conducted on a sample of


1.000 people on the different sources of noise which are nuisance.
As we can see from the diagram, the results may be classified into four
categories. The largest category is “extremely annoying” sources, of which
Barking dogs was considered the most irritating. Then, DIY, Mobile
phones and Music was in the rank order from 2nd to 4th. There is no
information given for the “not annoying” categories.
Radios and Aeroplanes were mentioned in the “Very annoying” class with
the first causing more of nuisance than the second but compared with TVs
in the category of “Annoying”, Radio resulted from less of disturbance
than these Televisions. As for Pianos, they were regarded as only being
“Fairly annoying” by those in the samples.
It is remarkable that Barking dogs is the most annoying noise source,

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 12
Date: 27/ 11/2009

Writing Assignment version: 1

Topic : Write about a map


McCarter, C. (2006). Academic writing practice for IELTS. Test 6: writing task 1.
Ho Chi Minh city publishing house. Page 122.

Content Correction
The maps show the changes in the size of West Farm and in the value of the
land per hectare over a period of 90 years from 1900 to 1990.
The area of West Farm fluctuated erratically. In 1990, West Farm was 5.000
hectares large. Over the next 25 years, it was narrowed to 850 hectares but
doubled after 15 years later. Between 1970 and 1990, the size of West Farm
remarkably increased from 5000 hectares to 3.500 hectares.
Contrary to going up and down about the area, the value of the land per hectare
was always upward trend, dramatically rocketed with only 1USD at the
beginning of 20th century to 20 USD in 1925. From the 2nd decade till 4th decade
of the 20thcentury, there was a slight increase of money collected per hectare
(about 5 USA). Next came 1970 and 1990 with credible numbers 100 USA and
125 USA per hectare respectively.
It is remarked that the value of the land in West Farm per hectare sharply soared
during the first 9th decade of 20th century as opposed to fluctuations in the area.

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Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker: PHAM THI HOA PHUONG
Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class : 07E10
Score:

Week: 12
Date: 27 / 11/2009

Writing Assignment version: 1

Topic : Write about a map


McCarter, C. (2006). Academic writing practice for IELTS. Test 6: writing task 1.
Ho Chi Minh city publishing house. Page 122.

Content Correction
The maps show the changes in the size of West Farm and in the value of the
land per hectare over a period of 90 years from 1900 to 1990. very
The area of West Farm fluctuated erratically. In 1990, West Farm was 5.000 smooth
hectares large. Over the next 25 years, it was narrowed to 850 hectares but
doubled after 15 years later. Between 1970 and 1990, the size of West Farm Hope
remarkably increased from 5000 hectares to 3.500 hectares. you
high
Contrary to going up and down about the area, the value of the land per hectare grades
was always upward trend, dramatically rocketed with only 1USD at the
beginning of 20th century to 20 USD in 1925. From the 2nd decade till 4th decade
Increase
of the 20thcentury, there was a slight increase of money collected per hectare in
(about 5 USA). Next came 1970 and 1990 with credible numbers 100 USA and
125 USA per hectare respectively.
It is remarked that the value of the land in West Farm per hectare sharply soared
during the first 9th decade of 20th century as opposed to fluctuations in the area.

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WRITING PORTFOLIO 5TH SEMESTER

Name: Pham Duc Long 2nd Marker: DUONG DINH NAM


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class : 07E10
Score:

Week: 12
Date: 27 / 11 /2009

Writing Assignment version: 1

Topic : Write about a map


McCarter, C. (2006). Academic writing practice for IELTS. Test 6: writing task 1.
Ho Chi Minh city publishing house. Page 122.

Correction
Content
The maps show the changes in the size of West Farm and in the value of the
land per hectare over a period of 90 years from 1900 to 1990.
The area of West Farm fluctuated erratically. In 1990, West Farm was 5.000
hectares large. Over the next 25 years, it was narrowed to 850 hectares but Any
alternative
doubled after 15 years later. Between 1970 and 1990, the size of West Farm word?
remarkably increased from 5000 hectares to 3.500 hectares.
Contrary to going up and down about the area, the value of the land per hectare
was always upward trend, dramatically rocketed with only 1USD at the
beginning of 20th century to 20 USD in 1925. From the 2nd decade till 4th decade
Rocketed
of the 20thcentury, there was a slight increase of money collected per hectare from
(about 5 USA). Next came 1970 and 1990 with credible numbers 100 USA and
125 USA per hectare respectively.
It is remarked that the value of the land in West Farm per hectare sharply soared
during the first 9th decade of 20th century as opposed to fluctuations in the area.
Interesting
phrase

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WRITING PORTFOLIO 5TH SEMESTER

Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 12
Date: 27 /11 /2009

Writing Assignment version: FINAL

Topic : Write about a map


McCarter, C. (2006). Academic writing practice for IELTS. Test 6: writing task 1.
Ho Chi Minh city publishing house. Page 122.

Correction
Content
The maps show the changes in the size of West Farm and in the value of the
land per hectare over a period of 90 years from 1900 to 1990.
The area of West Farm fluctuated erratically. In 1990, West Farm was 5.000
hectares large. Over the next 25 years, it was narrowed to 850 hectares but
doubled after 15 years later. Between 1970 and 1990, the size of West Farm
remarkably increased from 5000 hectares to 3.500 hectares.
Contrary to going up and down about the area, the value of the land per hectare
was always upward trend, dramatically rocketed from 1USD at the beginning of
20th century to 20 USD in 1925. From the 2nd decade till 4th decade of the
20thcentury, there was a slight increase in money collected per hectare (about 5
USA). Next went up 1970 and 1990 with credible numbers 100 USA and 125
USA per hectare respectively.
It is remarked that the value of the land in West Farm per hectare sharply soared
during the first 9th decade of 20th century as opposed to fluctuations in the area.

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WRITING PORTFOLIO 5TH SEMESTER

Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 13
Date: 2/ 12 /2009

Writing Assignment version: FINAL

Topic: Write an informal letter.


Writing a letter to inform your friend of what you have done during the last
three-month summer holiday.

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Dear Kien,
I was glad to know that I enjoyed three month joyful summer holiday in America
where you always dreamed to study. 2OO9 summer holiday was also the most
wonderful one I have ever had.
I spent the first ten days of July volunteering for HULIS’ hostel where I have been
living for nearly 2 years. Helping the 12th grade students attend the university
entrance actually motivated my passion for social activities. As a result, I become
more grown-up and confident at communication with people. Moreover, it was the
first time I took part in an international IT forum called WITFOR 2009 where I
practiced my speaking English skills as well as expressed my understandings of
information technology. I met Prime Minister Nguyen Tan Dung at the big hall who
praised our team “Supporter” for our professional service style.
I explored so much English grammar knowledge when advised to study before by
some students of K40 in preparation for the fifth semester. English grammar at
university seemed to be more interesting and complicated than I studied at high
school. As a result of my efforts, I have, up to now, had a systematic understanding
of it.
At present, I am a third year student with an eleven subject timetable to cover? I
am considering how your new school and friends in the United States are. Remind
to rewrite to me as soon as possible.
Best wishes,
Long

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WRITING PORTFOLIO 5TH SEMESTER

Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker:


Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS 2nd Marker:
Score:

Week: 13
Date: 3/ 12 /2009

Writing Assignment version: FINAL

Topic: Write a formal letter.

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Content

Dear Mrs. Benson,


I was very highly interested in your advertisement in The Times of 1st December,
2009, so I am writing this letter to apply for the position as a summer staff in your
international bookshop, Science Heaven. I strongly believe that my qualifications
and experience are ideally suited for the position.
Reading books is my outstanding interest because every book has some things
interesting to be explored. Therefore, I always spend more than two hours every
day reading all types of books in my father’s huge book treasure. My father is a
historian, so since I was eight years old, he taught how to arrange his books in order
carefully after I have read them, which I think will be useful for this job.
Secondly, I have already graduated from Hanoi University of Languages and
International Studies, so my English is very proficient. Moreover, I spent three
months last summer in Britain in the campaign of “Keep Our Earth Green”.
Therefore, I can speak English fluently and accurately.
Last but not least, I did a part-time job as a proficient staff in Nguyen Van Cu
bookshop for 4 years since I was a freshman. Thus, I am strongly confident to
consider myself an experienced candidate for the full time job you suggested.
I hope you will take my application into your consideration.
Yours sincerely,
Long
Pham Duc Long

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