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WRITING PORTPOLIO
(SEMESTER 5)
HANOI, 12/2009
WRITING PORTFOLIO 5TH SEMESTER
ACKNOWLEDGEMENTS
TABLE OF CONTENTS
VOCABULARY RANGE
To rise remarkably
To grow suddenly
To increase steadily
gradually
Week: 5
Date: 05/10/2009
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Content
The diagram illustrates 40 million years witnessing the changes of the
horse in the evolution process mainly in build (size, mane and tail) and
foot structure.
As we can see from the diagram, the most outstanding modification lies in
foot structure, ranging from a small five-toed named “Eohippus” creature
to “Mesohippus” followed by “Merychippus” with three toes 30 million
years ago towards 15 million years ago. Eventually, it has properly
evolved into the large single-toed animal of today.
Among dramatically-developed features of build, horse mane has
remarkably grown from hairless beginning till long mane as modern horse.
Moreover, horse tail gradually becomes longer and longer while the size of
body becomes larger and larger according to the time transition.
It is clear that in the past 40 million years, foot structure and build’s
evolution has resulted in large modern single-toed horses.
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Date: 05/10/2009
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size of body becomes larger and larger according to the time transition.
It is clear that in the past 40 million years, foot structure and build’s Imagina_
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evolution has resulted in large modern single-toed horses.
Assessment:
You should rewrite this writing in a different style. Your ideas
are good but clear.
Week: 5
Date: 05/10/2009
Content
The diagram illustrates 40 million years witnessing the changes of the horse in the
evolution process mainly in appearance and foot structure.
There are four main stages in the process. The first stage was Echippus which appeared 40
million years. 10 million years later, the horse was named Mesohippus. The third stage
mentioned Merychippus appearing 15 million years ago. The final stage is modern horse.
The appearance of the horse has changed mainly in built body and mane. The size of the
horse has been developed from a fox'
s size to bigger size as we see nowadays. Besides,
according to the image Echippus had no mane, but the mane of the horse was getting
longer and longer. Today the modern horse has very beautiful long mane. The final
change and the most particular one is foot structure. Modern horse has only one toe in
each leg. However, in the first stage, Echippus had five toes. 30 million years later, there
were three equal toes. After that, the ancestors of the horse still had three toes, but the
middle one was bigger and bigger. Thus, it became the biggest one.
It is clear that in the past 40 million years, foot structure and build’s evolution have
resulted in large modern single-toed horses.
The chart below shows the amount of leisure time enjoyed by men and
women of different employment status.
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Date: 12/10/2009
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The chart shows the number of hours of leisure time enjoyed by men and
women a typical week in the period 1998-1999, according to gender and
employment status.
Among those employed full-time, men on average had 30 hours of leisure,
whereas women had approximately 37 hours. Thee were no figures given
for male part-time worker, but female part-timers had 40 hours of leisure
time, only slightly more than women in full-time employment.
In the unemployed and retired categories, leisure showed an increase for
both sexes, as might have been expected. Men enjoyed more leisure time-
over 80 hours, compared with 70 hours for women.
Lastly, housewives enjoyed about 54 hours of leisure, on average. There
were no figures given for househusbands.
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Week: 6
Date: 12/10/2009
Content Correction
The chart shows the number of hours of leisure time enjoyed by men and
women a typical week in the period 1998-1999, according to gender and In a typical
week
employment status.
Among those employed full-time, men on average had 30 hours of leisure, 50
whereas women had approximately 37 hours. Thee were no figures given
for male part-time worker, but female part-timers had 40 hours of leisure
time, only slightly more than women in full-time employment.
In the unemployed and retired categories, leisure showed an increase for
both sexes, as might have been expected. Men enjoyed more leisure time-
over 80 hours, compared with 70 hours for women.
Lastly, housewives enjoyed about 54 hours of leisure, on average. There
were no figures given for househusbands.
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Week: 6
Date: 12/10/2009
Content Correction
The chart shows the number of hours of leisure time enjoyed by men and Another
word:
women a typical week in the period 1998-1999, according to gender and reflects /
illustrates
employment status.
Among those employed full-time, men on average had 30 hours of leisure,
50
whereas women had approximately 37 hours. Thee were no figures given
for male part-time worker, but female part-timers had 40 hours of leisure
time, only slightly more than women in full-time employment.
In the unemployed and retired categories, leisure showed an increase for
both sexes, as might have been expected. Men enjoyed more leisure ??? why
time-over 80 hours, compared with 70 hours for women.
Lastly, housewives enjoyed about 54 hours of leisure, on average. There repeated
were no figures given for househusbands.
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Week: 6
Date: 12/10/2009
Content Correction
The chart illustrates the number of hours of leisure time enjoyed by men
and women in a typical week in the period 1998-1999 according to gender
and employment status.
Among those employed full-time, men on average had 50 hours of leisure,
whereas women had approximately 37 hours. There were no figures given
for male part-time worker, but female part-timers had 40 hours of free
time, only slightly more than women in full-time employment.
In the unemployed and retired categories, leisure showed a remarkable
increase for both sexes. Men spent more leisure time-over 80 hours per
week, compared with 70 hours for women.
Lastly, housewives enjoyed about 54 hours of leisure, on average. There
were no figures given for househusbands.
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Week: 7
Date: 20/10/2009
Correction
Content
.The pie charts reflect people’s perceptions of whether education ought to
be poured more money on than health or public transport and an
investigation’s findings on raising taxes for the public services.
70% participants in an extensive pubic survey have the same agreement
that money should be spent on education service as apposed to 20% and
10% for attendants at disagreement and no answer respectively. Although
education is perceived as more worth-investing service than public
transport by 85% people investigated, it loses advantage over health
standing at 40% for support of pouring much more capital on and
exceeding 30 % participants insisting on greater expenditure of education
compared with health.
The fourth chart illustrates the people’s attitude to raising taxes for public
services such as education, health and public transport. Nearly 50% of
answers collected show the disapproval of increasing taxes as
approximately much as answers in favor of
Week: 7
Date: 20/10/2009
Correction
Content
.The pie charts reflect people’s perceptions of whether education ought to
be poured more money on than health or public transport and an ???
Expression
investigation’s findings on raising taxes for the public services.
70% participants in an extensive pubic survey have the same agreement
that money should be spent on education service as apposed to 20% and
10% for attendants at disagreement and no answer respectively. Although ???
education is perceived as more worth-investing service than public
transport by 85% people investigated, it loses advantage over health w.c
standing at 40% for support of pouring much more capital on and w.c
exceeding 30 % participants insisting on greater expenditure of education
compared with health.
The fourth chart illustrates the people’s attitude to raising taxes for public
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services such as education, health and public transport. Nearly 50% of % people
do not
answers collected show the disapproval of increasing taxes as know
approximately much as answers in favor of
Score:
Week: 7
Date: 20/10/2009
Content Correction
Week: 7
Date: 20/10/2009
Content
The pie charts reflect the results of an extensive public survey on people’s
perceptions towards education, health, public transport and raising taxes.
70% participants in the extensive pubic survey have agreed that money should be
spent on education service as apposed to 20% and 10% for attendants at
disagreement and no answer respectively. Although education is perceived as more
worth-investing service than public transport by 85% people investigated, it loses
ground to health standing at 40% for support of pouring much more capital on and
exceeding 30 % participants insisting on greater expenditure of education compared
with health.
The fourth chart illustrates the people’s attitude to raising taxes for public services
such as education, health and public transport. Nearly 50% of collected answers
show the disapproval of increasing taxes as approximately much as answers in
favor of. The remainder (about 3%) did not give any response at all.
It is clear that investment for education is the second priority among public services
as perceived by people in the survey.
Week: 8
Date: 27/10/2009
Write about the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European
country between 1979 and 2004.
Correction
Content
The graph illustrates changes in the amount of beef, lamb, chicken and fish
consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.
In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams
consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar
quantities (around 150 grams), while much less fish was consumed (just over 50
grams).
However, during this 25 year period, the consumption of beef and lamb fell
dramatically to nearly 100 drams and 55 grams respectively. The consumption
of fish also declined, but much less significantly to just below 50 grams, so
although it remained the least popular food, consumption levels were the most
stable.
The consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend, over
passing that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989. By 2004 it had soared to
almost 250 grams per person per week
Overall, the graph shows how the consumption of chicken increased
dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period.
Week: 8
Date: 27/10/2009
Write about the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European
country between 1979 and 2004.
Content Correction
The graph illustrates changes in the amount of beef, lamb, chicken and fish
consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.
In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams Among
consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar
quantities (around 150 grams), while much less fish was consumed (just over 50
grams).
However, during this 25 year period, the consumption of beef and lamb fell
dramatically to nearly 100 drams and 55 grams respectively. The consumption
of fish also declined, but much less significantly to just below 50 grams, so Should be
Omitted
although it remained the least popular food, consumption levels were the most
stable.
The consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend, over What do
you mean?
passing that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989. By 2004 it had soared
to almost 250 grams per person per week
Overall, the graph shows how the consumption of chicken increased
dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period
Name: Pham Duc Long 2nd Marker: NGUYEN THI HONG NHUNG
Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class : 07E10
Score:
Week: 8
Date: 27/10/2009
Write about the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European
country between 1979 and 2004.
Correction
Content
The graph illustrates changes in the amount of beef, lamb, chicken and fish
consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.
In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 Very
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grams consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar
quantities (around 150 grams), while much less fish was consumed (just over 50
grams).
However, during this 25 year period, the consumption of beef and lamb fell
dramatically to nearly 100 drams and 55 grams respectively. The consumption
of fish also declined, but much less significantly to just below 50 grams, so ???
although it remained the least popular food, consumption levels were the most
stable.
The consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend, over So
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passing that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989. By 2004 it had soared
to almost 250 grams per person per week
Overall, the graph shows how the consumption of chicken increased
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dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period
conclusion,
Week: 8
Date: 27/10/2009
Write about the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European
country between 1979 and 2004.
Content Correction
The graph illustrates changes in the amount of beef, lamb, chicken and fish
consumed in a particular European country between 1979 and 2004.
In 1979 beef was by far the most popular of these foods, with about 225 grams
consumed per person per week. Lamb and chicken were eaten in similar
quantities (around 150 grams), while much less fish was consumed (just over 50
grams).
However, during this 25 year period, the consumption of beef and lamb fell
dramatically to nearly 100 drams and 55 grams respectively. The consumption
of fish also declined, but much less significantly to just below 50 grams, so
although it remained the least popular food, consumption levels were the most
stable.
The consumption of chicken, on the other hand, showed an upward trend,
overtaking that of lamb in 1980 and that of beef in 1989. By 2004 it had soared
to almost 250 grams per person per week
Overall, the graph shows how the consumption of chicken increased
dramatically while the popularity of these other foods decreased over the period.
Week: 10
Date: 12 /11 /2009
Content Correction
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Date: 12 / 11 2009
Content Correction
On the other hand, there was a credible decline in the percentage of pupils
attending Greystone High, falling from 90% in 1995 down to 70% in
Should be
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Date: 12 / 11 /2009
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luck!
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Date: 12 / 11 /2009
Content
The table illustrates the percentage of pupils entering higher education from five
secondary schools, namely Royston Academy, Greystone High, Harble Secondary,
Fairfield Girls and Crackend Boys from 1995 till 2000.
The greatest increase was in Harble Secondary, rising from 30% in 1995 to 80% in
2000. Next came Fairfield, increasing 24% over the same period from the
beginning point of 65%. Pupils passing into Royston Academy and Crackend Boys
went up by 10% and 2% in turn between 1995 and 2000 inclusive.
On the other hand, there was a credible decline in the percentage of pupils attending
Greystone High, falling from 90% in 1995 down to 70% in 2000.
It is undeniable that among five secondary schools, Harble Secondary was in 1st
rank of the percentage of pupils’ entering high school while Greystone High
decreased the number of entrance pupils during the period 1995-2000
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Date: 18 / 11 /2009
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Week: 12
Date: 27/ 11/2009
Content Correction
The maps show the changes in the size of West Farm and in the value of the
land per hectare over a period of 90 years from 1900 to 1990.
The area of West Farm fluctuated erratically. In 1990, West Farm was 5.000
hectares large. Over the next 25 years, it was narrowed to 850 hectares but
doubled after 15 years later. Between 1970 and 1990, the size of West Farm
remarkably increased from 5000 hectares to 3.500 hectares.
Contrary to going up and down about the area, the value of the land per hectare
was always upward trend, dramatically rocketed with only 1USD at the
beginning of 20th century to 20 USD in 1925. From the 2nd decade till 4th decade
of the 20thcentury, there was a slight increase of money collected per hectare
(about 5 USA). Next came 1970 and 1990 with credible numbers 100 USA and
125 USA per hectare respectively.
It is remarked that the value of the land in West Farm per hectare sharply soared
during the first 9th decade of 20th century as opposed to fluctuations in the area.
Name: Pham Duc Long 1st Marker: PHAM THI HOA PHUONG
Group: 07.1.E10 – VNU – ULIS Class : 07E10
Score:
Week: 12
Date: 27 / 11/2009
Content Correction
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land per hectare over a period of 90 years from 1900 to 1990. very
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hectares large. Over the next 25 years, it was narrowed to 850 hectares but
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of the 20thcentury, there was a slight increase of money collected per hectare in
(about 5 USA). Next came 1970 and 1990 with credible numbers 100 USA and
125 USA per hectare respectively.
It is remarked that the value of the land in West Farm per hectare sharply soared
during the first 9th decade of 20th century as opposed to fluctuations in the area.
Week: 12
Date: 27 / 11 /2009
Correction
Content
The maps show the changes in the size of West Farm and in the value of the
land per hectare over a period of 90 years from 1900 to 1990.
The area of West Farm fluctuated erratically. In 1990, West Farm was 5.000
hectares large. Over the next 25 years, it was narrowed to 850 hectares but Any
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doubled after 15 years later. Between 1970 and 1990, the size of West Farm word?
remarkably increased from 5000 hectares to 3.500 hectares.
Contrary to going up and down about the area, the value of the land per hectare
was always upward trend, dramatically rocketed with only 1USD at the
beginning of 20th century to 20 USD in 1925. From the 2nd decade till 4th decade
Rocketed
of the 20thcentury, there was a slight increase of money collected per hectare from
(about 5 USA). Next came 1970 and 1990 with credible numbers 100 USA and
125 USA per hectare respectively.
It is remarked that the value of the land in West Farm per hectare sharply soared
during the first 9th decade of 20th century as opposed to fluctuations in the area.
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Week: 12
Date: 27 /11 /2009
Correction
Content
The maps show the changes in the size of West Farm and in the value of the
land per hectare over a period of 90 years from 1900 to 1990.
The area of West Farm fluctuated erratically. In 1990, West Farm was 5.000
hectares large. Over the next 25 years, it was narrowed to 850 hectares but
doubled after 15 years later. Between 1970 and 1990, the size of West Farm
remarkably increased from 5000 hectares to 3.500 hectares.
Contrary to going up and down about the area, the value of the land per hectare
was always upward trend, dramatically rocketed from 1USD at the beginning of
20th century to 20 USD in 1925. From the 2nd decade till 4th decade of the
20thcentury, there was a slight increase in money collected per hectare (about 5
USA). Next went up 1970 and 1990 with credible numbers 100 USA and 125
USA per hectare respectively.
It is remarked that the value of the land in West Farm per hectare sharply soared
during the first 9th decade of 20th century as opposed to fluctuations in the area.
Week: 13
Date: 2/ 12 /2009
Dear Kien,
I was glad to know that I enjoyed three month joyful summer holiday in America
where you always dreamed to study. 2OO9 summer holiday was also the most
wonderful one I have ever had.
I spent the first ten days of July volunteering for HULIS’ hostel where I have been
living for nearly 2 years. Helping the 12th grade students attend the university
entrance actually motivated my passion for social activities. As a result, I become
more grown-up and confident at communication with people. Moreover, it was the
first time I took part in an international IT forum called WITFOR 2009 where I
practiced my speaking English skills as well as expressed my understandings of
information technology. I met Prime Minister Nguyen Tan Dung at the big hall who
praised our team “Supporter” for our professional service style.
I explored so much English grammar knowledge when advised to study before by
some students of K40 in preparation for the fifth semester. English grammar at
university seemed to be more interesting and complicated than I studied at high
school. As a result of my efforts, I have, up to now, had a systematic understanding
of it.
At present, I am a third year student with an eleven subject timetable to cover? I
am considering how your new school and friends in the United States are. Remind
to rewrite to me as soon as possible.
Best wishes,
Long
Week: 13
Date: 3/ 12 /2009
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