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WP1
Text from my
initial WP
submission:
(a phrase,
sentence,
paragraph, idea,
move,
punctuation,
piece of evidence,
etc.)
An observation or
question I
received from De
Piero or a
classmate:
The change(s) I
made to what I
initially wrote:
(ie, the change[s] I
made to column 1)
How this
change
impacts my
paper:
Consequently,
the
process of reading as well as writing- an
apps description has
become
worth
of
analysis since it is a
very important step
in the process of
getting the phone
apps we constantly
use and that become
part of our everyday
routines.
I need more of a
specific, driving thesis
statement, Josue. What,
exactly, are you going to
be arguing here? What
about the process of
reading? What specific
points are you going to
use to make your case?
What about conventions
of an app's description
will you be focusing on?
People
read
app
descriptions to know
what the features of
an app are before
downloading it, but
app descriptions can
be deceiving and it is
important for users to
know how to analyze
them in order to not
be fooled and get apps
that
meet
their
expectations.
By rewriting
my thesis and
making it clear
that my main
argument was
going to be
how analyzing
app
descriptions
can prevent
users from
getting
disappointed, I
could establish
my main
argument and
give a hint to
the reader of
the things that
will be
discussed.
As mentioned
before, every year
technology becomes
more and more
accessible to people
around the world
Before
analyzing the app
descriptions genre,
we need to
understand one key
element that
determines this
genres conventions
and rhetorical
features. Its
audience. According
to the online site
I made sure to
start the
paragraph
explaining the
reason why this
information
was relevant to
my argument
and made sure
to relate them
to the genres
eMarketer
audience.
I made sure to
explain why
app developers
try to use a
simple
language. This
allows the
reader to see
the reason why
Im mentioning
the use of
simple
language and
also helps them
realize what a
simple
language is
accounting for.
I deleted the
sentence.
By deleting the
sentence, I got
rid of
information
that was not
useful to
support or
contradict my
argument. By
doing so, I
could
concentrate on
talking about
the language
used rather
than how it is
not technical.
Rearranged the
entries in alphabetical
order.
Having a
proper
citations page
will give the
confidence to
the reader that
the author at
least knows the
basic rules of
academic. That
would stablish
higher
credibility than
if that is not
shown.
Works Cited
WP2
Text from my
initial WP
submission:
(a phrase,
sentence,
paragraph, idea,
move,
punctuation,
piece of evidence,
etc.)
An observation or
question I
received from De
Piero or a
classmate:
The change(s) I
made to what I
initially wrote:
(ie, the change[s] I
made to column 1)
How this
change
impacts my
paper:
Although academic
journals are known for
backing up and
exposing information
better than online
sources, an analysis of
these articles will
show how these roles
have switched since
online articles became
the only source of
information for LSD.
Rewriting my
thesis
statement
made my paper
be clearer in its
argument. That
way, it will be
easier for he
reader to
understand
why certain
things
throughout the
paper are
mentioned. It
also makes the
organization of
the paper make
sense.
By using this
move, Harris makes
sure the audience
feels comfortable with
the information given
by letting them know
that it is backed up by
another source.
By specifying
that what was
done was a
move I could
talk about the
effect of that
move. That
clarifies that
the main point
of the sentence
was to explain
the purpose of
the use of
references
rather than
explaining the
quote itself.
Although its been
seen how both
academic articles are
very different in the
way they expose their
information,
Although its
been seen how both
academic articles
backed up their
information very
differently, they are
similar in one way.
Since I
specifically
been talking
about how the
different pieces
backed up their
information, I
could be more
specific in what
I mean by
them being
different.
Adding
specificity
doesnt let the
reader feeling
like something
hasnt been
talked about.
its information
seriously since most
online articles about
LSD tend to contain a
good amount of
references and
sources. After
thinking about this,
one can realize how
much credibility a
I deleted the
whole paragraph.
This paragraph
was too forced
and repetitive
so I decided to
concise its
information in
the previous
paragraph.
This way, the
flow of ideas
was going to be
better, hence
the reader was
going to
understand
better.
Since Albert
Hofmann synthesized
LSD in 1938 and
after the CIA did
atrocious things with
it in their program
MKULTRA, LSD has
always been a
subject of
controversy
Since Albert
Hofmann synthesized
LSD in 1938 and after
the CIA experimented
with it in their mind
control program
MKULTRA, LSD has
always been a subject
of controversy.
By avoiding the
word things I
avoid having to
explain what
all the
atrocious
things were
and rather just
specify that
they were
experiments
about mind
control.