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One day, the old king gets very sick. He asks the little
prince to come to his bed, and tells the little prince that it is
time for him to take the responsibility of being a king.
When the little prince gets into the town, he hears the citizens
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Jing Lan
Writing 2
Professor Wilson
6/3/2016
WP3 Revise
I found a very interesting fact about science museum when I went there with my sister last
year. In every section of the science museum, there are two boards on the wall, which are on
different height introducing this section. An adult can see the higher one horizontally, and a kid
can see the lower one horizontally. Take the Magic Optics as an example; they all talk about
how to use two mirrors to make an object invisible. The higher board uses a lot of texts to tell
people the knowledge of physics and optics. Howeverthe lower board, which is for children,
uses cartoon instead of texts to explain the phenomenon. Inspired by this experience, I would
like to translate a popular science article for adults, called The Tooth Decay Process: How to
Reverse It and Avoid a Cavity, into a childrens book. In order to keep its goal of protecting
childrens tooth, by changing the audience from parents to kids, the genre will be completely
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different., because the audience will determine the writing style, vocabularies, and the tones, and
these three aspects will determine the genre of a text.
Audience can determine the writing style. Compare to the parents as audience, children have
two remarkable features: low education status and lack of concentration and patience. The
audience should be able to help address the problem.(Carroll49) If I want my audience to help
me achieve my goal, but I have to be more willing to finish reading my paper. Thats why I
changed this popular science article into an adventure of a little prince. The adventure is a
complete and dramatic story and full of pictures, so that it can attract children to read on. Besides,
when I read the original article, I tried to read as a writer, the goal is to carefully consider the
choices the author made and the techniques that he or she used, and then decide whether I want
to make those same choices or use those same techniques in my own writing (73 Bunn).
Therefore, I decided to keep all his scientific researches to back me up, and I will get rid of all
scientific education. For example, in the article, the author explains to the parents why they
should
watch
their
children
brushing
the
teeth.
If
children
regularly
consume
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younger), their permanent teeth may develop white lines or flecks called dental fluorosis. On
the other hand, in childrens book, children have no patience with a long sentence and hoping for
a more straightforward expression. So, I changed it to Oh, remember! Never drink it! I also
reduced the use of primary sources and made lots of changes to the scientific explanations. For
example, for the sentence in the original article A cavity is permanent damage that a dentist has
to repair with a filling. I changed it to Tooth castle is broken. It is much simpler.
After we have an outline of the texts, audience can determine the vocabularies. In order to
show its academic, a popular science article usually uses a lot of terminologies. However,
children do not understand complex vocabularies. Therefore, after I deleted plenty of texts, I
started to replace the complex vocabularies with simple words. For example, the article has a
sentence said the repeated cycles of acid attacks cause the enamel to continue to lose minerals.
I replaced enamel with tooth, and I replaced acid with soda, then the sentence becomes
soda and sugar will attack our tooth castle. I used simple words to express the same idea, so
that it is easier for children to understand.
Audience can determine the type of language used, the formality of the discourse, the
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medium or delivery of the rhetoric, and even the types of reason used to make the rhetors
argument (Carroll, 50). By doing this genre translation, I learned that before we translate genre,
the most important thing is to get to know the change of the audience. In this way, it will be
easier for the readers to accept our articles and we will be more likely to achieve our goal.
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Work Cited
Dirk, Kerry. Navigating Genres. Writing Spaces: Reading on Writing Volume 1(2010):
Space Tourism by Virgin Galactic. Advertisement. NY Times, n.d. Web. 3Mar. 2014
Bunn, Mike How to Read Like a Writer. Writing Spaces: Reading on Writing 2(2011):