Progression of work

After completing the first draft of my graphic narrative, I concluded that the
drawings werent bold enough and appeared slightly faded. I wanted my
narrative to stand out and be easy to see and follow. Therefore, I recreated it
using bolder pens to outline it more rather than using soft pencils.

Here is the original graphic narrative:

Amended graphic narrative:

As you can see, the colours and lines appear much stronger after I changed it. I
think it relates to my young target audience more because younger people are
interested in something that is visually more appealing and like more colours.