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Jessie Kimmelman
Mrs. Thomas
UWRT 1102
25 April 2016
Choose a song or musical composition that communicates your experience with writing and
UWRT 1102. Consider including a video of the song. Explain your choice.
If I were to include a song to describe my writing experience in UWRT 1102, I would choose
Survivor by Destinys Child. The chorus of the song says I'm a survivor, I'm not gon' give up,
I'm not gon' stop, I'm gon' work harder, I'm a survivor, I'm gonna make it, I will survive, Keep on
survivin'. I can definitely relate to these lyrics. When completing my thesis paper, there were
many times where I thought I couldnt do it. With the help and support of my peers through
every step of this writing process, we were able to push through it with flying colors. We not
only came out on the other side as survivors, but as new and improved writers!
If you were to teach this class, what ideas would you emphasize?
If I were to teach this class, I would heavily emphasize the idea of annotated bibliographies and
how important they are. I would do this by maybe doing a shorter assignment prior to the thesis
where a quality annotated bibliography is vital. This way, when the student reaches the point in
the semester where its time to begin the thesis paper, they will already understand how
important it is. When starting this assignment, I leniently completed my annotated bibliographies
thinking that it was an excessive and tedious assignment. There was a point where I actually
went back and redid some of my annotated bibliographies. I did this because once I started
writing my actual thesis paper, I realized how important these annotated bibliographies actually
are. Once I did a thorough job on those, writing my thesis paper became so much easier. It was a

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matter of combining all of my annotated bibs and linking them together to get the end result of
my 10+ page paper.
Explain how your understanding of rhetorical knowledge has changed over the course of the
semester using at least three examples from your writing. Ex. Did you shift an assignment to
better fit a particular genre like a proposal?
When beginning this course, I had a slight understanding of rhetorical knowledge. I was unaware
that there was a specific term for it though. With that being said, my rhetorical knowledge
improved greatly throughout the process of this semester. Rhetorical knowledge is the ability to
identify and apply strategies across a range of texts and writing situations. Using their own
writing processes and approaches, writers compose with intention, understanding how genre,
audience, purpose, and context impact writing choice. I used this when writing my thesis by
applying the templates discussed in They Say, I Say as well as in class. I was able to modify
these examples and sprinkle them throughout my paragraphs. I used it most often when trying to
incorporate the credibility of my sources. An example of this could be when I said Laura Fraser,
the author of a book called Losing It, wrote about Americas obsession with weight and the
industry that feeds on it. Another place in my paper where I did this to show someones
credibility was when I wrote This project gave us a chance to see what conformity really looks
like said one of the students from Bethany Lutheran College (Kent). With this sentence, I
combined a quote with information that would provide it with credibility.
Discuss your composing processes. Ex. Did you conduct additional research while revising or
after consulting a colleague? Provide at least three examples to support your assertion.
After meeting with my peer review group, I almost entirely rewrote my thesis paper. They not
only told me what I had done wrong, but they provided me with comments to help me correct my

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mistakes. One thing that my group did was comment on things such as maybe change this to
say. An example of this could be when one of my peer review group members commented
since you just used the word also in the last sentence, trying saying in addition instead. By
seeing the way other people would word things, I was able to get rid of my redundancy. My peer
review group also helped me continue writing my paper when I was in a rut. There was a
moment where I didnt know what to write about anymore. They helped me find out ways where
I could elaborate on the information that I had already incorporated. This helped me lengthen my
paper, but it also made my paper much stronger and easier to understand. In addition, it was
helpful for our own teacher, Mrs. Thomas, to be in the group. Ultimately, she is the one grading
our final thesis so her input was very useful when peer editing.
Provide at least three examples of your knowledge of conventions. Ex. sentence level changes,
MLA citations.
I walked into this assignment thinking that this would obviously be the easiest part because
weve been learning about these things since we were in elementary school english. Once I
began writing my thesis, I would get so caught up in the information and the direction I was
going in with this paper, that I would almost look over the fundamentals of writing. I first
noticed this when we met up with our peer review group for the first time. They were being nitpicky as I had asked, and they found all of my conventional mistakes. Examples of these simple
mistakes included things like forgetting a comma after some of my conjunctions or incorrectly
using a semicolon since its not something I use very often in my writing. Once I fixed those and
continued writing my thesis, I began struggling with my MLA citations. When completing my
works cited page, I almost started panicking. When I would do this in high school, I would
always just go to easybib.com. Whatever easybib.com gave me, I would copy and paste into my

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works cited page. In class, we were strongly advised against this; therefore, I was clueless on
how to do this part. I relied heavily on Purdue Owl to help me complete my sources. This was
not only time consuming, but rather tedious. It was also frustrating because I couldnt do my intext citations until I figured out my resources.
Critical Reflection: A) Explain the importance of reflection in learning processes. B) Explain
what you think is important in providing commentary on others work and receiving commentary
on your own. C) Provide at least three examples of your nuanced use of commentary in your
writing projects.
A) Reflection is definitely a key when learning how to become a better writer. Without
reflection, you dont really sit back and think about the countless steps and constant
improvement it took you to get to your final paper. Yes, its already turned in and over, but what
about the next time I get assigned a ten page paper? It is important for someone to reflect and
think about the steps it took them to arrive at their outcome so they can do it again.
B) I think that providing and receiving commentary is unbelievably important. If it were not for
the peer review groups commentary, I would have struggled unbelievably with this paper to the
point where it would have been nearly impossible. There were several points where I couldnt
think of what else to write about. Their commentary helped me elaborate on certain parts of my
paper. This not only helped me reach the page limit, but it also made my paper more
understandable to the reader. It is also helpful to get several different perspectives and opinions.
Everyone thinks differently. In an assignment like this where you are asked to incorporate several
different views and support each, a person with another perspective could be almost vital. With
that being said, it is also important to give commentary on your peers papers. In doing so, you
are helping them improve their paper and improve as a writer. You could be providing them with

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new ideas and possibly a different perspective. By doing this, you could spark ideas in their mind
for new things to write about.
C) While my peer review group edited my paper, they would often give me advice on things I
could change. They suggested I add experiments to my paper to give it more credibility. I
thought this was a great idea, therefore there are many examples of scientists testing the idea of
societal conformity throughout my paper. They also said I should mention the guy I saw in the
dining hall with the mohawk along with my paragraphs on nonconformity. I thought this was
great because it was something the reader could easily relate to.With that being said, there was
also a suggestion that I should include global examples and how conformity is viewed differently
from a global perspective. Although this wouldve been great to research, I thought it was too
much to take on. This was too general of a topic for me to include in this paper along with
everything else. I touched on it slightly in terms of using it as a detail instead of a whole new
topic. Including this, in my opinion, would have completely distracted the reader from the point
of my paper. This is an example of a time where I didnt necessarily do what my group
suggested. Most of their suggestions were helpful, but there were a few that would have taken
my paper in a direction that I did not want it to go.