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Does the title grab your interest? Does it suggest the essays content? If there is not a title yet, can you offer a
good suggestion? N/A
Introduction
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Body Paragraphs
1. Underline the topic sentence in each body paragraph.
2. To what extent does the analysis of the evidence convince you? Why? He has worthy evidence
3. What points need further development? None
4. Are there points that the author did not consider but should in order to strengthen the argument? Maybe add
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receive the care needed, but prisons have become a huge business.
Where in the essay are you least convinced by the authors argument or point? Why? When he talks about the
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laws that have been enacted and what they include. Cause there is no evidence
What words/phrases does the writer use to connect ideas/reasons? Also, besides, furthermore, in addition,
similarly, in other words, for example, for instance, although, but, despite the fact that, however, as a result,
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Opposing Viewpoints
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Conclusion
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Does the conclusion provide closure and offer an interesting final insight that helps you to understand the
significance of the experience? How could the writer make it more effective? Yes. Include more detailed
information on the laws.
Overall
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Having read the rest of the draft, did you find that the introduction gave you a good idea of what the author
actually will address in the rest of the paper? If not, what is the main point that the author seems to be making?
Yes.
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Are there any points of the argument that don't seem to fit - where the author seems to go off on a tangent? Are
there any points that don't really seem relevant to the discussion at hand? no
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What single change would make the most improvement in this essay?
Include more info on laws and more qoutes
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Look at each subsequent quote/summary used in the paper. Is the quote relevant/appropriate to the topic? Did
the author frame the quote or summary properly with a quotation sandwich (1. A statement that introduces the
author and identifies the title, 2. The quote itself, 3. An explanation of the quotes meaning and relevance to the
authors topic?) Yes
Does the writer use the second person pronoun you? If so, highlight it. No
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Does the author use phrases such as I think and/or I believe? If so, draw a line through the phrase to
determine if it is necessary. No
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MLA Guidelines
Heading
Page numbers in upper right-hand corner
Indent block quotes 1
Works Cited page
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This draft just needs a few corrections and a little more info and it will be complete.