RaeQuan Peterson

Fall 2015

Professor. M. McCampbell
English 101
03 November 2015 102/135
RaeQuan You have worked hard on this essay, and you meet the requirements. I think you can
make some improvements, if this is the essay you choose to revise at the end of the course.
Check out my comments below and let me know if you have questions.

You should include a caption for the image, including its source. You also need a title for the
essay.

Sexual abuse is sometimes overlooked by parents and adults because they would expect for a
child to come to them if something like that was to ever happen. Child protective services agency
investigate about 55% of the child sexual abuse incidents reported to them (Reporting Child
Sexual Abuse). The picture above shows a very graphic image of Disney Princess Ariel kissing
her father. This image was used to promote the wrongful act of sexual abuse. Sexual abuse is
unwanted sexual activity, with perpetrators using force, making threats or taking advantage of
victims not able to give consent. Most victims and perpetrators know each other. More than half
of all reported sexual assaults happen to children ages seventeen and under (The Issue of Sexual
Abuse). Sexual abuse can happen to anyone. By showing this very graphic image of Disney
princess Ariel it will help spread awareness around the world about this serious topic.
Dont double-space between paragraphs.
Most sexually abused victims often tend not to talk about the event and what happened in
the past. According to the Handbook of Child Sexual Abuse it states large national surveys
conducted with adults who were promised anonymity document that the majority of people
abused as children never report during childhood (Steele 101). Meaning the children were too
embarrassed and scared of what people would have thought of them or the way they wouldve
been looked at by society. Todays society is so harsh and will beat a person down every chance
they have. People have to remember that in a childs adolescent years they often look for
acceptance in a place or person where they feel the most comfortable and safe. When a child is
sexually abused at a young age it breaks their trust for certain people and the way they looked at
them after the perpetrator has crossed the line by committing the sexual act. Participants
articulated a variety of factors that influenced childrens reluctance, including a close
relationship with the abuser, fear of not being believed, embarrassment and shame, & concern

for the welfare of others (Anderson, Martin, Mullen, Romans, & Herbison, 1993; Fleming,
1997)(SIC).

Victims that are young do not consent to sexual abuse because they usually are not able to
understand fully what is being proposed to them especially if its coming from someone that has
higher power over them and they feel they have to obey and follow their rules. For example a
coach, teacher, priest, foster or step parent are some highly known perpetrators of sexual abuse.
If you look at Ariels father in the picture he looks very passionate about the kiss. The body
language shows it all; look at the way his body is leaning in towards her and her arms are
somewhat pushing off of him as if she knows something isnt right. About 90% of children that
are sexually abused know who their abuser is; only 10% of children are sexually abused by a
stranger (The Issue of Child Sexual Abuse). Perpetrators often tell children that if they tell
what happened to them theyll hurt their loved ones or take away something the child likes. They
try to bribe and control young innocent minds that cant make proper decisions for themselves or
have the ability to say no. Parents have a difficult time talking about sex and may also have
trouble talking about sexual abuse (Kinnear 32.) If parents wait too long to discuss the topic of
sexual abuse with their children it may be too late; most parental discussions with children
occurred when the child was approximately nine years old. Studies have shown that at least onethird of all child sexual abuse occurs before the child reaches age nine. (Kinnear 32.) This is a
really good paragraph.

There are many different types of treatments for victims that were sexually abused. In
clinical evaluation, the goal is to understand childrens perceptions of their traumatic exposures,
rather than obtain forensically sound disclosures, as these perceptions are most important for
treatment (Truss 143). Therapist try to make this process as easy as possible because they dont
really want to ask or make the child reenact the traumatizing event. Victims often suffer from
PTSD, depression, anxiety, and even sexual behavior problems. Therapist observe a childs
behaviors towards parents, other children, and even to the therapist.
Here is where you should discuss the campaign initiated by the person who did the graphic.
Give some background and show how it relates to helping raise awareness of the issue.
People that are sexually abused should not have to feel like the victim and should have a
voice in society. They shouldnt have to live a life of constantly not knowing who to trust
because they were taught at a young age to not trust certain people because of the things that they
did to them in their younger years.

Works Cited
1. Kinnear, Karen L. Childhood Sexual Abuse: A Reference Handbook. Santa Barbara,
Calif: ABC-CLIO, 2007. Print.
2. Goodyear-Brown, Paris. Handbook of Child Sexual Abuse: Identification, Assessment,
and Treatment. Hoboken, N.J: John Wiley & Sons, 2012. Print.
3. Steele, Linda Cordisco.The Forensic Interview. Handbook of Child Sexual Abuse
Identification, Assessment, and Treatment. ED. Paris Goodyear-Brown. Hoboken, NJ;
John Wiley & Sons, INC. Pp 99-119.
4.

Reporting Child Sexual Abuse. Darkness to Light 2013, Web Nov 19th 2015.

5.

The Issue of Sexual Abuse. Darkness to Light 2013, Web Dec 1ST 2015.
General Education Rubric: English 101/102: College Composition I/II

General
Education
Competency

Written and
Oral
Communicatio

Related
Assignment
Requirement
5 points
10 points
Introduction 5
points5 very
good!

4
Exemplary
Exceeds
Expectations
5 points
9 - 10
Presents a unified
central idea that is
supported by

3
Accomplished
Meets Expectations
3 4 points
6 - 8 points
Presents a unified central
idea that is supported by
relevant evidence.

2
Developing
Approaches
Expectations
2 points
3 5 points
Presents a unified central
idea that is supported by
adequate evidence.

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Thesis 10
points6 needs
to include the
awareness
campaign
Conclusion 5
points more
insight 3
Structure
(including TS)
10 points 9
Coherence 10
points 9

Errors 1 point
per error-3 =
17

Image
description
and analysis
7

Critical
Analysis and

Diction/clarity
10 points you
8
10 points

Describe
features of the
image and
analyze their
significance to
the social or
cultural impact
which leads to
your research
into a broader
topic.
NOTE: this
description and
analysis sets the
stage for your
informed opinion
(thesis) which is
supported by
thoughtful
research and
reasoning.
20 points
Argue for your
position by

exceptional
evidence and
displays unusual
insight.

ad
Uses a logical order for
paragraphs.

Uses a logical order for

paragraphs.

Free of errors in
usage/mechanics, but for
minor errors which do not
impede meaning.

Contains some major

grammatical or usage
errors or many minor
errors.

Style reflects appropriate

vocabulary and varied
sentence patterns.

Style may include

imprecise diction,
ineffective transitions,
and unvaried sentence
patterns.

9 10

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35

Identifies more
than three
features of the
image, describes
them in the
context of the
broader
researched topic
and shows a
thoughtful
connection
between the
images features
and how they
reflect the specific
issues related to
your thesis and
subsequent
research.

Identifies three features

of image and describes
them in detail. The
description leads to
interpretation of their
significance to a broader
social or cultural issue
which you will present a
well-developed thesis,
supported by expert
evidence and insightful
reasoning.

Identifies one or two

features and describes
them. There may be
some interpretation
which will lead to
identifying a broader
social or cultural issue,
but the connection is not
made explicit. There
may be a general
reference to a thesis
which will be supported
with researched
evidence.

Ge
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wh
Th
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ma
lar
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int
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17 20 points
Ideas are
thoroughly

13 16 points
Ideas are developed and
presented in a logical

8 12 points
Ideas are mostly
developed and presented

0
Ide
an

Uses a logical
order for
paragraphs and
presents them in
an interesting or
original manner.
Free of errors in
usage/mechanics,
but for minor
errors which do
not impede
meaning.

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Co
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St
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Style reflects
precise and vivid
vocabulary and
varied sentence
patterns.

Reasoning 13
Needs to
include
description of
awareness
campaign

generating
reasons and
providing
evidence for
your views.
Details/RENNS;
at least three
are cited
20 points

Information
Literacy 15

5 points
Use a minimum
of three
academically
appropriate
secondary
sources in
addition to any
assigned
primary
source/s. 5
points5

Demonstrate
academic
integrity through
source
integration and
documentation.
5 points 4

5 points3

5 points 3

Technological
Competence 7

The inserted
object should be
relevant to the
content of the
essay and
should be placed

developed and
presented in a
logical manner
that is easy to
follow with clear
reasoning.
Displays insightful,
in-depth reasoning
and depth of
thought.
5 points
Exceeds the
number of
required sources;
sources meet the
highest standards
for credibility and
relevance.

Source information
is introduced with
appropriate
qualifiers and
accompanied by
comments
clarifying its
relevance to thesis
support.
Source information
is smoothly and
effectively
paraphrased,
summarized, or
quoted.
Sources are
correctly
documented in
parenthetical
citation and on a
Works Cited page
or Bibliography as
appropriate to the
style format in
use.
The inserted
object is especially
suited/ related to
the essay thesis or
other content, and
the object

manner that is easy to

follow with clear
reasoning.

in a mostly logical
manner that is easy to
follow.

Displays moderate depth

in reasoning and thought.

Displays an attempt at
depth in thought.

3 4 points
Incorporates the required
number of sources;
sources meet minimum
standards for credibility
and relevance.

2 points
Incorporates the required
number of sources; some
sources do not meet
minimum standards for
credibility and/or
relevance.

Inc
th
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so
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Source information is
introduced with qualifiers
and sometimes
accompanied by
comments clarifying its
relevance to thesis
development.

Source information is
simply inserted with
qualifiers or other
attempts at source
integration; source
relevance to thesis
development is
sometimes unclear.

So
sim
qu
att
int
so
th
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Attempts are made, but

sources are not correctly
documented in
parenthetical citation and
on a Works Cited page or
Bibliography as
appropriate to the style
format in use.

So
un
pa
Wo
cit

The inserted object has

marginal connection to
the essay thesis or other
content, or the object
placement lacks smooth
integration in the essay.

Th
litt
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co
ha
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Source information is
sometimes paraphrased
or summarized, not
exclusively quoted.
Sources are correctly
documented in
parenthetical citation and
on a Works Cited page or
Bibliography as
appropriate to the style
format in use.

The inserted object

clearly relates to the
essay thesis or other
content, and the object
placement is smoothly
integrated without any

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Di
illo

Local and
Global
Diversity 3

thoughtfully
within the
essay. 5
points4 needs
a caption

placement is
smoothly
integrated without
any visual
awkwardness.

Use appropriate
style format for
essay, including
font and margin
size, as well as
header and page
number location.
5 points3
needs a title
and do not
space in
between
paragraphs
In analyzing the
issue, consider
the social,
historical, and/or
political factors
at play.
5 points

Document format
follows style
guidelines
perfectly.

Includes
thoughtful and
insightful analysis
that demonstrates
an aware-ness of
social/historical/
political factors.

visual awkwardness.

no
th

Document format follows

style guidelines with only
one minor alteration.

Document format follows

style guidelines with only
minor departures.

Do
sty
so

Includes references to
social/historical/political
factors and shows
moderate/acceptable
depth or development in
analyzing those factors.

Includes reference(s) to
social/historical/political
factors but shows little
depth or development in
analyzing those factors.

Inc
so
fac
lac
rel